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Hidden 3 yrs ago Post by Lugubrious
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@darkred, some of the formatting on your sheet is still broken. That aside, I have a few tips:
-The personality section is mostly background. I would have the personality be the 'what' and then background the 'why' to clearly delineate the two
-A character's background, their history up to the point where Galeem destroyed everything, would typically end with some mention of the calamity

The main problems deal with the kit being extremely overtuned. No matter how strong a character was or what they had before entering the World of Light, they're reduced to a 'Level 1' strength, with powers and equipment missing
-You can start with a maximum of three strengths
-You can start with only a couple items. For Aloy, I would expect that to be her spear, her bow, and her tripcaster
-I see 'focus' mentioned everywhere. What is that? Is it some kind of ability? I would expect that Focus would be her Power
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Another tip for BBCode in general, but please put things in hiders.



Makes it easier for everyone else to scroll through sheets or differentiate them in general.
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Oh, the Focus is a machine that Aloy found in her world but it's not exactly a Power to be honest. It's more a gadget that tells her about people and information and where to find enemies weak points, etc..
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Oh, the Focus is a machine that Aloy found in her world but it's not exactly a Power to be honest. It's more a gadget that tells her about people and information and where to find enemies weak points, etc..


In a lot of ways, game mechanics and equipment can be Powers. It's a flexible category. For instance, Junkrat had the Power 'Mine Maker', which allowed him to pull a new explosive mine out of thin air to use on a cooldown, which is a reality-bending Power revolving around an item. Tora has a gameplay mechanic from his game that quickly restores his HP out of battle. I assume that this Focus thing wouldn't just have information from Horizon Zero Dawn. If it's able to figure out useful information about entirely unknown entities in the World of Light, that's a bit of a reality bend, and given the usefulness of data gathering in general I would definitely say that qualifies as a Power. Plus, the original power you had is no good because it just describes her strongest weapon.
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Alright, I can make the Focus a power then. But still a question. In the game, Aloy was always able to use it. Would she be able to use it at will or only at certain times?
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It'll be something she can use at will.
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Perfect. That's what I needed to know.
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How does it look so far?
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How does it look so far?


Very good changes! The only thing I can see is that it appears there's still 4 Strengths, when I said the max for a starting character was 3. If you square that away, we'll be good to go.
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Sorry about that, I made the changes to 3 strengths. It was hard deciding what to take away.
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Sorry about that, I made the changes to 3 strengths. It was hard deciding what to take away.


Well, you'll have plenty to give back to her as you gain levels. Aloy is accepted. Go ahead and put her in the Characters tab and I'll PM you about an entry point.
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our power grows
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Stonks.
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Whoot! Thank you guys!!!
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I'll just wait for the PM to arrive so I can do Aloy's entry point.
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Noice.
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@Lugubrious Did everyone focus on the big monster?
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@Lugubrious Did everyone focus on the big monster?


No, only Tora and your character focused on the Gorlek. Sectonia and Panther did some damage to one Lamia with magic, while Joker and Mona took care of the other. Three Roaders also appeared.
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@Lugubrious I only saw a few posts in that area, not that many people, unless there's a lot of NPCs in that list.
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@Lugubrious I only saw a few posts in that area, not that many people, unless there's a lot of NPCs in that list.


Archmage has posted for Sectonia, Yankee for Primrose, and I for Tora and the NPCs, last cycle. This cycle, it is true that there haven't been posts for that fight yet. However, your character should have everything he needs to keep fighting the Gorlek, since my Tora was the one helping him.
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