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Current "When you have an unfair system the only thing you have to do in order for that system to be used against you, is to wait."
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Nothing ever ends poetically. It ends and we turn it into poetry. All of that blood was never once beautiful. It was just red.
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Oh sorry. I read the question wrong. 1's actually my social security number.
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The phallic stimulation toy of consequence rarely arrives pre-lubricated.
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I have 3 mottos here in life, really.




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I mean, it might be disqualified for not being close enough to superheroes... But if it's not.

This > Everything else.



Though, for what it's worth you are all terrible people for not mentioning this earlier.


Chapter 1: Something ends.


Strapped to the cold stone table laid the 16-year-old girl, her skin paler than the moon, clad in her purple spandex, her robe had been removed and destroyed - a symbol of her saviors' power that her captors had no interest in preserving. She wouldn't need it anymore. Her name was Raven, at least that was her new chosen name. Once upon a time, her mother had called her Annabelle. That very same mother was currently one of the six-eyed beasts holding her captive. She was bound with chains enchanted with the blood of the sorcerers of Azarath - Ravens own masters. The young mystic knew this meant only one thing. Azarath had fallen, the first line of defense the multiverse had against the greatest evil she knew had fallen.

Her father was coming.

She strained against the chains, she tried to cast her magic. She went through all of the trials and tribulations in her head. Her friends. Her regrets. All of those feelings she had never allowed herself to feel. In fear of her father creating a bridge into this world with them. All of her sacrifices would now be for nothing.

"BROTHERS!" A man clad in a black hood yelled, he was standing on a stone next to Raven, facing the other way, out towards the crowd. The other, 20 or so people around the dimly lit cellar of the thousand-year-old mansion. The rest of his followers gathered there, among them Raven's mother, she threw her head to the other side and found her uncle, cousin, and other relatives, people she had known and loved here in the mortal world among the members of the cult. The man cast off his hood. The girl recognized him immediately. His name was Jackson Devlin, and he had been her high school teacher, the only one who seemed to care about her while she was growing up - before she dropped out. He held in his hand a dagger, ornate with runes on it in an ancient language very few could still read. Raven knew she could even though she had never learned how to read it. She refused to read it, she knew where the knowledge came from.

"Today our mission ends! Our duty is done! Today, we herald our master into this world. We shall bask in his glory and create our paradise under his rule!" The crowd cheered.

"But there are two things that still need doing. First, we, the loyal subjects have to make an offering." He promised with the knife in hand.
"An offering in blood. Join me, brothers and sisters, put your hands on the stone and let your life force give power to the spell!" The stone pillar the altar stood on had a place at the bottom for everyone to put their hands, Raven only now realizing she was some 5 meters into the air. The air got colder as everyone placed their hands on the rock.

"Now, brothers and sisters. Let your power enter the altar of S'aar. Power up this tool of our lords' excellence!" Jackson cackled, Raven, recognizing that people were losing blood that came pouring up the rock, around her forming a pentagram, no. Not just a pentagram. A rune. Six eyes. And she could immediately feel her body changing, tensing up. The intense mystical power inside of her surging. She was stronger than ever before right now. If the chains weren't holding her down - she could have changed the world with a thought. This power... Was intoxicating.

But soon, the fantastic of it started to vain, her training and resistance to such pursuits, the easy solution kicked in and she came back down, down to her sense. The followers' dark hoods began falling off from their faces as their bodies had given enough blood.
Throwing her head around, she'd see old teachers, nurses, the nice cashier at the supermarket. The guy at the antique bookstore. Everyone Raven had known and held dear were in this very room, their eyes glowing with a sinister red glow. Once the rune was fully charged, Jackson cut his hand open, six eyes appearing in his head. Raven's mom appeared on the other side of the stone table, next to Jackson. Her six eyes had a more intense glow to them. Her mom said nothing, Raven was horrified at the sight, trying her hardest to use her new powers to break free, but she couldn't.
Her mother sliced her hand open, just like Jackson had with the same dagger, using the other side of the edge. Holding it above Raven, her hand was layered with Jacksons' hand.

