Hidden 11 mos ago Post by Artymis
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This sheet is alright. However a few things need to be fixed. Firstly, the formatting on the sheet is wrong so if you could do me a favour and fix it or delete the components you're not using, that'd be a hand. Second thing that needs to be addressed is the spider paralysis. Whilst not inherently overpowered, it needs definition to how long it takes to activate and what said paralysis does to the body. More definition here if possible please. Thirdly, I'd like to see more backstory, maybe some specific events from her past that you could bring up in order to help define her character further.

Fix up these things and we'll be good to go.






This character sheet is good and accepted. Feel free to post it in the character tab.
Hidden 11 mos ago Post by Demous
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Here's my mostly complete CS. I'm only missing the Former life which I'll post later

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Here's my mostly complete CS. I'm only missing the Former life which I'll post later



This is good to go. You can add the former life whenever you think of something, feel free to post it in the character tab.

@jynmi88 I'm pleased with the changes to your character, feel free to post it.
Hidden 11 mos ago Post by Artymis
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IC is out everyone. If you're stuck for ideas posting, you can latch onto my character and I'll bail you out.
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I'm currently recovering from a flu so give me a few days to finish this off, hopefully, before I post.
Hidden 11 mos ago Post by Kaesus
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I finally managed to make the changes I was asked to in my CS, sorry that it took so long. Tell me if I can paste it in the Characters tab and jump in the IC

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Alright, good changes so far. Only a few more details and we're good to go. Firstly, as I've said with the other kido based characters, at this point in the roleplay no-one will be able to cast Kido above 50 without incantation so we can change that. Add a kido spellbook as well so we know what you're capable of using as well. The arrows are fine as long as they're physical constructs after being summoned by the reiatsu, and the final change I'd like you to make is regarding the character age. 32 is exceptionally young, so maybe bump it up 20-100 years if at all possible to make it more realistic to the sccenario. Once you've made those changes, just let me know and we'll be good to go.
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Alright, good changes so far. Only a few more details and we're good to go. Firstly, as I've said with the other kido based characters, at this point in the roleplay no-one will be able to cast Kido above 50 without incantation so we can change that. Add a kido spellbook as well so we know what you're capable of using as well. The arrows are fine as long as they're physical constructs after being summoned by the reiatsu, and the final change I'd like you to make is regarding the character age. 32 is exceptionally young, so maybe bump it up 20-100 years if at all possible to make it more realistic to the sccenario. Once you've made those changes, just let me know and we'll be good to go.


Done, also added added inner world and spirit pictures.
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Done, also added added inner world and spirit pictures.


Changes are good with me. Feel free to post your character in the characters tab.
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Hey guys, for those who aren't on the discord, I've caught a particularly bad flu and as a result I've been confined to my bed. If I'm not able to make a post tomorrow I'll try find an alternative, sorry for the wait.
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