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@Sep also i'm done rewriting my chara sheet.
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@OrangeInk Yeah that's fine underneath.

@boomlover It's long enough, and it's detailed enough. Just at the Three Day war you rush it a little bit which is what I'm having problems with, and having problems following the events above Mars and why he was selected. Flesh out a little bit more that he gave the order to abandon ship (give some reason for the kamikazee other than rage as well, throw in a reactor problem or something) and then have him in the Navy post Three Day War when it was reforming to include the Unity, Feds and Cons (Maybe that coupled with the death of his uncle is why he responds poorly to officers?).

Advanced doesn't necessarily mean long, just well thought out.

It's looking better, still a couple of typos. Include him giving the order to evacuate, just to let other people know and please remove the whole crashing into the asteroid thing. Finally, I'd advise running it through a spellchecker, there's a couple of small errors in there, so just to tidy it up a bit throw it through one.

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@Sep also will do. As for spell checker maybe give me a link to a site?
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@boomlover Copy it over Here and it will let you spellcheck it.
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@FrozenEcstasy Well Asians are one of the most populous races.
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@Sep I have a question for you regarding Loretta. You say she is cold, and rather detached. Is this because she detests, or is beginning to detest of people, similar to my character, or simply because you may not want to make attachments, like I assume Theodore's reason is for being cold and detached?
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@Firecracker_ Loretta is detatched not because she detests people, but being Armani she's been through a lot. @OrangeInks character turned to alcoholism, Loretta turned to her work and that's all she's ever really done. She's not good at socializing purely due to lack of experience, and for her tastes people are too unpredictable. She's capable of making friends, she just doesn't seek people out to make friends.

If that makes sense.
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Is this any better? I'm not gonna go about a full re-make of the Character Sheet, I'm keeping the programming bits, but hopefully this is distinct enough from yours @OrangeInk

@Sep Is the new bio towards the end of the CS good enough, or would you like more detail put into it?

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@Sep @Firecracker_Trauma effects people in different ways, a good example of this is becoming cold and distant, however there can be different varientions to the same result.

Loretta became detached because she possibly focused on nothing but her work to block out the grief and turmoil of losing everything like the Armani did.

Dakota however took a different form, she became distant and cold but with sociopathic tendencies, a personality disorder that manifests after severe trauma and lack of a normal upbringing, she may appear charming and charismatic however Sociopaths like Dakota are typically very intelligent yet instead of only letting their knowledge empower themselves they also use it for deception and advancement. They also lack Remorse, Guilt or Shame and tend to be very intense.
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I see. I like it. Thanks for the explanations. @Sep @OrangeInk
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@vosenedich When I saw that programming script.



I don't even.
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@vosenedich You may want to speak to the science personnel, I can't see Locke picking up a robot and deciding to keep it. If you can find someone, other than a couple of typos it looks good.

If you do want the robot to be Lockes, have someone 'gift' it to him for the journey on the Ark.

@OrangeInk A fellow studier of Psychology or personal hobby? :P
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@vosenedich You may want to speak to the science personnel, I can't see Locke picking up a robot and deciding to keep it. If you can find someone, other than a couple of typos it looks good.

If you do want the robot to be Lockes, have someone 'gift' it to him for the journey on the Ark.


@Sep I had Locke set as the administrator cause he's the "administrator" for the Ark Vitae. Even if Locke himself didn't own Archimedes, anyone of the engineers bringing him aboard would have to have Locke set as the administrator.

Otherwise, I'd be just as fine if anyone wanted to play an Armani Criminal/Space Pirate sort of fellow who used to own Archimedes and is the one that's registered as the (private user)/Main Administrator. It'd explain why Archimedes went to Mars and got onto the Ark Vitae.
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@OrangeInk same man, same.
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@SepAlso, what typos did you find?
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@Sep

I study Clinical Psychology In Edinburgh, and yes, I'm also Scottish. :D
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Also guys whats with the code word pineapples?
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@vosenedich Oh right, that's fine then. You may want to see (if at any point) a player wants to claim him or if he's just kind of there. There are a couple of typos, so give it the once over and then I'll do one last quick check and she should be good.
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@Sep

I study Clinical Psychology In Edinburgh, and yes, I'm also Scottish. :D


I... study psychology...

LOL
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@FrozenEcstasy COINCIDENCE MUCH !!!
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