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I made an overhaul of my CS, now that I've had more time to think. Sorry for posting it too soon before.
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@The World: Alrighty, I'll take a look in a bit.
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Made some changes to the sheet, mainly fixing grammar mistakes and adding a little more personality and one extra tool in his inventory, as well as bringing him a little more in sync with the rest of the characters by limiting his social circle.
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@DarckLeon: No change, he's still on the list.

@The World: Still on the list too.
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Some small edits made, nothing too big, just clarifications.
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@The World: Actually, on second review of your bio, I'm a little concerned the backstory trends a bit too over-the-top? Multiple street gangs(and I'll admit the names are a bit on the nose) that kill multiple people and somehow escape justice the entire time is a bit much.

I'd try focusing in on a single tragic event and how its impact twisted her life around it. I want emotional baggage and trauma is definitely not bad for the purposes of narrative and character development, but it feels a bit like a conga line here.
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Fair enough, I'll fix that.
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So, I decided to take her in a totally different direction. Hopefully this is better, but let me know if I should rework it again.
As it happens, the theme still fits, just in an entirely different way :P


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Poked through the thread. Since it looks like you're still in the CS gathering phase, I will try and get something down quick.

I had a setting question.

1. What's the size and general description of the main city in game? I just want to know if it's out in the country or Tokyo-lite. Is it a place where everyone knows each other? How "anonymous" my character is kinda plays into their backstory.

-What is the expected post rate for this game?
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@The World: Hmmm. To be honest I feel like the backstory is a bit of a mess, and her occult obsession doesn't figure into her later feelings at all. If you want to go with the occult interests I'd lean into that harder rather then the later elements.

@Mistress Dizzy: I'm going for a Tokyo-lite kind of approach.

As for expected post rate, I'm looking for at least once a week.
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@VitaVitaAR got it. So anonymity is easier. I am finally done with work! Will see what I come up with.
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I came to the conclusion that I wouldn't be able to write an occult obsessed character as well as I would one who's only dabbled in it, and since I was using that just as a springboard anyway, I dropped it entirely.

Sorry to keep going off in different directions.


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@The World: Added to the list.
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I will probably start looking through current signups and making some decisions after Christmas.
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@VitaVitaAR Sorry. Backing out. Our apartment flooded this morning. Merry Christmas
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Also backing out. I don't think I have enough time for this.
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@Mistress Dizzy: I hope things work out for you okay, Merry Christmas.

@Dragonfly 9: Thanks for letting me know.
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Are we not waiting for Rin or did they backout too?
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@hatakekuro: I am planning on giving her some more time, but I will probably make some selections after Christmas regardless.
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Okay, that's good to know.
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