"I am the Bride."
"I am the Disciple."
The two said in unison.

"This is your prophet. Your avatar. She is the daughter of Darkness and she shall be your vessel. The hour is nigh, it is time for you to rise, Lord Trigon!" The two let their blood drip onto the rune they were standing on, its glow growing more violent and the entire room echoed with a deep, dark voice beckoning his return.

"Stop!" Raven begged, choking back tears but nobody heard her, for there was not a human among the crowd.

The dagger pierced her chest, to her very heart.



"You're dead, Raven." The voice spoke, it wasn't a taunt, there was no feeling at all involved in the words. It was a fact, final, and an ultimate one. Raven had no body to answer with, her body was currently being taken over by the worst evil she could imagine.

The voice echoed within her.
"Suffering has been your lot in life."

"It's not fair." The teenager complained, she had no body yet she spoke, she couldn't quite explain what this place was or how it felt because somehow, it felt like nothing yet everything at the same time.

"Is this heaven?" A part of her clinging to the teachings she had once learned as a child - long before she knew of her true heritage.

"Heaven is not available to you, daughter of darkness. Your very existence is an affront to the foundation of paradise."

"So, I'm just gone? Trigon is gonna steal my body and get to execute his plan? Bring an end to it all?

"Unless you choose to stop him, child. I am a being far more suited to ward off your father than you are - even than the mages that raised you were. For their teachings came from a part of me."

"How will you help? What do I have to sacrifice?" She wasn't a fool. Nobody, especially not beings of the cosmic magnitude, gave anything away for free.

"I ask for the same thing your father would. You to be my vessel and I shall hold him back. You will be my rider, and we shall bring the wicked to justice. Vengeance is my name, and you young witch are my champion."

Raven felt like she let out a sigh - a truly fascinating experience, given how she didn't have a body - She could feel her father's presence nearing. He was approaching and once he took hold of her now empty husk of a body, nothing could stop him. Not the Justice League and not the Sorcerer Supreme. Raven could feel the energy of this Vengeance. It was pure. Holy. Everything she wasn't. More importantly, she felt this presence to be as strong as her own father.

"I accept."

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Historically in these games I've tried to keep discussion going in order to generate interest.


My goals aren't that noble. I'm just out to satiate my own curiosity :P
Shameless double post because I'm a monster. Well, fucking sniped.

I've got a question of the day if the GM's would indulge me.
These games have a habit of burning bright and fading out, and I can't help but wonder why.

What do you think your biggest pitfall in writing is? What's the thing that kills your motivation the most often?

On the creative side, I think my issue is being too hard on myself. The belief in every-expanding betterment. I've come to realize in my advancing age that maybe the drive to always make something that's better than the last isn't helpful. That it's okay to make something creatively that is by all means worse than a previous project without it invalidating the growth you've had as a creator.

Is this an excuse for me to feel better at some maybe mediocre posts coming to an IC near you? Who can really say.

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Who are you considering to be the old guard?


Oh god. It's not me, is it?
Thank you all, I appreciate it. Will try and keep these things in mind for the future. I always feel quite shaky and unsure when it comes to doing things for the first time.

Yep! Don't let the old guard intimidate you. Most of them are regular human beings with souls :P

The most important part is getting better than you were, not than anyone else.
Does anyone have any advice for writing fight scenes? I found myself really struggling and needing to rewrite and rethink a few times but still in the end feeling rather unsatisfied. Feel like it is rather hard to make it flow naturally and had difficulty in thinking of what should go where or if there should be dialogue in some places or none and so on and so on...


I think Cruiser makes a good point. I also think it's worth thinking about the fight the same way you would a fight in any visual medium - why does the fight matter? What story can you tell with the fight. Odds are that Superman and Martian Manhunter, despite their similar skillsets, fight very differently. Figuring out a way to navigate that, to make the reader (and yourself.) visualize it's very important. Difficult and exciting.

