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Hokage is coming along > not entirely satisfied with the concept for her kekkei genkai, so I'll sleep on it.


First jounin's also being worked on.

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@BuddhaOk I started over, from scratch and took my time creating the character. I didn't give as much as a detailed personal history but I figured that is sort of where I went wrong last time. I might still lack punctuations, that's not my best area and I will admit it, but I think everything should be good now. I changed the image so it doesn't look like something from Paint MS. I originally used a deviantart and created a character and just took a screenshot.

I changed the names originally used a name generator, but I hope this works.


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Hidden 8 yrs ago 8 yrs ago Post by Thecrash20
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Ok up for review.


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@BladeSS4@Queentze@Thecrash20 I will do some reviews after I properly wake up and get motivated to do things.

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Yes, also take a look at mine. Only the family section/tai-gen-jutsu left. And the pic...and the birth name. Also I didn't deem it necessary to add that I carry metal wires/kunai/ninja stars and the ordinary stuff.
BUT BESIDES THOSE I'M DONE!
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@BladeSS4 I'll refrain from giving you a full blown review - it's accepted. I expect you to try to better your spelling and grammar along the way but you seem enthusiastic and motivated and we appreciate that. If you need help in terms of spelling and grammar, feel free to ask us and we will do our best.

Move the character to the characters tab when you went.

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Review in red


Accepted, move it to the characters bit when you're ready.

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Ok up for review. Ask and you shall receive


Take a look at my comments -> edit what you find neccesary, and then feel free to post it in the character bin.


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Yes, also take a look at mine. Only the family section/tai-gen-jutsu left. And the pic...and the birth name. Also I didn't deem it necessary to add that I carry metal wires/kunai/ninja stars and the ordinary stuff.
BUT BESIDES THOSE I'M DONE!


Preferably I only grade finished character sheets, since it saves time for me.
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I'm seeing a lot of Konoha. My original plan was to make a member of the Kaguya clan, but would it be better if I simply picked up a clan from Konoha as to not split us up?
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@Asura Please.. go with Kaguya. Your character can be any clan as long as you have a good reason for them ending up in Konoha.

I.e. the easiest solution is 'he immigrated there' or something.
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@Asura Please.. go with Kaguya. Your character can be any clan as long as you have a good reason for them ending up in Konoha.

I.e. the easiest solution is 'he immigrated there' or something.


Is 'gots to eat when a famine is on' a good enough reason? :p
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@Asura I'll accept it, but only because that's a realistic and logical answer.
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It's worth mentioning that this is AU. If you wanted to, you could've made the Kaguya a Konoha clan all along.

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I dunno. The Kaguya's bloodlusting bullshit seems very Anti-Konoha in nature.
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@Asura Which is good, because the other characters so far are pretty pro-Konoha.

I've had a lot of fun with my 'my clan comes first, Konoha is merely the tool to keep my clan safe' character simply because he hated everyone except for his own clan.

It makes you a lot of enemies. And that's fun.
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Alrighty. I'll drum up a character, maybe play around with balancing innate ruthlessness with the 'heroic' expectations that come with living in Konohagakure vs Kirigakure.

May even make a lass to cut this sausagefest. :p
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Hokage will be a woman, so no patriarchy in my damn IC.
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Hokage will be a woman, so no patriarchy in my damn IC.


What if I wanna conform to patriarchy, huh?! Don't oppress me!

Or... Or do, I guess.
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