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@71342 Okay, no problem. Thanks for letting us know.

Today is Wednesday where I live. Naturally, I'm going to wait until Wednesday ends everywhere on the planet before closing character submissions.

@Free Faller@bluejay_gl@clericbeast@DJAtomika
You guys are accepted. Please post your character sheets in the character depository!

@Archangel89 I want to see Ito's personality section and the start of his relations. Then join the others and post your character in the depository.

Also, I want to go over a few more things.

• I enjoy consistency in terms of posts and time. Sporadic posting and coming and going whenever you please is something that irritates me to no end, and there was a lot of that in the last roleplay. So, posting 10 posts in one week and then taking a siesta for three weeks is not going to fare well with me.
• Only collaborate with someone else if there is an insane amount of dialog. The last roleplay ended up being only collaborations, which slowed everything down and gave the impression of stagnant activity. A normal IC-post is top priority.
• Talk with me. If you feel bored with the roleplay, send me a message and tell me. There is always room for discussion and suggestions, but it's a lot about 'give and take'. Add to the lore with your own ideas.
• Acknowledge others' posts. Everyone loves attention and what to read about themselves, so keep everyone happy and make it that way.
• I get severely disappointed when someone says that they will post on an indicated day and do not do so. So, good ways of getting around that is to say "I will write my post" or "my ambition is to...", as it leaves the actual time of posting the post open to unforeseen circumstances.

My ambition is to start the roleplay after the weekend.

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@bluejay_gl Sure. Go ahead and give him a name.

@Bunnita Thanks for letting us know. Contact me if you change your mind later.

@Free Faller Keep it as Earth/Metal. Makes more sense, to me at least.

@DJAtomika I hope so. The last one did pretty well and started off strong. But then, after six months or so, people started to disappear and killed it. I hope I've learned a few things from that and since then.

@Altered Tundra The biography is only for what the other characters know. Everything else should not be mentioned, so you're on the right track!

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I added an additional sentence at the end of Selene's biography in order to give her personal motivations. I also added a bit of Trivia for her.

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@JJ Doe Thank you, dear, for those disturbing buns.

I have written some comments about the submitted characters. This is not a ‘you are accepted’ thing, just my thoughts as I have read the character sheets again.

@bluejay_gl
I have seen this kind of character introduction before, in which the character itself talks. It adds an unexpected level of depth, as character interaction is mostly left to the actual story. I was quite intrigued about Wren’s relationship with the ‘General-In-Command’ and look forward to reading about that in the future.

I feel that the biography is a bit lacking, even though it is perfectly fine in terms of quality. Perhaps you could revisit it when you feel inspired and add a little to it?

Electric Frenzy: Spirits will never harm their chosen sanctuary, so this one would not damage Wren by being used through other means than her weapon.

Clap of Thunder: I like this one a lot. You have chosen some clever combinations of things here that will prove useful.

Acid Rain: I would like to see this as Water/Dark, considering the harmful connotations of acid and the quite sinister condition that you chose for it.

@clericbeast
Very elaborate with lofty language. I like this character for a number of reasons. One being the fact that she is similar to Selene, another being the tiny quirk such as dying her hair and pretending it is natural. I also like that there is a bit of synergy with Atomika’s character.

Your character’s biography has a lot of ground for various sub-plots, not to mention the heavy motivations of revenge and whatnot. I imagine RMC will play a part in the main plot, considering its importance to Elysium and the military. We can discuss this more at a later point in time.

Firewall: I hope you remember what the spirit ability Defender actually does. As long as this spirit is not exhausted, Aurelia cannot attack with her weapon.

@Archangel89
Glad to see you again. I think that Ito is a more clearly defined character than Aaron was. It feels as if you wanted this with Aaron as well, but it ended up being a half-way between many different things. Ito’s background plays well with what one would expect from the people of Hong Desa, and the sense of betrayal from Ito in regards to his parents’ wishes adds interesting tension.

I do want you to write the personality section for Ito, though. I know you are going for the silent, loner sniper type of character, but they still have some kind of soul that displays emotions.

There is no ‘wind’ element, change it to ‘air’.

@DJAtomika
Clear character concept and nice synergy with clericbeast’s character. The elaborate focus on his weapon makes sense in regards to the character type, and the cane-like form is a nice touch. Elaborate character relations! However, Eric’s relation to the Holy and Earth elements seem a bit weak considering his personality. I realize that he is trying to understand Libra-born, and that somehow pertains to Holy, but I have trouble finding justifications for Earth.

@Free Faller
Nice contrast to the other characters. I have never had any troubles with adrenaline junkie, feisty-type characters, but make sure that you do not fall into the realm of unrealistic recklessness.

It is nice to see another swordswoman! I see that you went with a very Cloud-Advent Children type sword, which is cool. I liked that design a lot.

Very well written biography. I liked the story a lot and there will probably be an opportunity in the main plot of the roleplay to visit Anatolia and Cassie’s hometown.

Since I did not specify in which element ‘metal’ would fit, I will allow it to be listed under Earth, which does not quite fit Cassie’s personality or behavior. So, you can just write ‘Earth’ on the spirits that deal with metal.

@Everyone
There seems to be a good set of characters so far. I do not think that there will be any problems after the 15th and accepting. I am very impressed with the effort you guys have put into your characters and the relations that you are constantly updating. I will post Selene’s relations when the cast is set. Also remember that you can and should take care of your character sheet as the roleplay progresses by updating it every now and then, if possible.

If you want to, you can add a ‘Trivia’ section at the very bottom at your character sheet. There you can add any kind of information that is very personal to your character, and that the other characters know. This will give a sense of realistic friendship, that they know these tiny quirks about each other. For example, I could add that Selene loves dark Chocolate cake. It is nothing spectacular, but a stranger would never know.

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There's room until a number of people have been accepted. So, you're welcome to make a character sheet.

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I'd like all characters submitted by Wednesday the 15th. This does not include the relations section. However, things are looking very good so far! I'm impressed with the effort that is being put into character sheets. Me and JJ will work hard to give you all a nice experience with this roleplay!

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@Bunnita Drop me a private message, dear, I'll help you if you want.

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@Archangel89 No worries.

To all those who have sent me character sheets: would you be so kind as to post them here, in the out-of-character thread, so that everyone else can take a look at them and plan their relations? Nothing is final until characters are posted in the character depository, and I will let you know, individually, when you can post them there. Edit: exclude whatever you're not comfortable with sharing just yet.

I'd also like to say that, as a GM, I go to great lengths in order to make everyone feel special in the story. All characters are going to have their 'moment' in which they become central. The last Spirits Within roleplay ended just before that was about to happen to a character, so it can take a bit of time as I have to fit everything into the plot, individually. Therefore, I ask your patience.

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How many of you are in the process of creating a character or planning to create one? I would like to get an idea of how many people that are actually here.

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Change Log 1.1

Added tiny icons to all status effects.