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"It is my last conscious breath which shall sunder your being, demon! Let history remember that. Let him know that were it not for you, he would know my fury!"

Where exactly are the Heartlands? Or at least, where would you put them?

In the picture below, outlined in red are what Tuuj, Celaira, and me refer to as "The Heartlands".

Sorry for the sloppy work.
@Dead Cruiser@DeltaV@Guilty Spark@yoshua171

Alright, Let's stop now. This doesn't need to be on the OOC any longer. Start a PM, include everyone that should be included in it, and discuss it there. All the bickering is not conducive to a positive RP environment. Not to mention it's flooding out other important questions and is very un-fun to watch.

This will be my last post in response to the issue in public. If you wish to bring it up to me further--or in an argumentative manner--we will have to take it into PM.

My issues @yoshua171 are basically thus:
<Snipped quote by Dextkiller>

As I have mentioned previously, I find his powers to be needlessly complex, and could easily be distilled into a concept far more intuitive and less reliant on walls of text to explain.

Also, the "limitations" on the sword and the mind-rending are basically "pacifism," which aren't really limitations at all. Your character can and has previously used these abilities on people with almost no provocation, with nearly nothing that can be done to stop him.

You also didn't address the character's biography, which I also find kind of absurd and nonsensical. It doesn't read to me like a legend or historical account as much as it reads like, "these are the things that happened so this character could possibly exist."

I offered to write a summary, Raven just said either remove the titles and call it some name similar to soul magic or whatnot. I called it Invocation as that is the form of the magic, kept the titles, and put it in a hider titled as the aforementioned. Seeing as he has accepted that, it must be alright.

I went into specifics to avoid his abilities being pegged as "powerful with no weaknesses". I accept your criticism, but I don't think I'll be rewriting those abilities. The closest I may do is write a summary.

As to the limitations on Mind Rend, your assessment is inaccurate. The two primary downsides of the ability are as follow:

>It drains the user's sanity (which causes a feedback loop forcing him to gather more spirits and energy and to feed on them to maintain himself, which is bad in a more long term sort of way).

>It requires four times the energy to rend a mind. It's a 4:1 ratio and the implication is that minds already possess a lot of their own energy. So gathering 4 times that energy and then considering that Lyr would also willingly have to decide to sacrifice a portion of his sanity and mental well being is kind of a big deal. I mentioned his pacifism as an additional point, not as the primary weakness.
That would be perfectly valid, if I were trying to insult the character and not give valid criticisms in the hope that it improves. As an extreme example, what if @cziken20 had been accepted? Would it not make perfect sense to point out that the character doesn't really fit, in my opinion, with the setting?

Well, I must say that while I actually agree in regards to the criticism being fairly open, I must say that it seems you picked out all of Lyrsaeyn's strengths without taking in mind the weaknesses related to his abilities. Nonetheless I will address the issues brought forth :)

Alrighty. I don't like to complain, but I really have to bring up @yoshua171's character.

- He has a ring that he always knows the location of and that protects him from magic. Okay, sure.
- He has an amulet with someone's soul in it that improves his focus, and presumably thus all of his powers, "twentyfold." O-kay.
- He has a sword where just unsheathing it causes everyone nearby to kill themselves by starvation.
- He can read people's emotions.
- He can summon, and to an extent mind-control, demons (and, uh, gods?)
- He can magically bind himself to wandering spirits and force them to do his bidding.
- He can, apparently, shatter peoples' minds and souls and absorb them into himself.

Doesn't that seem a bit excessive? Not to mention his backstory, which comes across as incredibly edgy -- for some reason his village reacts to finding out a child is blind by abandoning them in the woods, and then bringing out an executioner to kill him when he returns. Then the executioner just magically falls to the ground, the sword goes flying through the air and kills the town leader. Seeing this, the townspeople let your character live with them for five years. He wanders to the coast, takes a convenient fishing boat to wander the lands, and stumbles upon a temple full of wise men who teach him how to harness his magic. Then a mysterious hooded stranger tells him to seek out people to kill a demon, so he travels along, doing "good" that isn't elaborated on but also killing entire villages when people make him angry. Then he meets up with people, gets a bunch of overpowered gear and kills a demon.

I just find it hard to believe that this guy would ever be known as a mythical hero.

