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@Connor
-First and foremost you need to edit - spell check and use proper grammar with your character sheet (Jack being "jack" for example. It looks quite poor in that regards, sorry.
-Take out the descriptions of sub headers (How they act, what makes their head tick, the list. One paragraph, 5 lines. )
-Who did he lose that caused him to be so irritable, friends family?
-Who were his parents, where did they learn their skills to train him?
-Why would he leave his rifle, sometimes you have to make noise to kill monsters. Stealth doesn't always work. I understand the reason of writing the gun out but it just seems cheap.
- (insert harmless creature) make a name up if you want, this just looks unfinished.
- Camp was raided but Ryker heard nothing? How far out was he.
- Tracking through the fog with little to no gear, for days - I don't see this as plausible.
- Surviving a shot to the eye - you'd be dead or crippled. If the guy was a bandit you'd be seriously fucked.
- You woulden't have time to save yourself if you got shot in the eye.
- Hearing about New Philly when he lived outside of the settlement his whole life, somehow I'd think he'd know before than of New Philly.
- How does he know Quincy
- "Gear a basic medical kit (choose what you think mr/ ms dm should be in there)
tools: small blow torch, small metal sheet, bone-saw (same here if you deem some of this stuff op "
You pick the gear and I decide if it stays.
armor: really none except for his kinda reinforced jacket bits of scrap metal
It has no bullet resistance, keep that in mind.
weapons: doesn't really have any except 2 machete looking blades will try and get some guns from military
Writing you down for two machetes, if you don't have guns then you dont have guns.
Please let this reflect in your changes to your CS.
-First and foremost you need to edit - spell check and use proper grammar with your character sheet (Jack being "jack" for example. It looks quite poor in that regards, sorry.
-Take out the descriptions of sub headers (How they act, what makes their head tick, the list. One paragraph, 5 lines. )
-Who did he lose that caused him to be so irritable, friends family?
-Who were his parents, where did they learn their skills to train him?
-Why would he leave his rifle, sometimes you have to make noise to kill monsters. Stealth doesn't always work. I understand the reason of writing the gun out but it just seems cheap.
- (insert harmless creature) make a name up if you want, this just looks unfinished.
- Camp was raided but Ryker heard nothing? How far out was he.
- Tracking through the fog with little to no gear, for days - I don't see this as plausible.
- Surviving a shot to the eye - you'd be dead or crippled. If the guy was a bandit you'd be seriously fucked.
- You woulden't have time to save yourself if you got shot in the eye.
- Hearing about New Philly when he lived outside of the settlement his whole life, somehow I'd think he'd know before than of New Philly.
- How does he know Quincy
- "Gear a basic medical kit (choose what you think mr/ ms dm should be in there)
tools: small blow torch, small metal sheet, bone-saw (same here if you deem some of this stuff op "
You pick the gear and I decide if it stays.
armor: really none except for his kinda reinforced jacket bits of scrap metal
It has no bullet resistance, keep that in mind.
weapons: doesn't really have any except 2 machete looking blades will try and get some guns from military
Writing you down for two machetes, if you don't have guns then you dont have guns.
Please let this reflect in your changes to your CS.