Dion

Naruto: Yogensha. Partake in the prophecy.

@BladeSS4 I mean we have Neurovoid's character who has also got a Sharingan. Having an Uchiha would be acceptable if they arrived as refugees during the recent war. But you can give him a regular surname, that's up to you.

Naruto: Yogensha. Partake in the prophecy.

@BladeSS4 I believe that the Hozuki hydrification techniques can actually be learned by anyone though, not just Hozuki. It's just a hiden?

Naruto: Yogensha. Partake in the prophecy.

Review in red

Mizushima Sachi

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lol

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Personalia

_{Information collected by the census office of Amegakure}

“I'm not all too special.”
damn right bitch

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Mizushima Sachi

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Freak, Murderer, Thief
great

now my character has reasons to dislike her from the get-go

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N/A

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Female

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14

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Konohagakure

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Mizushima

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Genin

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Sachi’s unnatural eye gives her a bit of a nasty reputation among her peers. They believe that she killed the Uchiha her sharingan was from with her bare hands and ripped his eyes out like some sort of monster. Whenever she tried to defend herself, she dug herself an even deeper grave. The orphanage did not treat her well socially, leaving her a bit estranged. So nobody knows her really beyond what she looks like?

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Psychology & History

_{From detailed inspection and investigation by Black Ops and medical personnel}

“W-What? I'm not comfortable talking about that....”

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Sachi was born to the Mizushima clan of Konohagakure. Specifically, Kurui and Muchi. Two of the clan's top shinobi, at least, when they were still shinobi. They had been retired due to their decline in performance, so they taught in the school. Teaching in the school taught them a love for children, though it might be the other way around for others. They tried for a child, and so Sachi was born.

When Muchi contracted a chakra virus, Kurui did everything he could to stop it, but there was nothing he could do. She passed in her sleep the night of Sachi's second birthday. Thus began his research about Dōjutsu, he was bitter and spiteful that his beloved wife had died. He had this delusion that one of the Sharingan's genjutsu could have stopped it. There was no practical reasoning for this, and when he tried to talk to the Uchiha, they laughed at him and shunned him. It got so bad that even his own clan shunned him.

Kurui's delusion took him to a point where it became less about the chakra virus and more about stealing a sharingan to fuel a power-hungry ego of his. These traits that he showed were more apparent each and everyday, making a negative impact on his daughter. She became incredibly timid and afraid of everything, becoming a jumpy child.

Around the age of 10, Kurui finally went off the deep end. He captured and tortured a young man named Uchiha Fuun. Tortured being used relatively loosely, because while Kurui did not inflict any wounds beyond ripping his eyes out, he did not put the boy out of his misery and left him to suffer.

Sachi was vehemently against this, and knew it was wrong, despite her fathers attempts to trick her, telling her that he volunteered and such. Though, these protests amounted to nothing in the end. Kurui knocked her out and transplanted the eye. Sachi did not take well to this, and threatened to go to a higher-up of some kind, but Kurui kept her quiet, he had been planning to flee the leaf regardless.

Kurui forcefully took Sachi and fled the village after learning that Amegakure was currently taking in refugees. They made it to the Hidden Rain Village safely, but was met with an Uchiha hit squad, presumably friends and family members of Fuun. They killed Kurui, leaving Sachi to herself. The leader of the hit squad told her bluntly that he wanted her to suffer for her fathers' actions.

After being found by the minashigo-in koyō sābisu, she was quickly enlisted to be trained in the orphanage. She hardly ever used her sharingan, only but once when she was being harassed by another student about it. Sachi lashed out, knocking the student to the ground.

This caused an instructor, Kūki Ryuu, to take a special interest in her. He wondered just what the girl had to offer EHEHEHEHEHE WE FINNA STEAL THAT SHARINGAN FOR OURSELVES, and while it wasn't much, he believed she had potential. Proficient in Fūton, Ryuu taught Sachi the basics of the nature, allowing her to copy Fūton techniques as well as Suiton, her natural affinity.
Ryuu was and continues to be a father figure for her, considering hers was less than subpar. nah seems like a top bloke to me 10/10. I think you got the orphanage down pretty well considering they're this ROOT-esque organization

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The Mizushima are native to Konohagakure, renowned for their water release techniques. They were one of the first families to settle in the Hidden Leaf, along with the Akimichi, Yamanaka, and Nara. The family has no kekkei genkai, but a numbered amount of techniques that can be attributed to their name. While Sachi has never met a majority of her extended family, when seeking refuge in the Hidden Rain, her father brought scrolls containing jutsus he was planning to learn with his newly-acquired sharingan.

