BurningCold

Event Horizon (Old Thread)

@User All of the errors are still there, and I hate to come across as a jerk, but saying that "Some of us are just bad with grammar and spelling." isn't really a good excuse. Proper spelling and grammar is like the bare minimum expetancy for everything past most RPs in the free section. Some of the errors look to me like you're using a phone, which contradicts your tale that you put it all through a spellchecker.

"Lieutenant Thomas Dun which."

Which could have autocorrected from Lieutenant Thomas Dunwich or something of the like. No way you yourself added a random "which" at the end of of the surname "Dun".

Event Horizon (Old Thread)

@UserThere's a lot of errors in your app, some of them make it completely impossible to understand.

"Given how many years he has at war, the people he has killed and the men he has lost. he believes that he is a pro at war. He inst. he will overextend his boundary's, give out commands he has no ideas if they will work. All on the idea that he knows better than everyone else."

For example. This whole quote above is plagued with mistakes, but the section highlighted red is the most glaring mistake.

I think FF mentioned this, but a spellchecker/grammar checker/thingy would help make it all a bit more legible.

Event Horizon (Old Thread)

@FortunesFaded Sciency space stuff like going to Willman and coming back to find that you're older than your mom. That's the kind of stuff I meant.

Also, we can now make NPC apps?

Event Horizon (Old Thread)

@User I don't think you're allowed to make NPC characters until FF gives us the okay.

Event Horizon (Old Thread)

@FortunesFaded Maybe a bit late, but I think we should just forego all of the sciency space bullshit in favor of a smoother and more relatable roleplay experience.

In other news, a question!

If we end up making choices that fit down the basic path you've laid out, leading to the death of all but one, will that survivor be determinant, or have they been preselected?

(no serious qualms with Gera dying, just curious)

Crossrealm: The Stage Of History

@Dynamo Frokane I'm pretty sure every single role has already been "reserved" by someone. Besides, I'm already involved with another RP right now, so I'm afraid I won't have enough time for this one.

Event Horizon (Old Thread)

John has no family.

@FortunesFaded

Damn, lol.

Fall of Vedrus

At this point, I'm going to have to bow out.

Best of luck in all future endeavors.

Event Horizon (Old Thread)

@FortunesFaded B.A.S.S. is indeed where Gera lived, he just happened to spend a great deal of time elsewhere.

Of course, I defer to you on everything else. I am outspoken, and while I never mean offense, I know my tone can come across as biting.

However, their definition of mental strength seems to hint at a strong mental fortitude, high willpower, not intelligence. Viewing the rest in that light, is where my belief that the strength and weakness contradicted came from.

I don't mean to be presumptuous by posting my thoughts on the app here in such a manner. I will refrain from doing so in the future, or PM them to you privately, if that is your wish.

Event Horizon (Old Thread)

@The1Rolling1Boy It seems to me as though you haven't been paying very close attention to the OP. It tells you exactly what an "affiliation" is. Additionally, your app is riddled with contradictions and impossibilities. If someone lacks muscle mass, they can't be "really strong compared to everyone". If someone is "mentally strong" being "emotionally weak" doesn't make much sense either. I hope I don't need to point out that being 19 and a mechanical engineer isn't even within the realm of possibility.

All in all, your app is also riddled with errors that make it generally unpleasant to read, on top of the abhorrent formatting issues.

I'm pressed for time, so I won't be able to address the rest of the problems with your app.

-Not a GM, just a player entitled to their own opinion.