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@Caits Well if it's any consolation, I missed that detail as well.
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<Snipped quote by Caits>

Gives Caits a plate of cookies


*spills coffee on cookies*

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@Crimson Raven
spills coffee on you
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@Crimson Raven
spills coffee on you
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*spills Crimson on you*
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@Crimson Raven
spills coffee on you
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I promise to continue posting regularly, as soon as I can get out of this hell that is finals.

I've been itching to return to this, but I just don't have time. I waste plenty of it as is. 😓
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imma post tonight or tomorrow, just getting to be so exhausted right now
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its not what I wanted, but there we go
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@Burthstone
Shameful plug?
I'm in XD
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the guild, in her office ^.^^
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Um...so yeah.

Oooo boi.

@Caits

I'm staying away. Promise.
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Um...so yeah.

Oooo boi.

@Caits

I'm staying away. Promise.


Don't worry. I feel ya.
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@Crimson Raven
I was gonna say staying away from what... but now i know

Go ahead. Seriously. My brain is in no position to do anything right now except prepare for this interview today,

So go ahead. I will appreciate it.

@TechnoWizROK
Cant be S level. Thats the first issue i see from the quick glance I've had, I'll have another look after my interview
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Alright, I'm, uh, I'mma be the kill joy. So first off, the Tattoo enhancements. I appreciate your attempts at both originality and individuality, but there's some problems. First and foremost is they are runes, not tattoos, meaning that their separation from his rune magic with it is simply unnecessary. Then we have the abilities given for each rune.


  • Rune of Strength: Placed on various key points of the human body, the runes make his muscles stronger and faster while arrays carved onto his bones have made them nigh unbreakable.
  • Rune of Life: Engraved onto his heart using freely given unicorn blood, granting him endurance and vitality that could only be challenged by few.
  • Rune of Lightning: A series of runic tattoos, located at the base of the skull, that quadruples the reaction rate by superconducting the neural system.


I can accept stronger and faster from the Strength rune, but the bones...that's not a rune of strength, that's a rune of near invulnerability. And not OK. That removes his ability to suffer consequences for stupid decisions to dive in essentially.

Increased vitality and endurance...let's not make it Unicorn blood, and I can personally accept it, can't speak for my fellow GMs @Caits and @Expolar though.

Finally, we can to the Rune of Lightning. Reaction speed is SO much more than simply the neural system, and if the muscles can't keep up with the signals being sent, it's useless. That said, refer to my issues with nearly unbreakable bones.

Then we have Imperial Eye...that's a beast of a different issue. So, it's fairly impressive combination of both problems and good work. Biggest problem is King’s Sacred Commandment; while you did a good job writing it, and you clearly TRIED to balance it, you've just made it so that so long as he keeps you in front of him, you can't fight him with a very FEW exceptions of characters, one of them being mine, who have martial skill without magic. And then the giant sword from the sky, King’s Transcendant Blade, needs a minor tweek. Something like that isn't simply cast and wait another hour. The way you describe the power it has, when he drops that blade, he's out. Plain and simple, no cooldown, but a recovery period of a day MINIMUM.That's a lot of magic power pumped into it and shouldn't just be a "Oh, I dropped it, and I can do it again in an hour" because that is a stupid casual level of use for a super powerful spell. It implies that he's able to outlast any enemy's magic power with no real challenge. Coupled with the fact he's got bones that essentially can't be broken and apparently a reaction speed faster than a trained speed magic user and he's a god.

And then there's the backstory. That's, uh, impressive and well written for sure, but it's also written with no clear understanding of Fairy Tail's universe. Dragons and Humans were at WAR, and I'm fairly certain kingdoms didn't exist in that period of time, or not the way you described it. Just...I have to ask, how much of your character did you discuss ahead of time with Caits? Because I fear the answer may be none.

With my piece said, @Burthstone@Crimson Raven you may now give you thoughts. But be gentle.
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Oh well, i think you covered everything.

I will look at it more thoroughly tonight though
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@Zarkun
Oh well, i think you covered everything.

I will look at it more thoroughly tonight though


My pleasure. Though perhaps we should start asking applicants to mention us so we can all see them?
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Yeah, and it will be something i do when i revamp things a bit, shortly
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