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Mizushima Kurui ✝ | Father | 42, Kurui studied the common dōjutsu within Konohagakure, most specifically the Sharingan. While he had multiple studies on the Byakugan, it was not the one he was most interested in. He wanted to know exactly how the copying aspect of the eye worked , and to do that, he had to have a sharingan on hand. After asking around, it was clear no Uchiha was interested in helping his studies. Which meant he had to take matters into his own hands.

Mizushima Muchi ✝ | Mother | 38, most of her mother's past is unknown to her. Sachi had constantly badgered her father before his untimely demise, but he would never budge.
Unbeknownst to Sachi, Muchi was a beautiful young house wife up until she contracted a chakra virus, dying when Sachi was only two years old.

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Sachi dreams to be rid of the horrible trauma that she's faced, watching her own father be killed in front of her, his stolen sharingan being ripped out in such a gory and horrible fashion. Sachi has a fear of the Uchiha, and whenever she sees another wielder of the Sharingan or their symbol, she freezes up momentarily.

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Combat Reports

_{From detailed reports from previous missions and academy sparring matches}

“Why are you looking at my eye like that?”
cause it's a sharingan dumbass. you think the orphanage would teach her that she's not normal

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Sachi fights at a mid-range, using long-range ninjutsu to wear down an enemy slowly, while still being able to get up close with her taijutsu. so she can do everything????

| Ｋｅｋｋｅｉ ｇｅｎｋａｉ － ｂｌｏｏｄｌｉｎｅ ｌｉｍｉｔ: |

Ｋｅｋｋｅｉ ｇｅｎｋａｉ ｎａｍｅ

Sharingan

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Due to the fact that she only has one Sharingan, it's not as effective as it could be. She can not use any of the Genjutsu, the eye she has seems to be naturally pre-disposed to work as the eye of insight, granting her the ability to see chakra, have an incredibly high perception, and the ability to copy almost any jutsu she sees although this is true, it's most certainly limited for her, especially since she has 1 tomoe.. Sachi only has one tomoe.

Ｓｔｒｅｎｇｔｈｓ

It grants Sachi high perception, and the copy aspect of the eye works perfectly.

Ｗｅａｋｎｅｓｓｅｓ

She can not use any of Sharingan's Genjutsu techniques, which are considered to be some of the most powerful techniques that Sharingan allows. this isn't a weakness but a limit. a weakness is something that someone else can exploit to get around the sharingan or deal with it. in short, what are the kinks in the sharingans armor?

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Ａ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

N/A

Ｂ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

Suiton: Suishōha (downscaled to half the size) k

Ｃ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

Mizu Kamikiri
Mizu no Muchi

Ｄ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

Fūton: Toppa
Suiton: Mizu Shuriken (up to two)

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Mizu Kamikiri

Ｊｕｔｓｕ ｎａｍｅ

Mizu Kamikiri

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C

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Far-Mid

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A jutsu created by the Mizushima, Sachi slams her foot into the ground, much like the Tsūtenkyaku, causing water to rise up and travel towards her target as a slicing jet. Simple jutsu so a small description like this will suffice

Mizu no Muchi

Ｊｕｔｓｕ ｎａｍｅ

Mizu no Muchi

Ｒａｎｋ

C

Ｒａｎｇｅ

Far-Mid

Ｄｅｓｃｒｉｐｔｉｏｎ

A jutsu created by the Mizushima, Mizu no Muchi is a ninjutsu technique that utilizes water to create a whip. The whip will function in the normal fashion. same as before

Take a look, improve where you see fit and post it in the char tab.

@Neurovoid

Naruto: Yogensha. Partake in the prophecy.

Uragiri Sakana

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Personalia

_{Information collected by the census office of Amegakure}

“Violence is in our blood. Amegakure's creation was through war. It is inevitable we return to our roots.”

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Uragiri Sakana

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Blackeye

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Male

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16

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Amegakure

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Uragiri

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Jonin

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Sakana is relatively well known throughout Amegakure, mostly because he became a jonin at the young age of 16. Although not impossible, it is relatively uncommon. It was to be expected however, as Sakana is a very skilled shinobi, on par with a genius. However, this does have a turnside - he is also known to have some ideas that are directly in line with Iie Hizen's thoughts and ideas, and he takes them perhaps a bit too literally.

