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Halo ODST: First Contact

@R31GN

the thing

All around, I think the character is fine, the way you did the personality was interesting, and the idea of a very apathetic medic as opposed to a compassionate one is interesting. The sadism was unexpected, but interesting. His gear picks are fine too, not too surprised that no one picked up an assault rifle, but its all fine.

A bit of a nitpick, but how is a soldier who's 6'1" only 150 lbs? I'm 6'2", and rather skinny and scrawny and I stand in at 168 lbs, never mind a well muscled soldier.

@NecroKnight

the things

She seems a bit the typical lone-wolf sniper, but I'm gonna trust that you're not gonna play her as an antisocial character. Nothing seems wrong with her background, and I have no complaints about it.

As far as her loadout, is there any reason Niella operates with two long ranged weapons instead of a long range and a close quarters weapon for personal defense? Not saying you need to change it, but it seems a little unnecessary to carry 2 long ranged weapons, though admittedly one is more mobile than the other.

Other then that, there's nothing really to mention, all round good character.

@TTNoobs

The things

So, is Berne a squad leader? Or just an attached asset?

Other then that clarification, I see nothing particularly wrong with this character, a far cry from the average boots on the ground, gung-ho infantryman, but not necessarily in a bad way.

@Vilhelm

The thing

First and most important, I am definitely not okay with Belman knowing about the existence of the Covenant and aliens. That is an absolute no, the first appearance of aliens in this RP is to be a massive shock and someone potentially blabbing about the existence of aliens is not okay. Other then that, the loadout, personality etc is okay.

@Treue

The thing

So, I know what you're getting at with the whole callsign "Steel-Fist" because, you know, she has steel fists. But that's a bit of a mouthful and sounds like a name someone would give themselves to sound badass. It's more likely someone in the squad would've jokingly named her "Cogs" or "Robo", or something short and easy to call out.

Also, the amount of weapons she's carrying is a bit excessive, I'd generally try to limit the loadout to a primary, secondary, and a sidearm.

No Turning Back - Into the Abyss

@Sep

I added the approved CS to the Character tab.

Also, my intro post will have him already established as the "Head of Security", and I assume that everyone has been on the Ark for at least 10 years prior to the start of the story?

@Rawk

If he's head of security, anyone who's crew, staff, or military will probably know that without needing to be on the Ark for 10+ years

Halo ODST: First Contact

Yes this is still going, I'll have character reviews up in a sec

No Turning Back - Into the Abyss

@Sep, so prosthetics are just replacements to body parts that might be slightly better or resilient, while cybernetic augs are more drastic, notable changes?

What's the different between a prosthetic arm and a cybernetic arm?

No Turning Back - Into the Abyss

@Sep It is not, as far as I can tell. But now that I know, I may go back and add some body mods to Sara

No Turning Back - Into the Abyss

Reading through the last iteration of this game, @Sep are body mods and cybernetics common for Armani?

No Turning Back - Into the Abyss

So I want to ship Mel and Sara for the pure fact that they are the only two female pcs

Yggdrasil Chronicles [A Dystopian Steampunk Resistance RP]

@Varromerenope, go ahead and make a character and me or Whoami will give you some feedback

Yggdrasil Chronicles [A Dystopian Steampunk Resistance RP]

Elijah Quaid

Elijah Quaid - Child prodigy, Manaweaver, Asgardian Military Academy student

Name: Elijah Quaid
Age: 21
Race: Elf

Personality:
Quiet and reserved, Elijah is a confident, but often unspoken individual. His calm and collected demeanor is often mistaken for an uncaring and aloof disposition. Underneath his quiet persona lies an innate brilliance, a highly intuitive and calculative mind. Highly logical and orderly, Elijah shows visible disdain towards the use of trickery and subterfuge but recognizes it's usefulness in strategy. Efficient and analytical, but often accused of lacking outward compassion, Elijah is a competent tactician boasting considerable knowledge of theory, though lacking in experience. Strong willed and possessing an air of determination, Elijah is highly critical and will rarely hesitate to call others out on their shortcomings, often leading to him butting heads with others. Like many high-status elves, Elijah can at times be arrogant, haughty and overly prideful.

