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Concept is good, but could you give it a bit of a tidy-up? Make sure tags are correctly aligned and make sure the grammar is on point. Although the history is fine in an general sense, it could do with a little rewording and fleshing out.

If you're still accepting I'd like to join, though it'll probably take me til the end of the week to have a sheet ready.


Between the awful puns and the DS pic, I feel I have to save you a space! But seriously, this RP is going to remain perma-open (unless we somehow get a silly number of people) so technically no deadline on getting the CS in.

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Done and finished.



1. Please reformat the bit with the alias and stuff. Though I know exactly what each bit means, someone new to this RP might just see that section and have no idea what it means without the headings. For example they might see you've written "Telchar" and be like "What the hell does that mean? Does he 'telch' things?".

2. Could you do a little rewrite about the armour? Put "Eramas wields a black sword and armor - said to be made from a black ore beneath the City, that a select few Warriors of the Church use. Said to be shielded or at least resistant to the effects of magic - though it's not clear whether those rumors are true or not.". It's alluded to in the prologue post that Warriors all wear varying armour. Basically for the most part they have whatever armour they themselves can afford, or scraps that the church is able to throw together for them. Though there could certainly be exceptions for established members (which your character could be if he's an inquisitor) to get better church-funded armour.

3. Once these small bits are done, he can be added to the Character list :)

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Done!


Accepted!

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Between the awful puns ...

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...For example they might see you've written "Telchar" and be like "What the hell does that mean? Does he 'telch' things?"...




*Emperor Punpatine Approves*

But thanks for the heads up about having no CS deadlines. It'll give me sometime to flesh out a good one.
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This rp looks like it could be a lot of fun, and I'm working on the CS for a female Aen Elle who fled Tir ná Lia some years ago. I'm just wondering one thing about the sheets. If you're writing a mage of some sorts, do you have to detail every single spell they can cast? How detailed do you want it to be?
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@Fat Boy Kyle

Thanks for pointing out the errors! The errors are corrected (I think.........)

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Here we go then, a con-man werewolf.


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@SantosGabriel77 Had a look at your CS and sorted your codings pal. I know how difficult they can be to get a hang of when you first start on this site.


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@SantosGabriel77 No problem, if you ever have trouble with them again there's a formatting cheat-sheet at the bottom of the page (under the reply text box) that's very useful.
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@SantosGabriel77 Had a look at your CS and sorted your codings pal. I know how difficult they can be to get a hang of when you first start on this site.



My apologies @SantosGabriel77, I didn't realise how new you were! Thanks BlackSam for helping!
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This rp looks like it could be a lot of fun, and I'm working on the CS for a female Aen Elle who fled Tir ná Lia some years ago. I'm just wondering one thing about the sheets. If you're writing a mage of some sorts, do you have to detail every single spell they can cast? How detailed do you want it to be?


Not every single spell, but just give us an idea of their limits and maybe their typical tactics. Mages can be relatively OP in the lore, so I expect there to be some unbalance (which is fine if we're all sensible writers).
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Here we go then, a con-man werewolf.



Accepted! Also, feel free to make up the Capital for La Lament.

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Also accepted!
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@Fat Boy Kyle Cheers pal.
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@Fat Boy Kyle Alright, I've finished the CS now.

Meet Cristina, an Aen Elle scout turned cat burglar!

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@Fat Boy Kyle Alright, I've finished the CS now.

Meet Cristina, an Aen Elle scout turned cat burglar!



Interested to see how well you pull off an Aen Elle! Add her to the list when you're able




You may or may not have noticed, but I do keep trying to add to the wiki. If you want to ask questions, challenge anything, or add to it, just let me know! Don't feel obliged to go read it all though, cause a lot of it is fluff.
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Seems a bit batty. Accepted.
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Would yall agree that we've got enough characters to get this mess rolling?
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@Fat Boy Kyle

I might make a second char later...
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