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2 mos ago
Current you know, my SO never forces me to say a thing that's on my mind and doesn't mind if I don't always explain myself which makes it way easier to actually tell them stuff. boundaries good.
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2 mos ago
if your boyfriend loves you for who you are he already knows what you read without you needing to tell him
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5 mos ago
no, its the manufacturer's lack of a soul that's causing it to act up on you
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4 yrs ago
I'm starting to think I have serial profile stalkers
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4 yrs ago
as much as I'd love to pre-plan RPs, I've also noticed that's the fast track to killing them. A little planning and a rough gist is fine, but anything beyond that and people don't wanna write no more.
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The day that Moss was hanged, eight others were cut down,
And when the graves had all been dug, the queen rode out of town.

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Well this seems interesting to give a shot.

Got room for one more here? Dunno quite what I'll be making yet, but just to keep things simple, probably a human/construct pair, unless someone has need of a partner of either or here.


Lugubrious was still looking for a human partner, even if I'd said he was probably best off making one himself since nobody was showing interest in playing one. Otherwise, though, I'm still accepting people as I've not reached what I'd call my personal limit on players I can handle. Even if I had, there wouldn't be any guarantee every person who showed interest would get in, anyway.

That is, to say, you do you man. I'll accept pretty much anyone that can impress me.
@Ammokkx: I could just move the school stuff ahead, it seems like a barrier in general.


Unless you have an event at it, yeah. School's kind of a really boring place to set stuff at if your characters aren't overly familiar with each-other, especially for someone like Nico who's only forged relations with characters that are outside of the walls currently. I'm stuck doing anything with her because she has nothing interesting to do, nor can she organically encounter others.

But you and Fake have something going so, idk. Up to what everyone else thinks.
Still around, for the record. Just a reminder I'm keeping Nico out of pretty much anything rn until time advances as I can't think of anything to do with her stuck at school.
@Ammokkx I'm trying to work out brainstorming things with my friend but her schedule seems to have gotten pretty hectic recently. I was going to wait a little while longer to see if things settle down for her. If not, I'll forge ahead and make both characters myself.


I just want to be kept in the loop, 's all. Having 3,5 accepted players means waiting too long makes them wait too, so I gotta cut my losses at some point if people aren't keeping me updated. I won't set a strict deadline yet, but if another day or two passes without any activity here I might set one just to light a bit of a fire underneath all y'all's asses.

Goes for everyone else too, for the record.
@Rabidporcupine@BurningCold@The Irish Tree

Y'all three are the only ones still alive that I suspect are working on something. Status update, tho? Don't want to wait forever.

Also, @Lugubrious, since I don't think anyone's intent on going solo human to pair up with you, I think it might be best if you made one for yourself.
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Does that mean I shouldn't try to join? Because this sounds cool but I'm fine with it if you think it's getting too full.


Bold of you to assume I'm going to accept everyone who showed interest.

But nah, I've handled like 15 characters spread among 9 guys before. I can deal with a lot.
@Ammokkx When do you think the deadline is going to be? Or are you just holding off the start until you nab enough capable players?


I'll start this when I think nobody's trying to sign up anymore/I've reached an upper limit on players I can handle. You have a few days longer, don't worry.
So I was going to leave it at that, but I'm kind of a petty person and

But it’s ok, you don’t like my idea 🤷🏼‍♂️ you don’t like my idea,


didn't really sit well with me. So passive-aggressive for no reason. So now I'm going to explain exactly why I don't like the idea, even with this addendum.

@Ammokkx
The idea was that he never went ‘wild’ just wasn’t happy with the choices to bond with but people wouldn’t accept that.


Okay, but like, what is this sentence then

"What was supposed to be an easy meal turned into something so much more."

This deadass implies he sees humans as no more than a meal at that point. Combine that with the core concept of 'Pride' and I don't see how any even remotely sentimental conversation could ever bring him back to reason. The opinion of humans is set at an all-time low with just the inclusion of this; if you want to make his character nuanced, your writing needs to reflect that.

This kid is his former partners grandson.


Still nothing to go off of here. If you want me to buy the change of heart you need to sell it, especially as this sheet was presented as a finished product rather than a WIP (or you at least gave no indication of it being such). You can't leave out a key part of your character and expect me to just be okay with it; in fact, this only makes it harder to review as I'm gambling on what you're actually going with. You need to show the hand you're playing or else you're just cheating at poker.

And I got tired of the back story so o saved it for the humans but through their conversation the construct realises his former partner did care about him because stories were passed on. He was never trying to be better like Draken thought but was trying to keep up.


Not mentioned, no reason for me to care. Mention this ahead of time instead of leaving me in the dark and leaving me to guess; as it is I still only have the base sheet to judge off of, which isn't written remotely well enough to garner a hint like this from it.

I was actually initially basing the idea more off that chameleon thing from monsters inc before I found the predator images. I think the only thing they influenced was it’s vision.


Cool, but you didn't use that faceclaim. Appearance matters a lot, despite what you may think; Something as overly aggressive and threatening like this is going to give a certain first impression, one which you did not play down. If you want a good subversion, look at how OwO did it. Viscera is downright gory but the fleshy, ugly exterior is in deliberate and stark contrast to their 'average joe' personality. Your personality, however, does not contradict the appearance, and the backstory most certainly doesn't. Constructs that hate humanity don't tend to go back, and I'm sorry to say, but making him look super menacing instead of cuddly does reinforce the idea that he wouldn't stop hating them. Especially with a prideful core and as his primary purpose seems to be doing battle.

This, in turn, heavily contrasts every other signup so far, where the constructs very much looked for co-existence. While I'm not opposed to the idea of one with more apprehension about this, you have to remember, you're still signing up to an institute who's first and foremost goal is fighting against your own kind. He knows what it's like to be seen as a rogue and could, therefor, easily have been on the other end. The receiving end. But this also does not play a part in your character, so I'm left to question what the hell he'd be doing in Geiru.

Camouflage was always part of the reptilian soldier concept.

Also the human half was going to be a massive contrast.


Keyword: 'was'

I don't care what it was going to be. I care about what it is.

I don't just dislike your idea. I think you just have a poor grasp on what the setting was meant to be. You didn't really design it with the world in mind, as far as I can tell, as it pretty much flies against what I've been establishing and the lore I've set up. You just made "a predator chameleon thing with spikes n'd stuff" rather than "a rogue construct turned good guy". That's the flaw in your sheet, and that's why I don't like it.


I'm going to be honest here, this is the first sheet that's left me really conflicted. While I guess there's nothing immediately wrong with it, I find the general tone you're going with to be much more melodramatic than what I intended for these things to be. The idea of not wild > wild > not wild doesn't sit entirely right with me either, especially as this one has a bestial form and would, thus, be more susceptible to becoming a true animal. Yes, it's not impossible he regains his mind, but the circumstance around it doesn't convince me. The way it's written I'd just see him tear the boy to shreds, flee and continue doing as he had been.

The "abilities" section also seem like disjointed concepts stemming from a general "predator" idea which I'm not too keen on, as that just doubly reinforces, to me, that Draken'd be extremely primal after going rogue. It's also a lot more expansive compared to all else we've seen so far. I'm not all that sold on the concept; what human does this pair with?
Here's my construct. I have an idea in mind for a human to pair him with, but if anyone happens to be particularly interested in having him as their partner, I'd be open to it.



why the fuck are all these sheets so good

I don't deserve y'all

I like the construct on its own, though obviously I'm still waiting to see what human it pairs up with first.
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