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If you're here from the new interest check thread, some of this may be out of date. Please let me know if you have any questions!

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You have super powers! Whether it’s the ability to fly, run really fast, or shoot lasers out of your eyes, you have an ability that sets you apart from the rest of humanity. You aren’t a big name hero, though, and you aren’t even some obscure expert with your powers. In fact, you’ve only had your powers for a week at the most.

This is a good thing.

If you had your powers any longer than that, you’d probably be dead.

You see, before you got your abilities, a deadly virus infected everyone with powers. The aptly named Supervirus caused heroes to die like flies while ordinary people were just fine. Some disappeared before their demise, but the result was the same; people with super powers were extinct! That is, until a week ago.

That was when the meteor struck. Despite nobody being injured, the local news covered it extensively since it took place in a local park in your Midwestern hometown. And maybe it was just a coincidence, but soon after this happened, you gained your powers. And for some reason, you haven’t come down with the virus like the others. You’ve decided that you should do something positive with this new ability you have, but you’re not sure what yet.

Now it is an ordinary Friday night in Lafayette City. You hear the news; the Precious Metal Vault is being robbed! People have tried this before, but this was far from ordinary for a few reasons:

One: this is the first time it happened since all the people with powers died, and
Two: the group responsible is led by a well-known supervillain who should be dead from the virus.

Wherever you are right now, this is when you decide you’ll help the city and stop the people responsible for this.

What you don’t know at the time is that this is just the beginning of a greater journey for you, one that will undoubtedly test your resolve and ability to work with other heroes to help stop a villainous plot.

Do you have what it takes to be a hero?

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So to summarize the synopsis above, this roleplay is about a group of rookie super heroes who end up teaming up to stop an evil scheme. I don’t want to give away too much of the plot, but I do plan on this being more involved than just “stop the villain of the week.” A CS is here for your use:



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First, for the sake of having an enjoyable RP experience for everyone, I have some rules that I’m listing below:

1) You are not Superman, Wolverine, or any other hero like that. In fact, these heroes do not exist. If you want to have the ability to fly, that’s cool, but do it in an original way please.
2) Don’t be a jerk. I think this is self-explanatory. Nobody wants to roleplay with jerks.
3) Your hero is not going to be super skilled with their powers right away. Not only is this boring, but part of the point of this is that it’s fun to see your characters grow and face real stakes.
4) That being said, I’m not looking for an excuse to kill everyone off either. That isn’t fun to write.
5) No smut, extremely graphic torture, or gore please. A common-sense PG-13 rating is what I’m going for. If people have sex or something, fade to black. I’m not looking to write an episode of Teletubbies, just use common sense.
6) No politics please. Based on my experience nobody is going to convince anyone else of their views anyway.
7) Please use proper spelling and grammar. I’m not the grammar police, but it makes writing look so much nicer.
8) I'm not looking for big essays here; just two or three quality paragraphs per post. If you want to write longer, cool, but quality beats quantity every time.
9) If you have a concern about the RP, let me know. Remember, I am only human, so I can’t read minds and I will likely make mistakes as well.
10) Please put the phrase “electric Pokemon” somewhere in the post with your CS so I know you’ve read these rules.
11) If you have to leave the RP temporarily or permanently, just let me know and we can work something out. I understand that life can get busy and priorities can shift. It’s easier to be told of this than it is to wonder where someone is for a week.
12) No healing powers please. This is both for plot reasons and because there's less at stake if you can heal your teammate's injuries.
13) Most importantly, have fun! I’m not looking for a bunch of drama here; I want this to be something we all enjoy.

If you have any questions, please let me know. I also plan on making a Discord server for our use; once your CS is accepted, I will send you a link to it. I look forward to writing with you!
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You know, I never really liked electric Pokemon, to be honest. I've always been partial to dark or poison types.
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Just for everyone's knowledge, @MagratheanWhale and I discussed his CS via PM and it's already approved.
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Thanks for providing that clarity :D
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For your consideration:

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For your consideration:


Very good CS! Contrasts are great and you did it well. I think the one thing that I'd change is that for plot reasons, nobody is revealing that they got powers after the meteor hit. As far as the world knows, people with powers are dead to the virus, at least until the night the RP begins. I don't think you'd need to change much with your biography, it's fine otherwise.

I think I'd just be careful with not making the kevlar vest (and invisibility in the future) OP, but that doesn't really require any changes on your CS. Just read the rules and make the change I suggested and you should be good :)
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Understood and thanks!

