Lady Seraphina

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I demand that someone speak.

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The party is still going to be a thing, I've just been busy. I do want to get a post up tomorrow (Or later today given my time).

@Lucius Cypher

Yeah but we have two days to finish the party.

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Since we are very clearly not going to end up going parting shall we have one of the teachers find the students congregating by the airdocks and site some rule about leaving campus at late hours without permission?

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@Lugubrious you should make a contest entree too. Not that you can win being the judge and all but I'd be interested to see Dark Abel.

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Now I only need to draw Jack in his assassin leader outfit, and my entry would be done.

@Sho Minazuki

If you're in a drawing mood I could use one of Dark Sapphire :)

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@Prince of Seraphs You seem to have really interesting opinions on everyone's entries (I enjoy reading your pseudo-reviews). What's your opinion on Estelle?

@Write

Since we haven't seen all that much of Estelle it's sort of difficult to give an accurate account. Because of the nature of this RP the CSs don't have a bio section attached which makes it little difficult to compare the two characters so I don't know how much of Dark Estelle's history actually pertains to Estelle.

That said I did quite enjoy the character of Dark Estelle herself. The weaponry and semblance understandably remain unchanged, while personally I would have made changes or augmentations to the semblance as her personality looks radically different the ability still suits her. What I really liked was the history she had. In this RP we see a really lot of faunus cast in a certain light. Abused workers, rejected minority, second class citizens and in the RP as well as the contest stories we see a lot of faunus victimized and brutalized or righteously fighting back against oppressors. Dark Estelle's history shows the flip side of the coin with faunus not being the good guys (or at least being justified in there wrong acts). her history shows an old faunus family something that hasn't been mentioned before (usually they're made to look like scavengers) and a mildly psychotic one at that which actually values the development of certain faunus traits that have up until now been treated with scorn.

If you want some advice though I'd do some restructuring on the History Section's second paragraph. The first one is good at outlining Estelle's life and values while the third one does a decent job of showing how her life was altered by the death of her sister and the murder of her mother. The second paragraph however sort of leaves the reading in the dust. It sort of hits you in the face with the fact that Estelle's mother killed Bianca and leaves you a little confused as to what happened. I had to reread the first three sentences a couple of times to figure out exactly what happened.

That's just me though.

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Yeah, I had an idea for this contest but I don't think I'll be joining as well. I can't seem to figure out how to make Jorie a slasher villain, her past is too nice to turn her into a complete monster, and that is the only villain I can think of after watching all of the Halloween movies.

@Invisible Man

Villain is a rather strong and diverse word but it can mean a very lot, Dark Oswald is a revolutionary leader, Dark Sapphire is simply a thief with very little regard for the pain and suffering of others. There's a spectrum. Now obviously I don't know the history of your character but reading her CS I can see several possibilities. She's rather unique as an insect faunus so maybe play that (as well as the claw) up a bit. Maybe she went blind as a child and has to use her antenna to see the world, as a result she was bullied and beaten by other children and developed a harsh outlook on life. Or perhaps she's a nocturnal insect who only comes out at night, lives in a dark and damp abandoned building and lashes out at anyone that comes to close.

This is reimagining your character. While they still have to be linked don't feel that almost everything has to be the same. I prefer slight changes that result in a radically different fate but that's not a good approach for everyone. If her personality doesn't fit being a villain change her personality.

Besides I'm hoping that the next contest has to do with creating a non cannon story using as many of the Dark Side characters as possible so I need more material to work with.

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Hmmm Ive got a good idea for this contest, maybe I'll give it ago. I'm sure it'll hold well against the others.
*Reads other entries. Promptly hits delete on word document*
Nope.

@Awesomoman64

Give it a try anyways. If we get 14 participants there's a forth place for someone... not you but someone.

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'...And when she saw what she had done, she gave her best friend fifty-one.'

@Plank Sinatra

"Lizzie Borden took an axe
And gave her mother forty whacks.
When she saw what she had done,
She gave her father forty-one."

In reality, Lizzie Borden's stepmother suffered 18 blows. Her father suffered 11.

Assuming the fifty-one wasn't a typo I would guess it has something to do with the playing card tattoo (52 cards in a deck minus the one in the tattoo not including jokers).

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@shadowkiller912 We had a discussion earlier about the nature of Sarina's semblance (yes @Ryonara Ebon's was not the first I had issues with) which was never fully resolved. I thought that Sarina's abilities were overpowered but without going into all the reasons behind that I had an idea.

You had a star based theme going for Sarina calling her semblance: Imperatrix Stellarum - Empress of the Stars so I thought why not make that just a bit more literal. Stars burn at over 5300 degrees Kelvin and have a blinding luminosity. I thought perhaps you could give her localized control over intense light and heat. The abilities and limits therein would be up to you as it is your character and your semblance but I just thought I'd mention it as a possible.