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Psychology & History

_{From detailed inspection and investigation by Black Ops and medical personnel}

“Any time you get hurt and survive - that's a lesson. A child only sticks his finger into the flame once.”

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Sakana was born in Amegakure 16 years ago, under the reign of Iie Hizen. Being raised in such an environment was not an easy feat (but one that all his peers eventually had to get through). However, Sakana seemed to thrive in an environment where any sign of revolution was punished harshly. He graduated to the genin rank at 12, which was a relatively standard age for a boy to become a genin. His time in school had been relatively uneventful - he performed above average, but far from perfect. Most of that had to do with his attitude, being prone to being disinterested in whatever the teacher had to teach.

Throughout his academy time, he was relatively indifferent about Amegakure, but after graduating his loyalty began growing to a point where he would support the Amekage even if he committed mass murder. Seeing potential in Sakana, his sensei allowed him to take part in internal chunin exams, which were harsh but fair, and at age 14 he was already made a chunin, a step ahead of his peers. It was at that point that his name began spreading around too, as he became known as 'that kid with the black eyes who is already a chunin.' Of course, that was only a temporary title before people actually learned his name.

He participated in some small scale skirmishes with Sunagakure mostly, trifling over borders and trade. Most of them were just small team based missions where they ran into Sunagakure shinobi that claimed they were intruding on their business, but they were usually easily routed. There were very few cases where people actually died.

To further add to the surprise however, he became a jonin at age 16, only making his genius more apparent. Although he didn't stand out as a legendary shinobi or anything of the like, he was simply very good at what he did making himself quite the promising individual early on. It seemed that with every promotion his loyalty to the cause of Amegakure became bigger, almost to the point where people openly questioned whether he had been brainwashed or was under some permanent genjutsu or something.

He has been a jonin for, give or take, 3 months now. He was primarily doing missions during this but recently was put on hold by the Amekage and alerted that he will be leading a team shortly, teaching three genin in the art of warfare and performing duties with them as they enter a period of turmoil with the ongoing war.

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_{Uragiri clan symbol}

The Uragiri clan is relatively unknown, even in Amegakure. They provide mostly standard civilians in Amegakure who work in the industrial plants creating metal and tools. They all stand out, however, due to the black and yellow eyes that run in their family - any Uragiri clan member is recognizable by their eyes. This trait, while genetic, can be recessive and there are very few Uragiri clan members who do not have these eyes - but they do exist. In such a case the clan members can be identified by their clan icon, which is a set of black and white koi circling each other. The image is fitting, given that their eyes give them a somewhat fishy appearance.

The clan is primarily (90%) just pure civilians that mostly work in shops or the industry. The remaining 10% are shinobi, like Sakana. And, while they are good at what they do, they are typically not very well renowned - not because nobody likes them or so, but just because they are pretty average all together. For that, Sakana is pretty much the one exception. In doing so, he has also become the clans' pride, more or less.

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Uragiri Same | Mother | 41, shinobi as part of the regyura. She is currently leading her own team of genin as well.
Uragiri Sāmon | Father | 45, teacher at the shinobi academy in Amegakure. Most kids like him because he 'looks cool.' He's not a bad teacher, just a little boring.

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What is there to dream of for a person whose only loyalty is to the village? What is there to fear but death itself?

Sakana has no higher aspirations - his goals were met the day he became jonin, and his further goals are to do whatever it takes to aid Amegakure in becoming better.

His fears are, perhaps deep down, also linked to that. Seeing Amegakure lose a war or become annexed are truly fears but are they intrinsically his? Every person in Amegakure should share those fears. No, he has no fears of his own - only those of his village.

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Combat Reports

_{From detailed reports from previous missions and academy sparring matches}

“All your training is useless if you don't know how to apply it - once you take a life, you'll understand.”

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Sakana is a ninjutsu genius, mastering 3 elements not only at barely his first year as a jonin, but as a 16 year old no less. For this reason he utilizes his ninjutsu a lot. He prefers to stay in close to medium range, taking a bit of a front role at times but maintaining enough distance to use ninjutsu. Never the less, he is also quite skilled at close combat, though this isn't his forté so to speak.

