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It just says it can't be displayed.
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Alright, I'll try to make it visible

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@floodtalon All righty, few things. I'm worried that all these different bullet effects give him too many different abilities to work with. I dunno if Vita would be willing to let you gradually obtain them, but right now that's five completely different effects he can utilise.

The invisibility also overlaps with Ryougu's character, and I'm not sure if that's a thing that could work as a skill. Megumi needs to use her Device to obtain invisibility after all, though Vita would be able to clarify that when she returns.

Finally, I think the personality/backstory could do with a little expanding. It looks a little bare-bones right now.

Good job choosing the best club though
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@floodtalon All righty, few things. I'm worried that all these different bullet effects give him too many different abilities to work with. I dunno if Vita would be willing to let you gradually obtain them, but right now that's five completely different effects he can utilise.

The invisibility also overlaps with Ryougu's character, and I'm not sure if that's a thing that could work as a skill. Megumi needs to use her Device to obtain invisibility after all, though Vita would be able to clarify that when she returns.

Finally, I think the personality/backstory could do with a little expanding. It looks a little bare-bones right now.

Good job choosing the best club though


Personality is something I like to establish in RP, having a deadset personality from the get go limits creativity which is quite annoying in my experience. while backstory is barebones because not everyone has a crazy tragic past that needs to be comminicated. He's just a kid with shirty parents, the rest of his life is pretty normal.

Invisibility I can change to something else, but I really did plan on having him be a stealth assassin type character so short invisibility bursts would work best for him.

As for abilities... yeah I could probably remove the black hole thing for a while, but the other ones I view as somewhat necessary.

Delienquent club best club indeed
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Well, still need to discuss with Vita about it. Hopefully that'll be later today.

@AtomicNut Sorry, forgot to reply to this here, but the bio looks fine to me. Accepted.
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"It won't be long before it's over. It's not that I mind you fighting, that's why this school exists, but don't you forget when the period ends,"


And on that note, are we only allowed to battle in the breaks? Are there perhaps fighting classes in which you may challenge someone? How's all that shebang work?
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@Ryougu: Emiri's just recommending that you don't cut too much into class time with battles.

Technically you can fight during classes but it's not recommended.
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Ah, right. Megumi wouldn't skip class, so if the vreak's about to end... too bad xD
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It's close, one fight might be able to squeeze in, but a ton of fights like what it looks like is possibly too much.
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Well, that's a tough call, then. What say you, @ThirdhourIII?
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Well if times running out, we can just have them fight after classes are out. I'm kind of confused about how classes are going to happen, seeing as there's no schedule or any reference to time. What time do classes get out? Can students even fight after school? I'm assuming we can make up things do to after classes though, can they go into the city surrounding the school?

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The classes would largely be glossed over, probably.

Students can fight after school, as long as it's on school grounds.
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Hey so I'm kind of confused on whether or not my CS was accepted.
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@Pandapaw23: I thought I accepted it?
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@Pandapaw23: Looking it up again, just wanted @RoleplayerRoxas to have a look at it and also thought the weapon looked a bit un-magitechy, but that was it. ^^;
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Sorry, completely slipped my mind. The bio looks fine to me, @Pandapaw23
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The Fashion Club have their own theme tune! But most of them are kind of dumb, which explains the lyrics really.

Also yeah, Suzie is basically a boss character, as discussed with Vita, thus mooks. Whee~
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Quick question, any comment in my CS? Just wanted to ask if I needed to fix it up.
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@floodtalon: Huh, I thought Roxas posted something about it. I'll get back to you tomorrow when I can talk with him again. ^^;
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@floodtalon: Okay...

So his invisibility is overlapping with another charact's similar ability. Also I think it's best if you would focus on one or two bullet types and just extent what they can do so your weapon isn't going after too many disparate themes.

I'd also like a bit more personality.
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