Alright, I'm just going to go in order of earliest to latest entries. Here we go:
@Guess Who - Great story. Absolutely brilliant. 100/10. Would read again. (Nah, I'm just kidding. I barely even placed next to everyone else's entries.)
@HereComesTheSnow - I greatly enjoyed your entry Snow. It kept me on the edge of my seat for the majority and was able to almost perfectly balance both humor and action. Honestly, I loved every minute of it and completely forgot just how long it was by the time I reached the end. The only complaint I can possibly think of was April and Dawn's "deaths." Yes, I know that a few paragraphs later we see that they're not really dead, but the shift from "happy times with Bianca" to "holy shit my sisters are dead" to "funny fourth wall breaks with Minus" still felt a bit sudden.
@NarayanK - Maybe it was the focus on color or the style of writing that you like to use Narayan, but something about your entry almost seemed poetic to me which I think greatly helped set the dreamy atmosphere that you were trying to reach. And I'd just like to say that you made a great choice using a song from Higurashi's soundtrack as that only made Sangue's battle with her inner demons that much more entertaining. One thing I think I would have liked was more of a description of the basilisk's appearance since mythological creatures such as that are usually imagined differently from person to person. In fact, I was a bit confused when you mentioned it having arms to hold a sword.
@Awesomoman64 - I have to admit, I always love seeing
Knight Templar types of villains as antagonists in stories. There's something about evil characters who firmly believe that what they're doing is right that I absolutely enjoy. Maybe I've got a thing for stories where good and evil isn't as black and white as most people think. One point of criticism I have though is that the ending felt somewhat rushed, like you wanted the story to end in a certain way and maybe stepped on the gas a little too hard to get there.
@Abillioncats - Absolutely. Frickin'. Hilarious. From the inclusion of Gren's ridiculous obsession with maids to Emerald's innocent but trouble making naivety you kept a smile on my face the entire time. The only possible thing I could think to complain about is probably Lauren's Deus Ex Machina entrance to save Emerald when everyone was first captured.
@Write - Man I had no idea Bianca was going through such a traumatic time after her rescue. She comes off as so broken what with her inability to show her real feelings, having to copy off of others like the entity from Midnight from that one Doctor Who episode just so she can appear normal to others. I also found it refreshing to see someone come up with the idea of their counterpart being a future version of themselves, though as with most stories about time travel it brings up a lot of questions about what sort of time travel we're working with like is it more similar to the Back to the Future movies or the film Twelve Monkeys.
I wish I didn't have to decide which entry I enjoyed the most, all of them were so good and I am glad to have read them, however the winners must be chosen.
3rd- Write
2nd- NarayanK
1st- HereComesTheSnow
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