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Ｓ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

Ura Shishō Fūin

Ａ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

Katon: Gōka Messhitsu
Katon: Gōka Mekkyaku
Kuchiyose no Jutsu [See details in lower section]

Ｂ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

Katon: Gōka Mekkyaku
Doton: Doryū Jōheki
Suiton: Sensatsu Suishō
Hien

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Katon: Gōkakyū no Jutsu
Sūpu-jutsu: Sutōbu ​​o tentō
Suiton: Ja no Kuchi
Suiton: Amegakure no Jutsu
Sūpu-jutsu: Sūpu mizu
Sūpu-jutsu: Bōru

Ｄ ｒａｎｋ ｔｅｃｈｎｉｑｕｅｓ

Doton: Earth Shelter
Katon: Karyūdan

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Sūpu-jutsu: Bōru

Ｊｕｔｓｕ ｎａｍｅ

Sūpu-jutsu: Bōru

Ｒａｎｋ

C

Ｒａｎｇｅ

Up to 20 meters.

Ｄｅｓｃｒｉｐｔｉｏｎ

This Doton technique forms the basis of a three-nature combination. The Bowl jutsu causes the target to be encased in a dome of earth around them, which then lifts up off of the earth on four earthen pillars. The jutsu is simple. There really isn't much to it - it doesn't kill, damage, or harm you, it just traps you inside the dome. That's bad, right?

Well you can break free. Use S, A, B, or C-rank lightning based jutsu's to break through, or use sheer force if you're really that strong. Just do it in time before the next part of the combo.

Sūpu-jutsu: Sūpu mizu

Ｊｕｔｓｕ ｎａｍｅ

Sūpu-jutsu: Sūpu mizu

Ｒａｎｋ

C

Ｒａｎｇｅ

Up to 20 meters.

Ｄｅｓｃｒｉｐｔｉｏｎ

This Suiton based jutsu is the next step. Thought being trapped in a dome of earth was bad enough? WRONG! Through a hole in the top of the dome that briefly opens at the command of the user, the user then spews water into the 'soup bowl' until it's full of water. Congratulations, you'll now be drowning!

Since this is a suiton jutsu, you could possibly use wind to create a bubble of air for yourself to breathe, though it's not drowning you need to worry about. At this stage of the combo it becomes more or less impossible to use electricity to free yourself from the dome as you'd electrocute yourself. Unless you're willing to risk that. Sheer force would still be enough to break free, but since water slows down movement, it'd likely have to come from the outside.

Or another solution. Maybe you can think of something. Better hurry before the next step, which is..

Sūpu-jutsu: Sutōbu ​​o tentō

Ｊｕｔｓｕ ｎａｍｅ

Sūpu-jutsu: Sutōbu ​​o tentō

Ｒａｎｋ

C

Ｒａｎｇｅ

Up to 20 meters.

Ｄｅｓｃｒｉｐｔｉｏｎ

The final step in the three jutsu combo. True to it's name, this is the step that probably is the most dangerous for whomever gets trapped. Using the Katon nature, the user lights a fire underneath the earthen soup bowl/dome that they created, beginning to boil it at an alarming and dangerous rate for whomever is inside. Drown in the soup made of your own body! Muahaha! Ahem. There is no real defence for this step, if you are trapped.

For outsiders it's possible to blow out the fire using wind jutsu, to quench it with a water jutsu, or to simply free those in the bowl with force. Electricity is possible but ill-advised since you'd probably electrocute your friends inside the bowl.

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Two knives

Ｗｅａｐｏｎ ｎａｍｅ

Knives x2

Ｗｅａｐｏｎ， ｔｏｏｌ， ｏｒ ｏｂｊｅｃｔ ｔｙｐｅ

Straight edge knife, corded handle

Ｄｅｓｃｒｉｐｔｉｏｎ

These are two blades made of steel that can be infused (through the Hien/Flying Swallow technique) to sharpen their properties and make them more deadly. Besides that, they have no real 'special' properties.

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Shima the Newt

Ｎａｍｅ

Shima

Ｓｐｅｃｉｅｓ ａｎｄ ｓｉｚｅ

Shima is a newt of about 1.5 meters high, and five meters long. However, most of that is his tail. He is a bright orange with black drawings all over his body in various shapes, most notably a marking on the front of his head that reads 'Shima' in kanji. This marking seems to be entirely natural and it seems to be the case that he was named after this shape.