I've edited that bio sentence to be more in line with the plot now (please let me know if that works or if you'd like to see something different) and certainly have no intention of making the Kevlar vest overpowered. I just figured if he intended to fight any sort of crime without any protection at all, he'd be insane. As it sits, the majority of his body is unprotected and the kevlar itself is not impenetrable - rifles and any large artillery can shred it and it will only be on as part of his 'super suit' covering his torso.

On the invisibility thing, I'm not even sure if I plan on using it - I'm mostly just offering up paths of evolution for the ability. However, if we did go down the invisibility route, I think it'd be more of a Predator type of invisible where you can see the light bent as long as you're looking for it and any motion would be a dead giveaway.
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Understood and thanks!

I've edited that bio sentence to be more in line with the plot now (please let me know if that works or if you'd like to see something different) and certainly have no intention of making the Kevlar vest overpowered. I just figured if he intended to fight any sort of crime without any protection at all, he'd be insane. As it sits, the majority of his body is unprotected and the kevlar itself is not impenetrable - rifles and any large artillery can shred it and it will only be on as part of his 'super suit' covering his torso.

On the invisibility thing, I'm not even sure if I plan on using it - I'm mostly just offering up paths of evolution for the ability. However, if we did go down the invisibility route, I think it'd be more of a Predator type of invisible where you can see the light bent as long as you're looking for it and any motion would be a dead giveaway.


That all sounds good to me! It sounds like you have a good character here. Your Sparkly Edgelord is approved; you can post him in the Characters tab and I'll send you a link to the Discord server.
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I'm so close to finished but I'm so tired QwQ I'mma finish the backstory tomorrow, but I wanted to run the powers past you cause I was reading over them and was like ... is this OP? This might be OP.

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My character sheet is up! There might be a few mistakes left in it but I'm pretty sure I caught them all.

@Izurich - On the topic of slicing up steel like Raiden. Maybe we can make it happen if we work together? One of my character's main abilities has to do with enhancing the objects she possesses, making them much stronger. If she possessed your sword and enhanced it, it should be able to cut through other pieces of metal as long as they aren't too large. It would also make it more likely that you could block something really forceful like in the video you shared. We'll keep that in mind and see if it ever comes up.

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@Izurich - On the topic of slicing up steel like Raiden. Maybe we can make it happen if we work together? One of my character's main abilities has to do with enhancing the objects she possesses, making them much stronger. If she possessed your sword and enhanced it, it should be able to cut through other pieces of metal as long as they aren't too large. It would also make it more likely that you could block something really forceful like in the video you shared. We'll keep that in mind and see if it ever comes up.


If Zapdos allows it, absolutely~ that'd be lovely. There's also the classic badass trope of having a "living" sword.

I'll also think up of interesting narrative stuff to describe Sarah's IC experience should she enter Camille's sword.
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I'm so close to finished but I'm so tired QwQ I'mma finish the backstory tomorrow, but I wanted to run the powers past you cause I was reading over them and was like ... is this OP? This might be OP.

It doesn't seem OP since she seems to be a "regular person with super speed" who is in fact still vulnerable to being punched hard. I do have a few questions though:

1) If her power only effects Paige, how does she carry anything or keep any clothes on? I doubt she wants to be a nudist :P
2) If gravity is lessened, does she float in the air? Maybe I'm overanalyzing it

That's all I can think of for now, let me know the answers to those questions and let me know when the CS is complete

@Olive Fontaine I like your CS, though you should have posted it here instead of in the Characters tab since it isn't approved yet. I do have a few things that need to be changed:

1) Everyone has had their powers for a week at the most, as the meteor struck a week ago. You mentioned possessing the middle aged guy "a week later" and such. Maybe just condense the timeline of how Sarah got her powers and it should be fine.
2) You mentioned that Sarah is booted from objects when they break. How is she removed from people? Can they force her out at all? Or would they have to be injured to do so? What are your thoughts on this?

With regards to possessing Camile's sword, I think it could be a cool idea, but there'd have to be some kind of drawback so that it isn't OP. Maybe a time limit? Because if Sarah gets removed from an object by it being broken and the sword is super durable, possessing a super strong sword like that removes that limitation.

Let me know your thoughts, thanks!
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1. I wrote the backstory keeping that in mind. But for some reason I thought I remembered it being two weeks? I’ll change the times a little, my apologies. (EDIT: It should be corrected) And sorry for posting it in the wrong area.

