@Tywell Hey I appreciate the submission, but with this sheet in its current state I do not think I will accept it at this time. I can see the beginnings of an idea here, but there’s too many vague details that aren’t quite clear why they’re vague.
If you can tighten up the idea, flesh out a few extra details, explain why his identity needs to be/is concealed, elaborate a bit on the family business(es), what his formal role on this skeleton crew is, etc. that’d go a long way to getting this where it needs to be.
I can see the core idea; ‘Hardass uncle refuses to see his merits and demands he meet an unreachable standard, uses wealth and influence to force him into a ‘test’ on the moon’, and while I think that’s a workable core concept I think you meed to spend a little more time at the ironing board for this one.
If you can tighten up the idea, flesh out a few extra details, explain why his identity needs to be/is concealed, elaborate a bit on the family business(es), what his formal role on this skeleton crew is, etc. that’d go a long way to getting this where it needs to be.
I can see the core idea; ‘Hardass uncle refuses to see his merits and demands he meet an unreachable standard, uses wealth and influence to force him into a ‘test’ on the moon’, and while I think that’s a workable core concept I think you meed to spend a little more time at the ironing board for this one.
