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Chill out people. It's not done in the least. I rushed out what I wrote in like an hour or so and I probably won't have time to write more until, like, monday. I just cannot write well on my mobile.

Edit: See what I mean? I try to write something... well... different and I get torn to pieces.


Take it with a grain of salt Pyro: Work it in if you feel it adds to the taste, or don't if clashes with da flavaaaaa! Cides, these be non-canoncle side stories; we've always done things a bit Ooc in em.
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Chill out people. It's not done in the least. I rushed out what I wrote in like an hour or so and I probably won't have time to write more until, like, monday. I just cannot write well on my mobile.

Edit: See what I mean? I try to write something... well... different and I get torn to pieces.


I have to object to this. Torn to pieces? Prince, and only Prince, offered constructive criticism. You can be angry at what I said, I suppose, but it's an accurate appraisal of what you have so far. What do you even mean by 'see what I mean?' You entered an unfinished submission, which isn't supposed to be done, and in what you have so far you've put more effort into making a point about gender relations than a coherent character or plausible story. I'm certain getting melodramatic won't make anyone appreciate your perspective more, or be more likely to get you points. Your entry could be good when you finish it on Monday, so why do you feel the need to play the victim now? Just wait, consider feedback if you're interested in others' perspectives, and show the viability of your content with a finished product when the time comes.

Involving a 'different' subject isn't the problem; relying on it to make your content good or sensible is. Many things are possible in the world of RWBY, particularly a noncanon one, but the more impossible the subject, the more attention and complexity needs to be given to it. Otherwise it's like throwing a few buzzwords into an essay with a weak context and expecting it to get an 'A'.
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@Lugubrious Sorry. I'm pretty much totally wasted right now. Not drunk, I mean. More like exhausted to oblivion, I shouldn't have written what I did. Anyway, yes you're right. I put all that in right now because I had two things in mind and I wanted to get the one I found more plausible "on paper" so to say.
If you're curious why the other one didn't make it... it involved Skyra being the victim of a rape, which I found a tad bit too heavy and quite honestly unrealistic, at least for Skyra.
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@Lugubrious Sorry. I'm pretty much totally wasted right now. Not drunk, I mean. More like exhausted to oblivion, I shouldn't have written what I did. Anyway, yes you're right. I put all that in right now because I had two things in mind and I wanted to get the one I found more plausible "on paper" so to say.
If you're curious why the other one didn't make it... it involved Skyra being the victim of a rape, which I found a tad bit too heavy and quite honestly unrealistic, at least for Skyra.




(I'm sorry, I had to make the reference.)
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@Lugubrious Sorry. I'm pretty much totally wasted right now. Not drunk, I mean. More like exhausted to oblivion, I shouldn't have written what I did. Anyway, yes you're right. I put all that in right now because I had two things in mind and I wanted to get the one I found more plausible "on paper" so to say.
If you're curious why the other one didn't make it... it involved Skyra being the victim of a rape, which I found a tad bit too heavy and quite honestly unrealistic, at least for Skyra.


Hey, go with what works. Weird science or rape are two plausible things that could happen in the rwbyverse, and only one of those hasn't been explored yet in the IC. Think my team in fact ran afoul with some fauna science... Well whatever.

What's more important is are you aight? Seems like you've been in a slump as of late. You're still in school, right? Classes kicking your ass? Life just getting you down? Are terrorist threatening your family again? Want to smoke a blunt?

Also I'll get a post up for Mr kitty Kat soonish.
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Hey, go with what works. Weird science or rape are two plausible things that could happen in the rwbyverse, and only one of those hasn't been explored yet in the IC. Think my team in fact ran afoul with some fauna science... Well whatever.

What's more important is are you aight? Seems like you've been in a slump as of late. You're still in school, right? Classes kicking your ass? Life just getting you down? Are terrorist threatening your family again? Want to smoke a blunt?

Also I'll get a post up for Mr kitty Kat soonish.


Blunt? James Blunt?

I'm ouut of school since end of June and I've been struggling with my inferiority complex returning ever since. Missed the window for applying for Uni this year so I basically am in a void until, like May when I can start to apply for Uni.
Not the reason I'm exhausted right now. That's related to the 9 hour train trip with no sleep and then another 5 hours of intensive city sightseeing. Hamburg is a beautiful city, indeed, but my legs were already hurting before I got onto the train at midnight. And now I'm bored. Too early to go to bed although I had basically no sleep tonight. XD

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Blunt? James Blunt?