2. I don’t think it would be easy for a possessed person to force her out. But since she is in contact with them mentally, perhaps a big mental assault would make her leave. Or alternatively, if she tries to make them hurt someone they really care about, perhaps the resistance would be really high. I think we should put the difficulty for “protected” NPCs in trying to possess them in the first place. Like maybe some people have a natural psychic resistance that is difficult for Sarah to overcome. Or maybe superpowered people are altered in some way that makes it hard for her to possess them. (She would require an extended time period to gain control over them, I think. Like if they were already defeated and in prison.) Maybe some people can’t be possessed at all. I’ll leave that up to you. I’ll just handle who she targets and why. But at any rate, injuring the possessed one is going to force her out eventually. Both because she shares the pain and because the body will become less effective.

3. As to the sword thing. Maybe the drawback for item enhancement in general should be related to how much her powers have protected the thing from abuse? So, if she’s a door or something and it is hit by an attack that wouldn’t have affected it to begin with, she’s fine. But if the attack would have broken the door, it puts a strain on her powers to be able to make it resist. If this happens enough, her powers wane and she can’t maintain the possession. I’m essentially suggesting an exertion limit rather than a time limit. Though in the case of Camille’s sword (which presumably would be under constant duress if we are in need of this technique), then there would be an effective time limit for activity.
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1. I wrote the backstory keeping that in mind. But for some reason I thought I remembered it being two weeks? I’ll change the times a little, my apologies. (EDIT: It should be corrected) And sorry for posting it in the wrong area.

2. I don’t think it would be easy for a possessed person to force her out. But since she is in contact with them mentally, perhaps a big mental assault would make her leave. Or alternatively, if she tries to make them hurt someone they really care about, perhaps the resistance would be really high. I think we should put the difficulty for “protected” NPCs in trying to possess them in the first place. Like maybe some people have a natural psychic resistance that is difficult for Sarah to overcome. Or maybe superpowered people are altered in some way that makes it hard for her to possess them. (She would require an extended time period to gain control over them, I think. Like if they were already defeated and in prison.) Maybe some people can’t be possessed at all. I’ll leave that up to you. I’ll just handle who she targets and why. But at any rate, injuring the possessed one is going to force her out eventually. Both because she shares the pain and because the body will become less effective.

3. As to the sword thing. Maybe the drawback for item enhancement in general should be related to how much her powers have protected the thing from abuse? So, if she’s a door or something and it is hit by an attack that wouldn’t have affected it to begin with, she’s fine. But if the attack would have broken the door, it puts a strain on her powers to be able to make it resist. If this happens enough, her powers wane and she can’t maintain the possession. I’m essentially suggesting an exertion limit rather than a time limit. Though in the case of Camille’s sword (which presumably would be under constant duress if we are in need of this technique), then there would be an effective time limit for activity.


1) Sounds good! I saw your changes and think they look good.

2) I think requiring an extended time period to gain control over those with superpowers, like if they were already defeated and in prison, or similarly significantly weakened is good. Maybe there will be people who can't be possessed for whatever reason, which I'll try to indicate somehow. Injuring the possessed to boot her is good too.

3) Yeah, endurance/exertion is fine like you said.

Just add that information to your CS and you're approved! I'll go ahead and send you the link to the Discord server.
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God it's been forever since I did forum RP.



I hope it's acceptable. It really has been a while.
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I'm on my phone right now, so apologies in advance for any spelling or grammar errors.

God it's been forever since I did forum RP.



I hope it's acceptable. It really has been a while.


I'm kind of confused by Kestrel's powers. So she dreams of an object and then can create it the next day? And if she uses them too much, she can't sleep and suffers as a result? Also, I'm wondering how this would work in combat as a hero. If she can only create what she saw in dreams, that could leave her with a narrow amount of choices.

This is a very unique power you've chosen, but I just want to be sure it's something that is also usable in practice.

Also, for her skill, can she learn all new things equally quickly? I feel like it would take more effort to learn something like metalworking than, say how to use a new computer program.
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It doesn't seem OP since she seems to be a "regular person with super speed" who is in fact still vulnerable to being punched hard. I do have a few questions though:

1) If her power only effects Paige, how does she carry anything or keep any clothes on? I doubt she wants to be a nudist :P
2) If gravity is lessened, does she float in the air? Maybe I'm overanalyzing it

That's all I can think of for now, let me know the answers to those questions and let me know when the CS is complete


Yeeey, that's certainly good to hear, and that's what I was going for. I guess I was just worried that the particular min/max way that I'm looking at her powers might have loopholes that could be op. I was tryna walk that line with her being tough against the effects of her powers, but not actually 'tough' tough.

