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I didn't write anything about her assumptions on his actions, just that she went running at him, used the dust cloud as her own cover, then pointed at him. It'd be a major failing and pretty out of character for her not to keep track of him with her HUD after all. :P

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@Zarkun Would Gaige be pointing in the wrong direction when her ECHO tracks the position of nearby life forms on the HUD? Does your guy have some sort of cloaking or disruption?

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@Banana That concept can work, but it would keep you away from all the action and make interacting with other characters considerably difficult. Plus you'd have to define what you mean by how intelligent he is, and define exactly how his power works. If you want to go the route of a thinker, let me get you some examples of actual thinkers in the story, since it's more than just being intelligent.

• Accord - Superhuman problem-solving, intellect scales with the complexity of the problem. The more complex and difficult, the better he is at handling it.
• Alexandria - Perfect eidetic memory, heightened cognitive speed and planning.
• Dinah - Can calculate the probability of any event to an exacting degree and express it as a percentage.
• Number Man - Complete mastery of numbers and probabilities. Just as good at guessing your safe combination as he is at using a pencil to kill a brute by applying the perfect pressure at the perfect angle.
• Tattletale - Can obtain information by making connections, essentially making superlatively good guesses that build on each other. (Intuition)
• Uber - Instant mastery of any one learnable skill as long as he concentrates on it.
• Short-duration 360-degree X-ray vision uninhibited by shadows, walls or skin.
• Coil - Can simulate 2 different timelines in which he makes different choices, then chooses which one to follow while discarding the other.

All of these are Thinker powers of varying potency, and as you can see they extend far far beyond simply being intelligent. Hopefully this helps you find some inspiration.

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Alright, we just need an update from @King Tai and I can move us past this first fight. Hoo ha!

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@ProPro
You bring up a lot of good points. Time to scrap and try something different. I'll probably have a better idea for what I can do with a character. I apologize for making a character that strong and having you read through it nitpicking it.

@Banana

You don't need to apologize, I'm just glad that you're able to take my criticism well and you're willing to try again. @Eklispe is right, you reacted far more maturely than a lot of people would. I tip my hat off to you. Just remember that I'm here for any and all questions. Most of the players have worked closely with me to determine the fine details of their characters and how they work, so don't be afraid to do the same thing.

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@Suku@Scarifar@Zarkun

Gaige rode quickly on her horse of choice, leaning forward to reduce wind resistance. She was no expert on riding horses, but she had survived being thrown around Hyperion vehicles, so holding onto the beast was no great feat. The green haired girl was surprisingly quick on her feet, especially after she realized that Gaige was chasing her down. The woman somehow increased her running speed to something far greater than any human being should have been capable of. Had Gaige been in any less determined of a mood, she'd have been interested by this new development. As it was, she just wanted to catch to in order to ask why she had freaked out and run away.

Scout was a good deal behind Gaige, having not been able to get his horse moving until she had a significant lead on him. That, paired with Gaige's current tunnel vision, meant that the teenage badass completely missed the calling of Aki Tamashiro. What she didn't miss, couldn't miss, in fact, was a bullet flying right by her face just as the sun came up. The horse stopped charging forward and reared back, throwing Gaige clean off of its back. "Oomph!" she grunted, not out of pain from the impact (her shield took care of that) but out of the sudden loss of breath. Rolling with it, Gaige found herself back on her feet in only a second or two and fortunately for her, she could track a bullet's path. Living on Pandora and getting shot at by bandits ever five minutes certainly honed your survival skills.

Gaige's eyes narrowed, spotting a figure in the field moving toward her. He looked like, well, a bandit. Specifically a nomad bandit, only leaner. Not a chunky fatass. His equipment looked to be infinitely more well maintained though, and he had a floating red robot with him. Gaige's eyes lit up instantly at the sight of the robot, joy apparent on her face even from that distance, but she forced herself to shove the joy aside in favor of anger. This guy wasn't showing up as a hostile on her ECHO, but he shot at her. A warning shot sure, but he shot at her all the same. No self respecting vault hunter was going to take that lying down, especially not the mechromancer! Gaige began charging right at the man, eyes narrowed and a grin of sadistic joy on her face. Just to show that she wasn't someone to be fucked with she digistructed her TORGUE shotgun on hand, then fired it between herself and her would-be assailant.

BOOM!

The pellets expelled from the barrel of the shotgun, collided with the ground between them and WHAMO! Instead fireworks show! Every pellet exploded violently, kicking up grass, dirt, and debris. Gaige took the opportunity to jump through the dust cloud for dramatic effect (hell yeah!) and landed on both feet, shotgun pointed directly at the man. "You wanna try that again?! HUH?! YOU LIKE SHOOTING AT GIRLS THAT ARE JUST TRYING TO STOP PEOPLE FROM FREAKING OUT?! DON'T UNDERESTIMATE THE GOD OF DAMAGE!"

