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And its done.

Check it and tell me what you think.

I would like to say right off the bat that if you don’t like anything about it, I am completely open to adjusting it, or, in extreme cases, starting again from scratch. (Though I would prefer not to, as this was a quite a bit of work, whew.)

I’m working on a theme, but I figured I could post it for review while I search around for one that I think fits.

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Edit: Okay, blegh. Doing some last minute formatting
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@Crimson Raven In lieu of a longwinded review that makes the same overall point, I think it's best to just tell you that I don't think Kyogen is a good fit for the setting and tone. Reread the OP and give some of the accepted characters a look to get a feel for the tone I'm talking about, and then hit me with that application.
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@Crimson Raven In lieu of a longwinded review that makes the same overall point, I think it's best to just tell you that I don't think Kyogen is a good fit for the setting and tone. Reread the OP and give some of the accepted characters a look to get a feel for the tone I'm talking about, and then hit me with that application.


The tone you are looking for is dark but not black right? Realistic but with hints of supernatural?

Edit: I can make a case for you that he fits well, with in the themes and tones laid out in the OP. Most of it deals with his backstory.
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@Crimson Raven Dark realism is applicable for the setting, but not cartoonishly gritty darkness. Also, player characters should not have directly supernatural abilities or weapons.

Edit: I'm open to hearing you out, but as GM, I'm telling you that what I've read -- a blind guy with a magic sword and shadow powers, who's so unimpeded by his blindness that he's both a competent martial artist and a survivalist -- does not fit in with the setting I have written.
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@Crimson Raven Dark realism is applicable for the setting, but not cartoonishly gritty. Also, player characters should not have directly supernatural abilities or weapons.


Cartooishly gritty? Explain, please.

The last part is fair, and expected. Can I counter that he has less then a few months worth of experience with said power, allowing him to grow with it over the course of the RP? It was mainly intended as a way to get around his blindness. (Reason for it is, again, bound up in his story)

Edit: I appreciate you hearing me out. Thank you for that.

He was a fighter and survivalist first, then came the blindness. And it still impedes him in several ways. He can’t read. He can’t see color, he can’t “see” past a relativly short distance. (Like if a gunman was pointing at him, or a bow was fired, or even a rock thrown.

The reason for the sword is connected with his ability.

Edit 2: I could have done a better job of explaining his limits
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@Crimson Raven I was mentioning that I'm not looking for cartoonish grit to provide an example for the other end of the realism spectrum, not as a reference to your sheet. Like I said, I think you should reread the OP, particularly the world and setting sections. None of the player characters should have magical powers.
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@Crimson Raven I was mentioning that I'm not looking for cartoonish grit to provide an example for the other end of the realism spectrum, not as a reference to your sheet. Like I said, I think you should reread the OP, particularly the world and setting sections. None of the player characters should have magical powers.


Its not magic so much as a Demon’s power. Demons who’s existence are relevant to the greater plot. I’ve read the OP, and its not as clear as you are being here. Again, the purpose of it is not to give him cool powers, but a way to get over an otherwise crippling disbility in a short time, and develop him as a character.

But, I see that you are pretty adamantly against this, am I right?

Edit: if you say yes, I’ll drop it here.
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@Crimson Raven I get that his blindness is to facilitate character development and not for its coolness, but if you'd like to use a crippling weakness to develop a character, I've always firmly believed that character should deal with the repercussions of that weakness more often than they do not, lest their lack of hindrance from a disability plant them in cool power territory.

Yes, as mentioned, I do not think it fits in with the setting I've written out, but I would be glad to see another take on this character, or a different one entirely.
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@DeadbeatWalking Alright, I’ll do some more thinking then. Thank you for hearing me out.
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