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@eclecticwitch I know I'm late but I still find her backstory to be over the top and she should, regardless of "leaving the past behind" should definitely have some scars to present day. It just really doesn't add up with your quotes and personality section thus far. This is an RP where you can't just have such things like you had happened to Bobbi just go without any type of consequences. It's not a fashion accessory. lol

You should probably do some research on former drug addicts and how they got off, and more research into children that were sexually abused. I mean I like the idea of a former drug addict (especially when the first plot involves drugs) but not everything adds up to me. I just think everything would add up if you removed some of the more melodramatic aspects to her backstory.

Now, onto her power; I like the idea of the void being a family heirloom and how it's a bit more consistent now... I just think that the powerset is a bit messy now. So she has dimensional reach which allows her to store objects and the void which allows her to pull strange objects out of thin air? Why don't you just combine both powers together under the title "The Void" or w/e? It would make it more cohesive. You can probably PM this to me but I also want a clear description of what the Void is because right now it sounds pretty... all over the place. Especially since it can apparently strength her?
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This is an RP where you can't just have such things like you had happened to Bobbi just go without any type of consequences. It's not a fashion accessory.


This. If not to strengthen your character immensely then out of respect for those among us who have suffered similar hardships in life. Not saying you're intending to treat it like an accessory of sorts or that you're even doing this, but it's always been a real pet peeve of mine to see characters with monumental character struggles simply tacked on. It's unfortunate that so many people do/did it. Throwback to 2012 when I was learning. I do not miss those days.
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@Aeolian I think her character is okay, I like it actually... her power on the other hand's gonna need some clarification. Mainly

Her power is mostly subconscious, meaning it protects her from harm whether she wants it to or not, or is aware of the incoming threat or not. However, she can consciously activate her field herself if she is aware of a threat that her field has yet to detect.


Which is near immediately contradicted by...

The field does not activate for threats it does not "know," since her power is mostly instinctive. For instance, Jean knows touching a rose thorn is bad, but her field would not automatically protect her from contact with it. The same goes for people who may pose a threat to her, but don't behave in a way that signals that they are trying to cause her body or mind immediate harm. In this way, it is possible to "trick" her field to bypass it. Enough trauma to her field can temporarily "shatter" i


Sooooooooooo which is it? lol

I believe it might be more sensical in my opinion that she has to percieve something as a threat rather than an omnipotent magic shield. But, on the other hand, I'd be okay with it being able to sense threats if I known how much the shield could take or how fast it could manifest.
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Good Points, I guess for simplicity sake, we'll just make it so she has to perceive something as a threat and activate the field herself instead of the "omnipotent magic shield" thing. :P

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Sorry about double post, but modifications have been made.@Ruler Inc

I'm glad that you like her though.

Sorry the powers were a bit troublesome at first. Hope its okay now.

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Edit: Guess I didn't double post after all. :)

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Here it is, I can make edits as needed, since this is version 1.0. Powers were a bit weird to write since even though I love playing with technopacy, does that mean I'm an expert with it? Hell to the no. I legit did not touch power wiki when working on this, lmao. Feedback is of course, welcome.

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@Aeolian How much do you think the shield can take before it gets shattered?




While one could go through the usual tales of just where this kid came from, its a story most will know by this point, so we'll gloss over the more darker parts, save for the tales to come.


I don't get this part... this is something I believe should be elaborated on rather than just glossing pass it. Unless you plan on revealing it in IC which is fine.

Unlike most versions, Serene knows exactly every major detail of her family history. Her grandfather being a lunatic who nearly ruined everything for the dark side of their fortune, to her father being the reason the mad scientist Doctor Metal met..a mysterious end, and so on. She knows this, and wears the tattoo of House Drakos with pride, the eastern dragon that strikes fear into the heart of those who know just how deep the black money goes. Despite this, she has no actual handling of the family's black fortune, preferring to keep her fingers clean for the moment.


I thiiiiiiiiink this is vague and ill-defined... I think you should better explain this paragraph to us since we're not familiar to the character or the lore you thought of for them. What is House Drakos? Why are there "Houses" in 2019? lol

It wasn't that her father feared them, but rather, he respected them, having been forced to kill more than a few in his career, and fight alongside still more


So wait, is her father Professor Drake or Doctor Metal?

Of course this was what what Serene wanted. In this case, she dipped her fingers into the darkside, pulling a few strings via her grandmother's connections, to acquire the materials needed. After careful testing to confirm the serum worked, Serene had herself injected with the serum of a type-blue.


I'm going to have to talk to you about the serums in private because the serums are a whole new can of worms.

or even merge pieces of technology together to complete one task.


