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Sorry for not being too in-depth about this. I have a lot to do today and should probably not even put this much time into the RP at this second, but I wanted to give you guys something to work with.
@NobodiesHero
Over all good character, the hat has pointed out some things. I've looked at your custom technique and I like it. I would however like to add a restriction to it, one that deals with strength. Currently your jutsu is rank C, so I'd like it if it can only deflect techniques of that rank (or lower). As you practice it will get stronger.
@BladeSS4
You have a good concept going, but the character in itself needs some more time put into it. For one you need to put some explanations into your background. Right now it is full of stuff that happens, but we don't know how or why. Example questions: Why did his mother leave? Why was he avoided after discovering the KG? What happened to his father? How did he find Gobi? Why did he stay?
Keep in mind that Sasuke was also discovered to possess two chakra natures and a KG as a genin, he was cheered.
The custom technique. I like the basic sound of it, and you've done a pretty good job of balancing it. I would however like to restrict it even further to make sure that it won't become a "And so I killed everyone"-technique. The restriction is really simple, just bump the 3 sec time limit down to one strike.
Ranton/storm release. Let's just get one thing out of the way. Canon Ranton is strong as shit. It has been unfairly portrayed, since we only started to see it during the war and performed by some of the strongest ninjas in the world. This means that the only techniques we've seen are probably the strongest ones in the element's library.
With this in mind I can't really get behind a chuunin knowing some of the techniques that you've chosen. Laser circus was performed by one of hidden cloud's best people, and Water Lightning Dragon Bullet by two kages in collaboration.
Like I said, the element has been unfairly portrayed and it's not your fault in any way. If these techniques could be reworked, scaled back to a B-rank or something like that, I would not be opposed to the thought of a chuunin with the storm element.
Also, hat beat me to it. Busted, we talk about this shit.
@NobodiesHero
Over all good character, the hat has pointed out some things. I've looked at your custom technique and I like it. I would however like to add a restriction to it, one that deals with strength. Currently your jutsu is rank C, so I'd like it if it can only deflect techniques of that rank (or lower). As you practice it will get stronger.
@BladeSS4
You have a good concept going, but the character in itself needs some more time put into it. For one you need to put some explanations into your background. Right now it is full of stuff that happens, but we don't know how or why. Example questions: Why did his mother leave? Why was he avoided after discovering the KG? What happened to his father? How did he find Gobi? Why did he stay?
Keep in mind that Sasuke was also discovered to possess two chakra natures and a KG as a genin, he was cheered.
The custom technique. I like the basic sound of it, and you've done a pretty good job of balancing it. I would however like to restrict it even further to make sure that it won't become a "And so I killed everyone"-technique. The restriction is really simple, just bump the 3 sec time limit down to one strike.
Ranton/storm release. Let's just get one thing out of the way. Canon Ranton is strong as shit. It has been unfairly portrayed, since we only started to see it during the war and performed by some of the strongest ninjas in the world. This means that the only techniques we've seen are probably the strongest ones in the element's library.
With this in mind I can't really get behind a chuunin knowing some of the techniques that you've chosen. Laser circus was performed by one of hidden cloud's best people, and Water Lightning Dragon Bullet by two kages in collaboration.
Like I said, the element has been unfairly portrayed and it's not your fault in any way. If these techniques could be reworked, scaled back to a B-rank or something like that, I would not be opposed to the thought of a chuunin with the storm element.
Also, hat beat me to it. Busted, we talk about this shit.
