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@Bazmund You're going to have to explain how this guy gets into hunting. From what I picked up, this guy is Jason Bourne. Why would he join a small Hunter cell in Baltimore ?

Why would he be partaking in OPs if he's under heavy heat from Govt Orgs?

I don't mind him being a soldier but I feel alot is put on him being some rogue illusive soldier of interest.

@Benzaiten I like the story, but if you were under the vestage of Helena. Most likely you were made a ghoul, and blood bonded. I can explain what that is when I get home and if you have questions but if you were with her for years you would basically be one of her lackeys - in a sense.

Your desire seems to edge more towards atonement, you were played - unless if Eli doesn't see it as that and is still stuck with some infatuation with Helena (a side effect of being blood bonded)

How do you end up in the Baltimore cell with your brother?

@Prosaic What supernatural incident did you witness ? I seemed a bit vague in your story. Could you be more specificz for example Eli was a victim of a vampire.

How do you end up in a cell with your sister, do you keep contact after you left home ?
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@Smike Accepted move it to char sheets please.
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@Duoya I'm not sure if Frank would even be let into the cell, if he has a history of burning through cells - fighting one on one with Werewolfs or Vampires he'd most certainly be rejected.

i) A head first, open and combative tactic against the undead, and otherwise is extremely risky. I understand why he might want to do that, but either he'd be seen by the Orgs as someone who is more than human, which is bad. Or he'd be dead by his first fight, reasonably - someone with a high level of true faith could pull off a one on one, on a good day against a lower generation of vampire.

ii) His quick, or rather short lived careers in these cells would show up as a red flag for our NPC handler. I understand why he'd do that per his personal vendetta, but I don't think it would work out as currently written out.

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Hey guys just wanted to check in, how are the sheets coming along? If you have any questions feel free to ask.
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@Prosaic What supernatural incident did you witness ? I seemed a bit vague in your story. Could you be more specificz for example Eli was a victim of a vampire.

How do you end up in a cell with your sister, do you keep contact after you left home ?


Hi, I specifically left it unlisted as I was leaning more on the route of research leading him to knowledge but if he needs to have witnessed something. I'll add in that he saw something in regards to the murders that happened.

As for the bit about his sister, Benzaiten and I can discuss this but it can be assumed they came back into contact in recent years.
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Some very good points, I can add an addendum for his Days Gone after he drops off the radar. I've been feeling him out a bit more since writing him and there are some changes I want to make anyway - in particular, I think his attacks weren't communicated right; he's not meant to be an action hero, and the new unit working on his case file are intended to be working through cold cases. He's willing to work on Ops because he enjoys it, and he feels it's the only thing he can succeed in - and the heat on him isn't so hot, there's no active manhunt any more and he works under a false identity.

I also think I'm going to reduce the influence his connections to his previous job. They're meant to be a pretty generic shadowy organisation who organise deaths for profit, and their reach is also meant to be fairly global, which means I don't want Jack to be too closely attached to them still so he's desperate enough to stay in Baltimore. He won't have any membership of the organisation any more, and he'll have cut all formal ties with them - his Arsenal will almost always come from something else, or more rarely there might be an incidental contact from his old job he has a favour from. This also means that another reason he has to go on ops and be in this cell is that he has lost his old lifestyle and job, along with its benefits, so this is also partially a way to keep living while staying in touch with the new world he's learned exists.

As for how he got involved with the supernatural and became a hunter to begin with, I'll cover it in more detail when I expand his Days Gone a bit, but it boils down to him having been issued a contract for someone who turned out to be involved in the supernatural themselves, who then survived his attempt as a result. He survived their reprisal by running and hiding, and then went on to do what he'd mostly always done by seeking out people who knew how to hunt the supernatural, so that he could do so himself.

I'm happy to make changes, ofc, but does this address your concerns so far?

Edit: I think I'm also gonna have him slip off government radar way earlier so that this is a real cold case. Their files will drop off very shortly after his pattern changes and he becomes more professional, to represent his shift towards a much more covert way of living, and I'll reduce the damage he did to them as well so there's a bit less heat on him.

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@Bazmund sounds better, @ me when you've edited it I'll take another look.
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Moved Ex to characters, once the perks are updated I'll chose one and let you know
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@Benzaiten@Smike@Bazmund@Prosaic@Duoya

Lexicon has been updated, i.e. Perks - mostly.

I've posted in IC, don't feel rushed to post (the one person who's approved) lol. The real fun will start next week so enjoy the weekend.

Going to credit @Prisk for these cute post-IC ideas.

Summary, Perks, Lore is to be used by the players, summarize the post, list any perks used and if so in some detail and any lore or introduced lore about your character or minor things feel free to drop in.

Quest steps will be used be my, to show you a path your player characters can take.

again selfless thank you to @prisk for being awesome.

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Awesome, looking forward to this. Looking at the perk descriptions, Iโ€™ll be taking Letter of the Law for Ex, seems useful for a gunrunner.
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I love your game dude. But i have allot of spinning plates right now.
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@Steel Legion all good goon
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For the three sheets that need edits, let me know when they come in. No rush, just need a heads up so I can process it.
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Apologies for the delay on replying, been a bit lazy. Starting post tmw.
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@Dark Light You need to finish you edges/perks and explain how he ran into the supernatural and joined @ Baltimore.

Where did he grow up? Virgil is pretty young for an accomplished doctor, 30 is the earliest but if he's this well known and accomplished doctor he should be most likely, early 40s.

If your character is socially awkard/anti-social it may be hard for you to interact with characters, considering the RP itself is rather a social context. From what I read, is he still like that?
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alright, posted. Tried to make use of the lore/perk stuff, lemme know if I did it wrong. Learning curve and all that
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I believe I'll be retracting my submission, just due to time and mental health. The two rps I'm in already in here are about all I can handle, I think, but I look forward to watching this continue.

If Benzaiten is still with y'all, they're welcome to keep Silas in as a backstory element.
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@DeadDrop

Turned out to be more changes than I expected. I still wouldn't call this a total rewrite, but it came close.



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@Bazmund I'll review this most likely thursday, pick your perk damn you!
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