Ｐｏｗｅｒｓ ａｎｄ ｃａｐａｂｉｌｉｔｉｅｓ

Shima has the 'power' to produce a large flame from his throat by using his chakra, producing either a steady high pressure stream of fire or a large fireball. Furthermore, his aquatic nature as a newt means he's extremely capable in the water and can swim extremely fast - while he is much, much slower on land. ]

Lastly he can fit up to three people in his mouth if they sit down.

Alright, it's finished. I might add more to the personal biography later but it won't be of relevance for the RP I think.

Naruto: Yogensha. Partake in the prophecy.

@Spanner Shit, I misread, thought that was an A rank jutsu. Sorry, ignore what I said then.

Naruto: Yogensha. Partake in the prophecy.

@Spanner Oh, actually. I just realized you don't have an S rank. While I'm okay with you not having one, I think he should have one. Maybe something related to his swift release would be cool. Combine it with an element, or his sword, maybe?

Naruto: Yogensha. Partake in the prophecy.

@Spanner Besides some minor errors, I don't really see anything wrong at the moment. Consider it accepted and thereby the applications for a jonin will close.

Naruto: Yogensha. Partake in the prophecy.

@Spanner Eh, the actual reasons for the war are much larger than that, and serve as a better trigger for war to begin with. It'll be explained in due time. Having him be a trigger wouldn't really work that well.

I'm fine with him having swift release as long as we have a mutual understanding that he just uses it to be faster, but that it isn't like body flicker as in instantaneous movement to the point where he might as well be teleporting. As long as that's clear I don't think it'll be a problem.

Naruto: Yogensha. Partake in the prophecy.

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@Buddha Can you please clarify your opinions about the justifications/questions made as an answer to your corrections? It'll make the correction of the sheet considerably easier.

@Spanner

Alright, first off, some of my comments are not meant to be 100% serious. I don't really care about the callsign for instance, so that it's a mouthful doesn't really matter.

I picked the villages at random due to lack of info, relies mostly in the fact that Konoha was the village that gave Bijuus to Kiri in the past according to the cannon. I can either change the villages or twist ir to make him one of the reasons for the war, whatever you like the most.

True, but there's a reason they're at war. I could've clarified it but opted to do it in the IC, because otherwise I'd have to give away the main antagonist already and I'd prefer not to do that.

But in short; there's a war between Kirigakure and Konohagakure at the moment, however that only started some.. one year ago? So it's possible that he's from Kirigakure. However, them being allied after the first war seems unlikely to me. I'd also opt to change the villages (or just leave the alliance bit out? Whether you're allied or not, during peacetime you'd want to avoid killing shinobi of another village, especially in an exam). A single shinobi being the reason for a war seems a bit much, especially if he went rogue anyway.

A minor info gathering would let clear that it was done under personal grudge, and doing so when he was still a 15 year old boy makes it clear that he has the ability to reinforce the village. As for the time, it is supposed to be an act taken as soon as she became the kage, securing strong individuals loyal to her - a common practice in a place who has coups as a tradition.

There are plenty of strong shinobi in Amegakure though, and for a village that is relatively small and has been the underdog for a long time (and thus at risk of invasion) I'd say that taking in a wanted criminal is more of a reason to get invaded than a reason to strengthen herself. I see where you are coming from but I don't think the con's would outweigh the pro's in this case.

I'd rather say that it is like opening the fifth of the eight gates for a short time but only enhancing speed if i had to make an analogy... Still, it's pretty similar to body flicker in practice. I can probably change that if you want

Which is a bit too much. In practice, it's too much like body flicker. In fact, it's unknown currently how swift release is even different from body flicker;

How this nature differs from the common Body Flicker Technique, aside from speed difference, is unknown. It is possible that Swift-natured chakra is being applied to the Body Flicker, which is a general skill, to produce this effect.

Narutopedia

I'm not against him being really speedy, but there's something about instant movement that is cheesy in a fight.

Also, having a jonin going around zooming between enemies finishing them all off seems like it'd force the students to just kinda.. sit back and watch. Cool in theory, but for an RP, it's not that good.

Naruto: Yogensha. Partake in the prophecy.

<Snipped quote by Buddha>

I changed my god damn mind, bitchtits.

@Hillan

Knowing your activity, neh.