Background:
A child prodigy from the capital city of Midgar, Elijah is the only son of General Quaid, a prominent leader of the Asgardian military. His childhood was strict and rigid, and consisted of private lessons, tutors, fencing lessons, and statescraft among other things. Elijah and his father often butted heads while growing up, continuing even through his adolescence. Upon reaching adolescence it became revealed that Elijah was capable of weaving mana. In fact, he had an incredible mastery over mana not seen in many professionals twice his age. Taking private lessons from his father - another talented manasmith, Elijah quickly underwent training to master his full potential.

Proving himself to be an extremely talented manasmith, Elijah's father had him enrolled in Asgard's premier Military Academy, where his natural intelligence, and mastery over various skills propelled him to the top of his class. Elijah was offered positions in several Knighthoods, including the prestigious Knighthood of Blades, the esteemed Knights of the Lexicon, and the elf-exclusive Knights Arcana. Elijah's future was bright, and he had a variety of career options, all in high level military positions that he could enter right out of Academy. It was during his final year at the Academy when the Zephyr appeared, and subsequently took control of the Asgard Empire. Almost immediately, Elijah heard reports of secessionists and rebels breaking away from the Empire in protest to the Zephyr. All of these rebellions were quickly, and brutally put down.

Though Elijah never passed the cut as a diehard patriot, Elijah never seemed to lack loyalty to the Empire. It was all the more surprising then, when he suddently cut ties with the academy and left- an action that greatly shamed and angered his father. Disillusioned with the Asgard Empire and their Zephyr overlords, Elijah retreated inwards to himself and left the city of Midgar. Fleeing with his belongings in self-imposed exile, Elijah left central Asgard in search of the fringe kingdoms. Eventually finding himself in Tyberia, Elijah soon became involved with a secessionist movement within its borders, where his military knowledge- while lacking experience and physical applications, would prove most useful.

Skills:
A child of nobility and the son of a general, Elijah is talented in a wide berth of skills. From statecraft to strategy, Elijah has been educated in diplomacy and military tactics. A trained fencer and swordsman due to private lessons throughout his childhood, as well as the Asgard Military Academy, Elijah is a capable fighter, as well as tactician. With his natural affinity with the world's Mana, Elijah is a talented manasmith. Capable of throwing bolts of energy from his hands, to relieving the injured of mana radiation and injuries, a testimant to his mastery over mana is his ability to create and maintain a solid blade of energy around a focus.

• Professional Swordsmanship - A top student at Asgard's prestigious Military Academy, as well as trained from a young age, Elijah, while lacking in battlefield experience, has been trained extensively in fencing and bladesmanship, and has at times been able to best several of his instructors in combat.
• Adept Manaweaving - A manasmith of considerable note, Elijah has a natural natural affinity with the world's Mana. Capable of throwing bolts of energy from his hands, and relieving the injured of mana radiation and poisoning, a testimant to his mastery over mana is his ability to create and maintain a solid blade of energy around a focus.
• Professional Strategist - A child prodigy, an heir to nobility, the son of a general, and a skilled student of a prestigious military academy, Elijah is well educated in diplomacy and military tactics.
• Journeyman Statescraft - While educated in statescraft and policy making as a child and through his time at the military academy, it is clear that statescraft was not one of Elijah's focuses.
• Journeyman Marksmanship - While trained with manalocks as every student at the Asgard Military Academy was, it is clear that it is not one of Elijah's main suits.

Equipment:

• Elijah's Coat - A battlecoat often worn by top ranking Academy students. These coats are made of thick leather and are often treated with special magics to make them more resilient than everyday longcoats, making them capable of being worn into battleThese coats are often a sign of status in Asgard Military units. Several Knight Houses also give their own personalized coats to prospective members. Elijah's Coat is from the Knights Arcana and is warded to provide him further protection from mana based weapons.
• Einherjar - An ornate, ivory sword hilt without a blade. Elijah uses this sword hilt as a focus for his manasmithing abilities. The most common application of Elijah's mana weaving abilities are made manifest in the sword blade he conjours. The blade, while quite wide, is made of pure mana, and is therefore nearly weightless. The blade is capable of cutting through most non-resistant materials with ease. The hilt features a mana crystal in its pommel to provide extra energy when needed.

Yggdrasil Chronicles [A Dystopian Steampunk Resistance RP]

I have a personal preference for small groups, but hey, that's just me.