[OOC] Buccaneers and Blades (Fantasy, High Casual)

[POOHEAD189]

@ValorGive me a day or two to make sure my number of players, and I will let you know. That character concept sounds good.

[spicykvnt]

Here's my GM reviews, folks.

@Skull

Hider

Good sheet. Very well thought out, and doesn't go against the lore a lot. You're accepted, provided you edit these bits.

• Tone down your traits/skills somewhat. And by that, I don't mean redo them. But you've made him seem more like a monk rather than a pit fighter. Pit Fighters can have such abilities in a way, but not to the extent he is at. Pit Fighters are a bit more savage and less disciplined than monks, though that's not to say they're barbaric. He can attempt to reach a higher martial and mental state, but the pit fighter was more of a gladiator rather than a monk so treat him as such with a few edited sentences here and there.
• You'd need to explain why he's worshiping Bael/Mikhail when (while it's possible) he's not a God of the Arad Luin.
• Please list what alchemical concoctions he has.

I know these are vague, but he was a good enough character for me to trust you when I say tone it down a tad.

@Stormflyx

Hider

She is accepted. But here are a few edits I'd need.

• All praelians are sent to academies and do bits of each part of society before they are allowed to graduate. Write a few sentences expanding on that about her life.
• Give a small explanation of her making her way from Praelior to the port they are at now. It's like lowland europe, so it wouldnt be too exciting. But still, why did she show up for the festival?

@Smystar99

Hider

Accepted. Love her^^. Here's a few edits before you put her in the tab.

• You can add another skill/trait if you want. Maybe a charisma one from her comely appearance, or perhaps another talent of hers?
• Please bold the names of her skills/traits.
• I understand the symbolism of the stab in her heart, but see if it could be a wound that's a bit less final. Perhaps an artery near the heart? Or just say it nicked her heart, but it would have been enough to kill her regardless.
• Give an explanation on her journey from the eastern side of Andred to south of it on the coast of the Sea of Swords. Did anything happen while she traveled there? Why'd she choose to travel that way? What does she think of large festivals like the one we're at?

@BoyMom035

Hider

Accepted! Though you might be sharing your position as medic with Smystar, depending on how y'all post. I already helped you with edits, but let's see...she is accepted if you add these:

• Give her a goal that coincides with joining a pirate ship in particular. Why join such a dangerous operation? Is it because she'd used to danger with her past?
• How old was she when Dr. Henry Tate took her in? What motivated him to do so (don't need to get too specific), and how long was she there?

@bleedingwords

Hider

Not accepted (yet). If you edit these well, I'll change my mind and you can put him over. But he needs some work. Here's what I need.

• Reread him for spelling and grammatical errors. There weren't a lot, but it still needs to be re-read.
• Bold your traits/skills, as well as category titles like 'name' and 'physical description.'
• I think he has a good backstory, albeit incomplete. All Praelian children are required to attend the academy for a few years. But that doesn't mean he still couldn't be apprenticed to the map maker. Just make sure to mention it.
• Mention how he made it to SeaCliffe, and why he wants to be a pirate. It's a dangerous profession. Why not join a regular ship? Explain this in his backstory and goals.
• Has he ever experienced death, a lover, anything?
• Give me a small idea of the sundry sailor items he has.

@Utrax

Hider

Not accepted yet. But edit this and let me re-look, please. I want you to join bc I like your character.

• Need a lot more detail in her background. Where did she learn to fight. Who was important in her life. Did she ever have a lover or someone she hated? What parts of her backstory back up her skills/traits? When did certain things happen? It was a vague backstory that, while you shouldn't scrap it, needs more detail.
• You can add another skill/trait if you wish^^

@Rekaigan
Give the edits I have via PM and let me see it before you put the character sheet over.

@Assallya@SouffleGirl123Still need to see y'alls sheets when you are ready.

@POOHEAD189

Thank you for the feedback darling I'll make those changes when I get a chance in the next day or so :)

[POOHEAD189]

@Utrax She is accepted!

[spicykvnt]

I added my updated CS.

Hope it's all gravy now, if not just sing out :)

[POOHEAD189]

You might want to wait next time before you switched her over, but Ava IS accepted! Congratz! @Stormflyx

[spicykvnt]

You might want to wait next time before you switched her over, but Ava IS accepted! Congratz! @Stormflyx

@POOHEAD189

Oh I'm sorry I thought that's what everyone else was doing >.<

*hides head in shame*

[POOHEAD189]

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Oh I'm sorry I thought that's what everyone else was doing >.<

*hides head in shame*

@Stormflyx

You are quite alright <3 She was accepted regardless! Just for future reference :)

[POOHEAD189]

@SouffleGirl123@Assallya Y'all still have time to finish, but I need an estimate on when you'll be ready, please! I will make the starting post within a few days, however you still have a few days after that to finish.

@ValorYou may make your character. Just remember to read the lore and 'things I expect from players,' and ask me any questions you wish, sir.

[Squad 404]

@POOHEAD189 I'll begin writing. I've had to personally revise the character a bit after seeing that we already had someone dedicated for healing, and at the moment the character stands as a sort of stress-relief type. Like the Jester from Darkest Dungeon. I'll post or PM a bio when it's ready.

Sorry folks, my interest seems to have fallen out since I keep drawing blanks for critical character information. Sorry about that, maybe next time.

[POOHEAD189]

Expect a Monday post, lads and lasses! We set sail within 24 hours!

[POOHEAD189]

Remember to re-read the "Things I Expect" post. This is your chance to show me you'll be a good poster, as well as your character to show they'll be valuable for the crew.

Post as if he is talking to your character. Don't wait for me to reply.

[spicykvnt]

Is there a character sheet for your characters Poo?

[POOHEAD189]

I'm giving descriptions in the character section which will be done shortly. But I decided against my original plan of full character sheets because 1) I've already made them of these characters many times in the past, and 2) That stuff is for you to find out, particularly their goals and history. But you'll get some info in a minute!

[Rekaigan]

I guess we'll form a nice queue, ay?

[POOHEAD189]

Have two out of the four character sheets done. Will get to the other two when I can. @Stormflyx

@Rekaigan AYE!

[spicykvnt]

@POOHEAD189

Cool! I wasn't sure if I was missing something, and before I make a post I'd like to read what you do have so I can judge the situation ;)

[POOHEAD189]

@POOHEAD189

Cool! I wasn't sure if I was missing something, and before I make a post I'd like to read what you do have so I can judge the situation ;)

@Stormflyx

Gotcha! Though there'll be less info on the Elf and particularly the foreigner for flavor sake. That mystery, ya know?

[Rekaigan]

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Gotcha! Though there'll be less info on the Elf and particularly the foreigner for flavor sake. That mystery, ya know?

@POOHEAD189

Inb4 the foreigner is trying to regain his honour.

[POOHEAD189]

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Inb4 the foreigner is trying to regain his honour.

@Rekaigan

LOL

[Rekaigan]

My apologies, pretty busy. I'll have a post up tonight, hopefully.