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So yeah.. I thought it was time for another character.
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An interesting take on a Son of Aphrodite.

Accepted! You can post him in the Chars Tab. :)
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cool :)
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Finished!
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@IrishAngelQueen I like her
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Finished!


Not bad overall, but a couple of things:

-More detail on the following sections:
  • Personality
    • If you could, explain some more about how she is with each trait. Or at least extend it to 1-2 more paragraphs.
  • Bio
    • Same for powers here, but just explain her life out a bit more. The bio section needs to be two paragraphs, anyways.
  • Godly powers
    • For the powers, I want it to have some explanation of what she can or can't do. Like, how much fire can she manipulate? How much control does she have over it? Can she create fire or can she only manipulate already existing fire? What can she manipulate it in to? Like, can she form blasts, constructs and the like? If so, how large/small are they and how long can they stay active until time takes its toll?
    • For the high temperatures ability, I need a range of how hot is too hot for her. I get that she's Hephaestus' daughter, but there must be a temperature where it's just too hot for her. Even if nothing, I need some kind of explanation there.
    • As for the fire eyes, how far in the dark can she see? Is there a limit of how far ahead of her she can see? Also, can she make out things that are naturally invisible in the dark, such as a chameleon or those with the power of invisibility? Also, I need a decent explanation of how she turns it on/off.


Fix what I mentioned and she's accepted.
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So Ray has been around for a while, probably some people know him. Anybody up for being connected to him somehow?
could be classmate or friend, or nemesis or ex-girlfriend. He could just be coffee guy from the café. Or perhaps your secret whisky provider.
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<Snipped quote by IrishAngelQueen>

Not bad overall, but a couple of things:

-More detail on the following sections:
  • Personality
    • If you could, explain some more about how she is with each trait. Or at least extend it to 1-2 more paragraphs.
  • Bio
    • Same for powers here, but just explain her life out a bit more. The bio section needs to be two paragraphs, anyways.
  • Godly powers
    • For the powers, I want it to have some explanation of what she can or can't do. Like, how much fire can she manipulate? How much control does she have over it? Can she create fire or can she only manipulate already existing fire? What can she manipulate it in to? Like, can she form blasts, constructs and the like? If so, how large/small are they and how long can they stay active until time takes its toll?
    • For the high temperatures ability, I need a range of how hot is too hot for her. I get that she's Hephaestus' daughter, but there must be a temperature where it's just too hot for her. Even if nothing, I need some kind of explanation there.
    • As for the fire eyes, how far in the dark can she see? Is there a limit of how far ahead of her she can see? Also, can she make out things that are naturally invisible in the dark, such as a chameleon or those with the power of invisibility? Also, I need a decent explanation of how she turns it on/off.


Fix what I mentioned and she's accepted.


okay.
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Things have been bit quite.... That moment when you wanna post for Clarissa/Amelia as I have a few ideas in my head...lol...but Sammy and Jay's reply isn't up yet....
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Things have been bit quite.... That moment when you wanna post for Clarissa/Amelia as I have a few ideas in my head...lol...but Sammy and Jay's reply isn't up yet....


Yeah, sorry about that. Roze was having some computer troubles, but hopefully we'll be able to be on at the same time and be able to finish the collab. :)
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@Altered Tundra I am just excited for your reply...I'd post, but it wouldn't make much sense if the girls don't see Sammy fail or succeed at lifting Jay..lol

Hope her computer is okay now...I know the feeling when it comes to computer troubles.
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Yeah it's definitely quiet around here these days. Kara, Roze and I are again working on a collab, so that is coming.
But I'm also waiting on @McHaggis to post.
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@McHaggiscool :)
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Hey guys - just to let you know I have mock exams at college this week, so I probably won't be on. For once in my damn life, I'm actually revising. XD
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You guys still accepting?
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You guys still accepting?


Of course. :) What kind of character are you interested in making?
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@Altered Tundra Well any kind of character you are short on. :) Any characters the RP needs?
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@Altered Tundra Well any kind of character you are short on. :) Any characters the RP needs?
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@Altered Tundra Well any kind of character you are short on. :) Any characters the RP needs?
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