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I'll be reviewing sheets later tonight.
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This does not mean that you're approved as I'm still waiting for some sheets.


@Lord Orgasmo Center alignment for the picture is broken. The characterization sections seem a little light, so I would try expanding on them. Also, if you could replace the yellow hex codes with a color of your choice to match your dialogue/inner thoughts later on, that would be appreciated.

@Stern Algorithm I did have some concerns that your concept might lean into edge territory, so I'm still a bit wary. Other than that, my only other concern is that Mushirou has no last name. Not sure if that was meant to be, or if you forgot.

@Raijinslayer I like what I see so far, even if there isn't much. Noibat is a good choice, being one of my favorites.

@Denny I'd like to point out that it is Krane, not Kane. Also, if you could list out how many Erza has of each item, that would be appreciated.

@Quote5 Minor coding errors still exist, but understandable because it is a WIP. As I said with Denny, please list out the number of each item (in his case, Pokeballs). Additionally, you could add a bit more to his backstory, perhaps as to why Krane would accept him. For the last name thing, maybe he could take the name of the orphanage/town the orphanage was in, though this is just a suggestion.

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@Sola

Don't worry about edge, Mushirou's personality will essentially be played for laughs. And for some reason, I was under the incorrect impression that last names weren't a thing in the pokemon world since gym leaders are only referred to by one name, but then I remembered Ash Ketchum. So Mushirou's surname will be Tokugawa.
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@Sola Noibat and Noivern are always solid, and Noivern is my second fav non-legnedary pokemon.
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Alright, I'll keep that in mind, I'll try to fix those later today. Thank you for your input.
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hewwo....


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@Sola Fixed up. And it was a typo on the whole Kane/Krane thing, my bad. I think I'm okay with how she is.
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@Stern Algorithm Accepted.

@Lord Orgasmo Still needs a color. Once you choose one, you can post the CS in the CS tab.

@Denny Accepted.

@HokumPocus Accepted.

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@Sola My color is Yellow. It's slightly brighter than the original orange

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@Sola My color is Yellow. It's slightly brighter than the original orange

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Huh, must've skimmed over it because the color choice was similar to what had already been used in the CS template.

Sure, I guess the color works. Go ahead and post Judas in the CS tab.
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@Hero I know you spoke with me about the Kirlia issue, but I think Dahlia has a bit too many Pokemon at this moment. Other than that, I did notice some stuff in your backstory, mainly Ralts being "Raltz" and this segment:

When Dahlia went to visit Elena as a surprise, she found out that her friend had joined a group called Team Snagem. Despite immediately wanting to decline, Dahlia wondered why her supposed friend would want to join Snagem.

Bit confused here, but if I'm reading this right, Elena asked Dahlia to join Snagem?

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@Hero I know you spoke with me about the Kirlia issue, but I think Dahlia has a bit too many Pokemon at this moment. Other than that, I did notice some stuff in your backstory, mainly Ralts being "Raltz" and this segment:

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Bit confused here, but if I'm reading this right, Elena asked Dahlia to join Snagem?


That's fine, I'll take them out (Milotic won't be available for some time due to injuries, figured it was a good example of what the Shadow Pokemon were capable of), as for the second yeah, iirc in XD Snagem was trying to recruit people to replenish their ranks.

also i cant spell my b
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<Snipped quote by Sola>

That's fine, I'll take them out (Milotic won't be available for some time due to injuries, figured it was a good example of what the Shadow Pokemon were capable of), as for the second yeah, iirc in XD Snagem was trying to recruit people to replenish their ranks.

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Perhaps it could just be Milotic and Kirlia?

And that's fine too. It was just a bit confusing trying to make sense of it.
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Perhaps it could just be Milotic and Kirlia?

And that's fine too. It was just a bit confusing trying to make sense of it.


Sounds good!

Edit: Fixed!
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@Hero It has my approval.
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I'm going to see about starting this RP this week, so if we could get the remaining sheets finished sometime in the next few days, it'd be appreciated.

Also, I'll be setting the RP to full, as the only people remaining are Quote and Rai.
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Yeeet, will get on that as soon as I can.
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Yeep, I really need to get on that, don't I?
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Right, so, each of you can decide to have one powerful pokemon here. It can be whatever you want as long as it isn't a legendary. Charizard, Garchomp, Milotic, w/e. As long as it abides by the above rule.

Of course, it is virtual, so you won't have it outside the simulation.
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