@Ryuji Sakamoto Awesome! I like how she's like, well, a Dust sorcerer. It's super cool!
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@Tergonaut Dusty Skunk gets full approval!
@dabombjk I'm sorry, but the abusive section of the backstory was deemed illogical, unnecessary, and excessive. And in my humble opinion, Peter is as bland as Kyle, and a bit of a stretch for the color rule. Not really Remnant flavor, if you know what I mean. And since I can't see the image's eye color, I'm going to have to ask what that is before I let you continue anyway.
@dabombjk I'm sorry, but the abusive section of the backstory was deemed illogical, unnecessary, and excessive. And in my humble opinion, Peter is as bland as Kyle, and a bit of a stretch for the color rule. Not really Remnant flavor, if you know what I mean. And since I can't see the image's eye color, I'm going to have to ask what that is before I let you continue anyway.
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Yea ok. I like the show, but i use it as backround noise and I was not sure I was making a decent when I wrote it. I did not wanna make it seem too.....I dont know I just wanted to make sure it was something that could fit in the universe. Not something too stretched out
It might be because I had very little sleep, but I feel like this starts looping in the middle...
@dabombjk And while you're at it, you may want to make the CS less... how do I put this, casually worded? That's just my personal taste, but it sort of breaks the flow. You don't need to say "as an example" most of the time, because the things in the CS are already examples.
@Ryougu Which is accurate.
@Ryougu It's also rule 4, or 3.
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I can add a color but it wasnt asked for and how is the age is invalid it said minimum of 21
You apparently missed rules 3 and 4.
@Lord Orgasmo I can't give approval to your CS as it stands. It has a few glaring issues.
First of all, the fact that your character is exactly Reptile. (As an added note, the original Mortal Kombat game used photocapture for the character graphics.) Second, your character has no clear Faunus trait. Also, the CS is a little too casual, if you know what I mean. And the "weapon's" uses for Dust are just, well, generic uses for (sometimes small) amounts of Dust. The 'disease like an STD' stuff is really unnecessary, and the "I have no one and don't know where I live and no one knows my pain" just rubs me the wrong way. Plus the Semblance you picked is basically a copy of Ruby's, which is against the rules.
And, well, the name dropping of four real-world martial arts, which don't really have too much of a reason to all exist in Remnant at once. Furthermore, they're way too different, and CQC is basically just a meme at this point.
First of all, the fact that your character is exactly Reptile. (As an added note, the original Mortal Kombat game used photocapture for the character graphics.) Second, your character has no clear Faunus trait. Also, the CS is a little too casual, if you know what I mean. And the "weapon's" uses for Dust are just, well, generic uses for (sometimes small) amounts of Dust. The 'disease like an STD' stuff is really unnecessary, and the "I have no one and don't know where I live and no one knows my pain" just rubs me the wrong way. Plus the Semblance you picked is basically a copy of Ruby's, which is against the rules.
And, well, the name dropping of four real-world martial arts, which don't really have too much of a reason to all exist in Remnant at once. Furthermore, they're way too different, and CQC is basically just a meme at this point.
@dabombjk Kyle's not a color, and the age is invalid.
@Tergonaut Personally, I like it. I'll wait for Enter, but I give my half of the approval.
@Tergonaut Personally, I like it. I'll wait for Enter, but I give my half of the approval.
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As most of the effected civilians evacuated, and still some others boarded their train as though nothing had happened, there was a flash and a puff of smoke, followed by a loud sound from the dock. The armored leader pointed towards it, gesturing to two of the operatives. They began to head towards the crash site, ready to investigate the explosion and to make sure no civilians were hurt. All seemed to be going well, when suddenly-
"Sir!" one of the operatives called out, pointing past the tracks, where they saw a man jumping incredibly far.
"Bag him!" the leader called, and with that, his subortinate shouldered what looked like a rocket launcher, and fired it, only to release a rather rapid heavy duty net instead.
The net sailed at the flying man, set to make its mark.
"Sir!" one of the operatives called out, pointing past the tracks, where they saw a man jumping incredibly far.
"Bag him!" the leader called, and with that, his subortinate shouldered what looked like a rocket launcher, and fired it, only to release a rather rapid heavy duty net instead.
The net sailed at the flying man, set to make its mark.
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