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Ok, going to reread the current situation and get a post out.

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Post here when you guys have finished up. In the meantime guys, I'm looking to get this started Saturday.

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@Dawnscroll What's your current status?

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@Banana Ok, I have had the time to look through the entire profile for a complete and thorough read through. You may not like what I have to say. All in all, this is a complete and total rewrite. I'll leave out the little nitpicks and focus only on the big issues here.

History: This is full of inconsistencies, flaws, and reads like you're trying to make something as dark and edgy as possible to the detriment of flow and believable character development. I will go ahead and assume that you haven't read the original story while I explain some things, so I apologize if you have and anything I say is something you already know. In terms of his parents being murdered and being abducted by the government, that's a tremendous no. There is an organization that could have abducted him to perform experiments (that being Cauldron) but no murder would be necessary and I can guarantee that he wouldn't remember much (if anything) of his escape. The government does nothing of the sort to anybody, one reason being if they did and the parahuman escaped it would completely destroy all faith the people have and cause a revolution. Another point is that you cannot scan someone's DNA to see if they have the potential to trigger. Anyone who is the child of a parahuman is known to be almost guaranteed to also have the ability to trigger, and certain individuals know about a portion of the brain they can look at, but in no way is it something you can scan for, at least not without invasive brain surgery. You are also not destined to be a certain classification of parahuman. There is a force that determines the generality of your powers, but the trigger itself defines the specifics of how it functions and manifests. So not only can you not predict who is has the potential to be a parahuman, you sure as Hell can't predict what sort of power they'll manifest.

Personality: So this kid, from the ages of 6-10, goes through what can only be described as a literal Hell, and he comes out of it with only some deadened emotions? I'm flabbergast he isn't dead from the shock of the trauma, or at the very least mentally crippled beyond help.

Parahumanism: So the very first thing I'll say is this: Nobody is supposed to be one of the biggest and baddest in the world, or even the country, with regards to their powers. So him being one of the highest rated thinkers is instantly a no go right off the bat. That being said, I would like more pure thinkers and this power can be reworked, but it'd need to be done so heavily. The floating thing bugs me a lot. Why levitation? What does that have to do with being a thinker? That's Mover or Breaker status (depending on the specifics of how it works). Thinker is not a catch all term for psychic powers, it's for powers that somehow augment your mental processes, so the levitation is completely unrelated. Then there's the sheer scope and power of this ability. He seems to be a precog, an empath, and have instant deductive understanding. Each of these are fine on their own (to a lesser extent that last one) but you're combining as many mind-based powers as you can hear, which isn't the point. The point is to make a creative power that works in a very specific way and seeing what you can do with it. Then there's the Trump portion.

Through getting hit by one power, he takes in the knowledge of how it works, and is then able to use it to his advantage for a period of time ranging from 5 seconds to upwards of 20 minutes, depending on how hard he is hit by a power.

How does he affect someone's power after he's been hit by it? Does he just think and he alters their power in some way? Increase its potency? Decrease it? Change their range or how it works? Does he just learn all about how it works then he can take physical action against it now that he's educated? If it's the former, you need to describe exactly what he does and how potent an effect it has. If it's the latter, that's not Trump at all, that's just applying information you learned (which is definitely Thinker, and certainly not a bad application of Thinker either, so kudos there).

Then there's the limitations, which seem to fly in the face of being "immune to any outside mental/emotional force." (I would definitely be declining that immunity, by the way, as a major major no no). You say that he's particularly weak to mental/emotional pressure in an area, including from others outside of himself, and his mind is easily clouded just by seeing someone dead. Fair enough, I can abide that sort of limitation, I'm just not sure you notice that you contradicted yourself there. Additionally though, you mention information overload requiring a nap. Ok, fair enough, but how does it affect him at the time? Does this distract him? Cause headaches or migraines? Details details details, they are always important.

So like I said before, it's a complete rewrite. I apologize if that's something of a bummer, but it is necessary. If you have any questions I'm always available to address them, and you can check the approved CSs for ideas and inspirations. I would definitely recommend doing that. I can't dictate to you how to redo the history, but I would like to give a few ideas on how you can rework his power set.

• He's a precog that can sense immediate danger (like Spiderman's spider sense), it only works on threats against him that are in the now and does not warn him against conspiracies to endanger him later.
• The opposite, he can sense long-term threats but not immediate in your face danger.
• Superhuman perception, he notices intricate details and can deduce information from them Sherlock Holmes style. This can also grant an insight into how others' powers work.
• He's a precog that can sense nearly any situation, be it a dangerous threat, the weather in Japan, the potential for a business venture to be profitable, or otherwise, but can only communicate his predictions to others in a strange code. "what's the status of our operations in Malay?"
  "Orange-Triangle-Pennywhistle-Nihilst"

Those are just some real general ideas off the top of my head, I'm sure it could be expanded to plenty more.