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[Abandoned] Padawan San Anin

The only thing for me is;

San has essentially abandoned her studies in lightsaber combat, making her dueling skills rather lackluster compared to most of her peers.

That might be the case, but for a Padawan, she has lightsaber skills that would suggest that's been her main focus. To play the character that you seem to want to play, I'd tone down the number of forms and her ability in them. Other than that I have no further complaints.

[Approved] Khulbe Desilijic the Hutt - Crime Lord

I think a life of 352 years probably requires a bit more embellishment then that, if you want to play them with the wealth of assets and influence you're after. Other then that, there's nothing 'wrong' I'd just like to have a few more details about his rise to power and such.

[On Hold] Neith, Infamous Con Artist and Thief

@BurningDaisies

Going to hold off any further feedback until those rewrites are done, feel free to poke when they are.

[Withdrawn] Admiral Tyrian Shassa

I like the sheet, I do have a few notes though, although one is a personal pointer, the other is a GM one.

On a personal note, I find the idea of a military figure putting their political career on hold because of a war a counter-intuitive one. Military leaders are most politically relevant when there's a war to fight! Feel free to keep that in, just something I'd note though.

The more serious note is on the idea of the Republic having a whole Battle Group assigned to unofficially support insurgents. Maintaining the Cold War is really quite important to those calling the shots in the Republic right now, I don't believe a military grouping of such scope would be given such unofficial orders. Your character might take it upon themselves to support insurgencies and may be a part of the building movement within the Republic to kick start the war, but you won't be getting such orders from Top Brass just yet.

[Approved] Jaren Jast, Courier, Free Trader & Independent Contractor

Read through the sheet myself, if that's an acceptable correction for @Ruby you also have my 'stamp.'

[Approved] Nima Tarkona - Class 1 Entertainment Slave

Just the one thing, you mention that while living in seclusion her family lived on the surface, going with the Legends version of Ryloth (which is what most people are familiar with) during 'hot storms' the temperature on Ryloth's surface outside of the safe zone of the vallies could reach 300 degrees Celsius. I'm sure rather than living on the surface they would instead have lived in the caves closer to the edge of the safe zone, to still give that isolated/hard life feel. Just a detail that stood out to me.

Otherwise, all good from my end.

[Approved] Jedi Knight Steila Yurel

I'd like some further details on what her Knight Trials consisted of, how she passed them and what impact they left on her, as the Knight trials are pretty key to a Jedi. Obviously her trial of Courage and trial of Flesh can be the combat she injured during the war, but Skill and Spirit tend to be formal trials, even during times of crisis.

Other then that, all good for me.

[Approved] T'a Tarinai - Zelosian Mechanical Savant

One quick thing.

The Sith Empire, while not exactly a friendly place, is pretty ordered and lawful. The idea of these local miners who raid/attack the Zelosians probably makes more sense if they are neutral raiders/criminals. Both sides support some pretty dubious causes in the Cold War but I don't really see the Empire supporting miners to just shoot at civilians, especially if they're not relevant to any strategic goal.

Other then that, I'm happy to stamp my mark of approval, just need another GM to co-sign then you're approved.

[Withdrawn] Garen Zi, Sith Apprentice, Teräs Käsi Master

Just a few notes.

It's quite interesting to see someone create a character connected to the Followers of Palawa during a time period they're not really touched upon, a fun idea to explore. That said, I have a few main pieces of feedback for the sheet;

1. It seems really unlikely that the Followers wouldn't have been aware of his force potential and trained him in such, they are, after all, an order dedicated to the study of the Force, simply in a different way to the Jedi. While in the Prequel Era and beyond they seem more anti-force, this is years before then, so I don't believe they would have transitioned to that yet.

2. He seems, really powerful. To, by 18, be a five times world champion on a planet dedicated to martial arts seems something of an impossible feat. Combined with his extensive, if untrained, force powers. I'd probably tone down his level of success somewhat.

3. The way in which he joins the Sith seems super convenient and 'by chance' and makes it seem cheap. I think it's worth pointing out that the Sith Empire actively pursues/captures force users to take them back to Korriban to join the academy. It seems far more likely he'd be picked up by Sith in that manner, while he was on Tatooine, rather than singled out by chance on the planet itself.

Anyway, just my thoughts, if those can be addressed I'd be more than happy to accept it.

[Approved] Jedi Grand Master Satele Shan

2/10 for gif choice.

Otherwise approved and a fun read.