I'm ouut of school since end of June and I've been struggling with my inferiority complex returning ever since. Missed the window for applying for Uni this year so I basically am in a void until, like May when I can start to apply for Uni.
Not the reason I'm exhausted right now. That's related to the 9 hour train trip with no sleep and then another 5 hours of intensive city sightseeing. Hamburg is a beautiful city, indeed, but my legs were already hurting before I got onto the train at midnight. And now I'm bored. Too early to go to bed although I had basically no sleep tonight. XD


Ah. Suck to hear about the uni thing. Though I think it's good that you got some time to mull over what you're going to do for uni first. Don't be like me to got in before you have a concrete idea of what to do.

But 9 hour ride with no sleep? Your train ride must have been horrible. Or maybe you're just a light sleeper. I never really got the appeal of sightseeing, to be honest. Unless there's a show at the end or I literally had to climb a mountain to get there, never enjoyed a walk through the cities. But you had a good time of it, right? Took pictures, say funny things, eat funny people.

Also more related to rwby, but if you don't mind me asking ooc what exactly is Skyra's past with the White Fang? Gren had a run with them before, so I'm curious to think if our past may intertwine.
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Ah. Suck to hear about the uni thing. Though I think it's good that you got some time to mull over what you're going to do for uni first. Don't be like me to got in before you have a concrete idea of what to do.

But 9 hour ride with no sleep? Your train ride must have been horrible. Or maybe you're just a light sleeper. I never really got the appeal of sightseeing, to be honest. Unless there's a show at the end or I literally had to climb a mountain to get there, never enjoyed a walk through the cities. But you had a good time of it, right? Took pictures, say funny things, eat funny people.

Also more related to rwby, but if you don't mind me asking ooc what exactly is Skyra's past with the White Fang? Gren had a run with them before, so I'm curious to think if our past may intertwine.


She and her parents were White Fang before they turned violent and in that first violent conflict which started as a peaceful march, both her parents got killed. She got adopted by a group formed to fight racism, but also the White Fang, since they frequently annihilated any chance of peace and they dirtied the reputation of Faunus kind everywhere. Somewhere along those lines as far as I can remember.
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Oui. Gren actually stuck around after the violence and participated in it heavily, hence how he got his combat cybernetics. It's only after he noticed his wanton slaughtering wasn't really getting them anywhere that he cut ties. I was just thinking that as a side plot perhaps some White Fang may try to attack Gren for some reason or another, and figured that you may be interested in getting caught up in that.

Initially I had this funny idea where the White Fang are attacking, chasing down our characters, and then we meet. We fight off some of the White Fang and then they both mention that "They're after me", then they confuse each other into wondering why the White Fang are after the other instead of themselves.
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Ya, sure we can do that, but first, I'm dead tired, I'm gonna go sleep now.
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I've considered giving constructive criticism on entries, but I'm going to hold back because I hardly think advice from the contest creator is fair XD

I'll be reading over your entries later (except those unfinished) and ensuring they meet specifications. That's the only criticism I'll give you, I don't want you to get disqualified due to something unclear in my rules.

A detail you can add (as Forsythe already has) is voice, if you want. I've got voice claims for both Amy and the daughter profile I've got half finished. I'm not going to really give extra for it but it might bring your character to life somewhat.
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Ya, sure we can do that, but first, I'm dead tired, I'm gonna go sleep now.


Sweeeeet, then when you wake up we can brainstorm an idea, and I'll rope in as many others as I can.
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Oui. Gren actually stuck around after the violence and participated in it heavily, hence how he got his combat cybernetics. It's only after he noticed his wanton slaughtering wasn't really getting them anywhere that he cut ties. I was just thinking that as a side plot perhaps some White Fang may try to attack Gren for some reason or another, and figured that you may be interested in getting caught up in that.

Initially I had this funny idea where the White Fang are attacking, chasing down our characters, and then we meet. We fight off some of the White Fang and then they both mention that "They're after me", then they confuse each other into wondering why the White Fang are after the other instead of themselves.


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Posting soon, now that I have the weekend to do homework over.
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Just got a Skype notification that it's @Jedly's birthday today. You know the drill people. Wish him a happy birthday while subtly telling him to post, too.
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Just got a Skype notification that it's @Jedly's birthday today. You know the drill people. Wish him a happy birthday while subtly telling him to post, too.


Fuck that, I bumped uglies with him while blatantly telling him to post.
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Is there some sort of super secret HOB skype group? Because I've never been invited.
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Is there some sort of super secret HOB skype group? Because I've never been invited.


It's reserved for members of team RDGT only. Sorry.
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*resumes thumb twiddling training regime*
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*resumes thumb twiddling training regime*


Sorry man. Finals week.
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