How does this work? Does she like gain the technological knowledge to pull it off or..? And how can she, going off her quotes, manifest fists and shit?

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Hmm....I haven't really thought of the math behind the durability of the field, but it certainly is no ultimate defense mechanism.

If I can compare it's defensive capabilities to anything, I'd say it possesses the same level of strength as Violet's shield from the Incredibles 2. So it's quite durable, but certainly has its limits.

But to quantify it's durability before it shatters? I'm not sure. I think it's situational, but using practical reasoning to justify when it shatters and when it doesn't should be good right? Not meta-gaming it as some omni-shield essentially. Stopping a vehicle wouldn't shatter it, but stopping a continuous onslaught of bullets would eventually shatter it. Just depends on the force and how powerful and/or persistent that force is against her.

Hope I clarified it as best as I could. If you have a certain limit you have in mind, I don't mind adhering to it.

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If I can compare it's defensive capabilities to anything, I'd say it possesses the same level of strength as Violet's shield from the Incredibles 2. So it's quite durable, but certainly has its limits.



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The reason I noted green/blue was mainly because I couldn't recall which was the actual eye color for the FC. As for merging, it would require her to actually understand both pieces, and take the time needed to merge them, which really just means connecting them together and hoping they work. I can, however, remove that with ease. Professor Drake is her dad, Doctor Metal the bad guy. Sorry if that wasn't too clear. As for bio details overall regarding glossed over stuff, I was going to cover that in actual rp, to avoid spoilers if needed. I can change house to family, its just a term to refer to the blacker side of the family business. With serums, I can fix that up, the impression you gave me on Discord awhile back was that the serums worked fine, but if there's a big issue, I can adjust that, to say having her be a naturally born metahuman, or found a way to gain powers safely. As for the fists, that was more tongue in cheek, as being able to well, generate something like that would require more training than she had at that point in the biography. If having that as a statement that isn't yet indicative of IC stuff is an issue, I can replace it to something else, perhaps referencing something else that could make a person shit themselves.

If you'd like, we ca always move this to Discord to talk more at length. I'm fine with changing or elaborating as needed. Truth be told, I was running on fumes when I wrote that up last night, so me missing something, big or small, isn't too surprising. I just wanted to get the initial version up, so you could tear it apart and I repair accordingly. You tore it up a lot less than I expected, but enough to give me clear areas to work with. Like I said, if certain things are major enough an issue, I'm completely fine with rewriting entire sections as needed. If there's something else you said that I somehow failed to address, whoops. Thanks for the feedback though.
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@Aeolian Violet's shield in Incredibles was, as Junk's video demonstrates, powerful enough to stop a multi-ton robit.

So it's basically strong enough to be immune to everything the cast can throw at it. Stopping a speeding car is fucking strong as a car is a lot of speed and weight flying at you.

Personally I think while surviving an onslaught of bullets would be fine, a 50. cal should shatter it no question. I think it should be impervious to conventional damage ala a punch from a professional heavyweight boxer and pistols, but weak against the superhuman such as Henry should be able to destroy it after a few blows.
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Here is a quick rundown of our antagonists for the Happiness arc

♦ The Boyz ♦


A gang of outcasts and freaks that the city didn't want, forming their own gang. The Boyz are a gang of drug dealers and other petty criminals that have a pretty large presence in Charity Beach. They are not racist in their recruitment as they have people from all races in their ranks and their leader wants outcasts, whatever they are. Their gang is primarily comprised of crazy drug addicts but some teenagers and other folks have taken to their philosophy and joined their gang. Their gang symbol is a smiley face a big toothy grin and the eyes crossed out with X's. The Boys modus operandi is to get rich by selling drugs and become the biggest force in the city for the downtrodden. Their leader is Joy-Boy, a Metahuman with an unknown ability, and he maintains a loose leadership through his three generals (or "Dragons" as he calls them). He asserts that every member of the Boyz proves themselves before they may join, and once they are an official and trusted member they get a mask of their own creation - usually a smiley face. They were a pretty small-time gang/fad until they started distributing the Happiness drug and were able to quickly expand territory. The Boyz now have a large chunk of the city under their control and it's getting larger with more Metahumans joining their ranks. FAMA, the CPPD, and other law enforcement is preparing to move in on The Boyz, but Joyboy has prepared for war.


Now is a good time to start planning on your characters and what they will do during the Happiness Crisis. For example, Kashmira will be aiding addicts in her hospital and trying to figure out what tf is going on. I am also going to work on a relationship sheet so we can work out any existing relationships.

Also I dropped Sierra to replace her with a brand new character


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