@DeltaV While it's not in my nature to bring up old shit, you're basically not alone. In the previous thread, all three GMs (myself included) got pretty big red flags from this character, over basically everything you just said. There was an incredible amount of deliberation on the matter, but ravenDivinity and yoshua seem to have reached a conclusion?

I feel like more could be done to bring the character in line in terms of tone and quality, but I'm willing to trust Raven's judgement on the matter.


While I have addressed these concerns with Raven, I will address them here so thngs are more clear.

>His ring does not protect him from all magic, it protects him specifically from psychic influences. This is stated in its description. He knows its general direction, not its exact location.

>No it doesn't improve the potency of his powers, only his range and focus. Range meaning the distance which he can extend his abilities. Focus meaning his ability to hone in on details and multitask.

>Starvation takes three (or more) days, Lyrsaeyn is a pacifist by nature and once the he has the sheath he will likely not fully unsheath the blade unless it is a last ditch effort to achieve victory. Also note that unsheathing the blade fully means that he pretty much has a death wish. Partially unsheathing the blade will not have an effect on living people because the sheath restrains the abilities. I will add this last bit to the description since I didn't make it clear enough. My apologies.

>He can read emotions being projected towards people. He cannot read the minds of other people or their thoughts at all. Also it is notable that, as noted in the description of Vale's Insight, he is blind. He uses "sight" to discern people's mental state similar to how normal people use their vision to read expressions and body language (both things Lyr cannot do).

>He can't summon anything. He can draw on the spiritual energies in his surroundings and he can bind non-living spirits to himself (or others) so as to manipulate/control them. As to mind controlling a god that is absolutely absurd. In terms of demons, I don't know how that is defined in this world whatsoever so I can't really draw any conclusions. However, if a demon is a god's "evil" or "dark" counterpart then no he cannot control them.

>Not sure why the binding to wandering spirits is such a big deal? I mean aside from him giving them spiritual energy to move things around him they end up as amplifiers (to an extent) to his explained abilities. They also drain his sanity....

>He can't absorb people's minds. He can "rend" them (or shatter as you put it), but it requires four times the spiritual energy of that "mind," and it drains his own sanity (mind) to do so. It is immensely taxing and again, he is a pacifist and rending someone's mind is a violent thing indeed.
"It is my last conscious breath which shall sunder your being, demon! Let history remember that. Let him know that were it not for you, he would know my fury!"

@ravenDivinity sent you a PM just briefly discuss one or two items so I can make sure I have him edited properly. Shouldn't take too long :)
I'll make a few small edits to Let then post him up as soon as I get the chance.
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GenmyouThe Shade of Clarity
Playing the Long Game

Summoning a sheet of Inshō-shi to his free hand, the kage began conducting his chakra through it, channeling it into patterns to craft a seal on the sheet's surface. As he did this he moulded chakra internally before channeling it into his Seigennashi no ei. Thus he stored a raiton technique within its form.

"If I did not know better, I would call you a terrible liar," stated the raikage as his seal finished manifesting on the surface of the sheet. It was the Kōshin kankei seal that he had placed on the sheet, but he had done so multiple times. In fact, he'd done it 10 times on the same sheet. He began folding the sheet into squares in his hand. After a two seconds he'd finished and it was at this point that he physically manifested some of his chakra, thus cutting the sheet into 10 smaller pieces. Each was 1x1 inch in size. He then charged the edges of the sheets with his raiton chakra, which he linked to his person. For a split second his barrier flickered. Something that Kobuto might not even notice.

The sheets of paper altered their composition utilizing the transformation technique, making them as hard as iron, though not even vaguely as heavy. They drifted to the ground in various locations around the battlefield, sometimes moving once more at Genmyou's behest. Once they were properly arranged Genmyou suppressed his chakra to its lowest state, giving off only enough to be identical to that given off by the pieces of paper. When he moved, so did the sheets. If he had known genjutsu he would have had them assume his appearance. He could have used the shadow clone technique or transformed them, but one required a fair deal of chakra and the other drained him gradually over time. This whole time, roughly a period of 15 seconds in total, he had continued to slowly supply chakra into his sword. It wasn't filling any of the 6 other slots.

He wondered if the Tsuchikage intended to collapse something on him or beneath him.
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