NOW QUESTIONS ANSWERS:
1) Oh, I forgot, I'm renaming her 'The Streaker' lol, no, I don't think she's a nudist, but this was intentional. I think I saw like a clip of the flash where he was talking about having to make a suit that would stand up to the wear and tear of moving so fast, and I really liked that idea, it made him seem more like he had day-to-day problems. I also like that gear can be a way of like leveling her abilities as the story progresses, because she doesn't really know how to homebrew anything better than her current uniform of a racing skin-suit and lightweight running shoes. I also worry that being able to take object along into time dilation is just like a buncha questions and probably op :P This makes me git creative.
2) Nono, you aren't overanything, I was trying to sound fancy with her limitations. Basically I wanted to make it clear that she can't stop time, or if she can, she becomes useless instead of like super OP while doing so, like ant-man going quantum small.

I hope that clears stuff up, I gotta go eat but I'mma try to finish my backstory and post tonight!
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Yeeey, that's certainly good to hear, and that's what I was going for. I guess I was just worried that the particular min/max way that I'm looking at her powers might have loopholes that could be op. I was tryna walk that line with her being tough against the effects of her powers, but not actually 'tough' tough.

NOW QUESTIONS ANSWERS:
1) Oh, I forgot, I'm renaming her 'The Streaker' lol, no, I don't think she's a nudist, but this was intentional. I think I saw like a clip of the flash where he was talking about having to make a suit that would stand up to the wear and tear of moving so fast, and I really liked that idea, it made him seem more like he had day-to-day problems. I also like that gear can be a way of like leveling her abilities as the story progresses, because she doesn't really know how to homebrew anything better than her current uniform of a racing skin-suit and lightweight running shoes. I also worry that being able to take object along into time dilation is just like a buncha questions and probably op :P This makes me git creative.
2) Nono, you aren't overanything, I was trying to sound fancy with her limitations. Basically I wanted to make it clear that she can't stop time, or if she can, she becomes useless instead of like super OP while doing so, like ant-man going quantum small.

I hope that clears stuff up, I gotta go eat but I'mma try to finish my backstory and post tonight!

No worries! Yeah, I think you did a good job with balancing, super speed is good but by itself it isn't going to beat extremely powerful enemies.

I think the answers to your questions were good for the purposes of addressing my concerns; maybe edit your CS to add that information and that part will be good. I look forward to reading the rest of your CS!

By the way, I'm going to try posting the first post on Thursday night or Friday of this week. I'm not going to close it at that point, but it will be much harder to join after that, as I will have to think of a good way to get your character into the story. So if you have not done so already, I encourage you to get your CS in by Thursday morning so you'll have plenty of time to make changes as needed.
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I'm on my phone right now, so apologies in advance for any spelling or grammar errors.

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I'm kind of confused by Kestrel's powers. So she dreams of an object and then can create it the next day? And if she uses them too much, she can't sleep and suffers as a result? Also, I'm wondering how this would work in combat as a hero. If she can only create what she saw in dreams, that could leave her with a narrow amount of choices.

This is a very unique power you've chosen, but I just want to be sure it's something that is also usable in practice.

Also, for her skill, can she learn all new things equally quickly? I feel like it would take more effort to learn something like metalworking than, say how to use a new computer program.


I guess I screwed up on explaining it adequately but I meant it quite literally when I said the power is fuelled by dreams. It's not a matter of dreaming an object and then being able to use it, it's just that the cost of materialising an object (whatever it is that she imagines, within the specified limits) is the ability to dream/sleep which in turn has increasingly debilitating effects depending on how much and how intensively the power was used.

Her skill was more of a general aptitude for picking things up so of course I'm not going for some kind of OP Matrix-level skill learning that might as well be like injecting a program right into the brain. It's all proportional really so a difficult skill to pick up would still be a challenge, just somewhat less so?
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@threetoads regarding her general aptitude, I think that's fine.

Regarding her powers, I'm not sure if you're limiting yourself here or what, just because it's very unique. How would it be usable in combat? How does she recover from overexerting herself if she can't sleep? And how much or what usage causes her dreams to be limited? Is it based on the size of the object, the utility of it, or something else?

I'm just trying to understand here so I can give the proper feedback.
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