Excruciating detail isn't always neccesary. You don't have to detail every punch, kick or slash. But you should probably begin by establishing the particular fighting style of the characters, before you lose the detail.
As for dialogue. Yeah. It belongs in the fight. No good fight really happens without some dialogue put into it. Regardless if it's exposition or a quip.

The picture for Jason & Roy looks like shipper fan art and it pleases me to high heavens


Dude, my posts are just going to be them making their way to hatefucking.
S U P E R B U D D I E S

T O D D
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H A R P E R



J A S O N P E T E R T O D D R E T I R E D S U P E R V I L L A I N
R O Y W I L L I A M H A R P E R A G E N T O F S.H.I.E.L.D
C H A R A C T E R C O N C E P T:


"I play with guns. I work with a knife."
"You're the boy-wonder-pain-in-my-ass."

I'm aiming for a buddy-cop angle much like the classic one we've come to expect out of this dysfunctional duo from the modern comics. However, in the spirit of this game I've adapted them to the constraints and possibilities of the game. Jason's story is mostly unchanged, I've made some altercations to sew together his Post-Crisis past with his New-52 one. Jason was Robin, got killed by Joker, resurrected in the Lazarus pit and swore his revenge on Joker, Batman and all of Gotham. He was sent to Arkham and spent a good few months killing inmates from the inside, till the crusaders of Gotham stopped him once more. Put into a supermax, Amanda Waller gave him an out and a hefty dose of epxerimental anti-psychotics. Jason is an anti-villain more so than he's a hero.

Roy Harper grew up in Star City with an abusive father and a woman who clung to victimhood. He was a lowlife and got into small-time crime in the Glades, but when prompted with the choice of causing real damage to another human being, Roy chose the path of a hero and stopped his formed friends from mugging the defenseless man. He left Star city as soon as he could, joining the military at the age of 17. He excelled as a marksman and by 20 had broken just about all records the American military had. He worked in Black Ops for a few years but soon got out, instead ending up working directly for Captain America following the battle in 2010. He's become one of Director Rogers star agents and one of the brightest field officers SHIELD has ever produced, even if his methods are unorthodox.

Roy and Jason are tasked with finding the missing Fury, and stop any bad guys they can while doing so. Roy acts like Jason's chaperone, and makes sure the undead Robin doesn't go ballistic yet again.


P L O T ( S ) & G O A L ( S ):

Their nature is very nomadic, they could go anywhere and do anything, both of them are well established in the DC mythos, even if I've stripped Roy of his heroic past since there's no Green Arrow around. Nestling them into the SHIELD organization I think adds a lot of value to it as a faction, but allows them to do whatever I'd think would be fun. I think I could easily write a driving narrative with the boys, but for now I'd start out with them being roaming characters, nibbling away at their own corner of the universe until the time for interaction comes around.

C H A R A C T E R N O T E S:


Roy likes fighting with a bow and arrow still, even though he's a lot more fond of modern firearms in my iteration than in the comics. Roy's still got his technological know-how and is an engineering prodigy the likes of Bruce Wayne or Tony Stark, if he'd be given the resources and time to apply himself.
Jason is volatile and capable of great spurts of madness, he barely began his training with the All Caste, abandoning Ducra pretty much as soon as he could to get his revenge back home in Gotham. He terrorized the city for a long enough time to make The Red Hood a infamous name across the world.

P O S T C A T A L O G:

A list linking to your IC posts as they're created. This can be used for a reference guide to your character or to summarize completed arcs and stories.
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This is the first I've heard about this, is it easy to find and listen to online? And if so, is it an easy listen, or hours and hours of content like Critical Role?


Sent you the link to the show in the ol' DM's. I like it a lot more than CR. It's quite high energy and with fewer players it becomes a lot easier to follow.
I swore I was out, @Hillan. Don't make me do this.


You had your turn. :*

also, RE: inspiration, @webboysurf's run of Outlaws also counts as inspiration.

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