Kirah

Invincible - Chapter I : Origination

Emily had never been on a helicopter before; it wasn’t something foster kids got to do. She had enjoyed it. Her stomach had done little flips, like when she rode roller coasters. The small group had been quiet though, none of them comfortable enough to chat. Emily had kept close to Alistair, both because he was someone familiar, and because she was afraid she’d disappear into the walls.

Then W.V. appeared. As he spoke, Emily could tell she wasn’t the only one uncomfortable, everyone shifted. She felt like someone was staring at her, a very unusual experience for her. Emily turned around looking to see who it was. He had looked away, just as she looked at him. He was tall, maybe 6 feet, with dark hair that could be called black. He had been staring at her, what sort of power did he have? Even Alistair had had trouble keeping her in his focus.

Mr. Vaughn stopped talking and walked off. One of the girls voiced her dislike of Mr. Vaughn, followed by Alistair voicing his disdain. Something Emily could not blame him for. Family was important; blood meant something, to most people. Emily wanted to sink into the couch and disappear, but Alistair stood up and walked away towards the stairs, and more people spoke. Emily wanted to make friends, but she worried about Alistair.

"Like it or not, this is better than the alternative. Some of us are dangerous, and out in the world we wouldn't have time to properly learn to control our abilities, some of us might even kill people. Especially since we would be on the run."
It was the guy who had been staring at her. She wasn’t dangerous and yet she was here just like the rest of them.

“Not all of us are dangerous.” Emily said to him. “I’m not.” She had no idea if anyone would notice her. Emily’s voice was shaky, too nervous, maybe that would be enough to be noticed. “I’m also not going to be killing people.” That was said with strength.

Northwood Academy

I have been table top rping since 2006. Forum rping since 2005. But doing a free form thing since I learned how to use the Internet, meaning chat room days and being like 10. I've been writing since I was 10 as well. It was a lot of escapism.

Northwood Academy

@Lady Hawk Absolutely. The beauty of this rp is you don't have to be active every day.

Northwood Academy

Everyone

I will be moving this weekend, therefore I will not be online much (I may take a few glances just to see if anything has come up).

I'm thinking I'll start 'Tuesday' soon, unless people have ideas for after school activities. Please feel free to interact, if you want an NPC let me know and I'll collab with you too. At this point I'm going to say you all have a week left to post for 'Monday', so expect the start of 'Tuesday' around next Friday. Feel free to have rumors start about the two missing students, and remember last year a student went missing and when they reappeared they were dead.

Invincible - Chapter I : Origination

@t2wave I'm not saying don't write! Learning how to write takes a ton of practice, and reading. Please don't feel like I'm saying it was awful, it wasn't. The post was just a bit hard to tell who was being the POV character when. I think the line breaks, or shoot do a collab with me, and I can show you some tricks that I've learned.

When you write a post in one POV it helps to be in an editor of some sort, be it titanpad or a Google document, even if you have to do it back and forth in PMs it can be cleaned up to be in one POV rather than switching. That way you can work out how the whole post fits together with your partner. I normally just give stage directions on what my character is doing, and then let the person who is writing the POV character edit it to be from their character's POV. It doesn't always work, sometimes it looks bad, like in our last post "eyes lit up" sounds awkward and forced, and that's because I wrote that. It isn't in McHaggis' voice so it's clunky.

Believe me working with tight POV is hard, professional writers spend an unbelievable amount of time and energy trying to get it to work right.

Invincible - Chapter I : Origination

@t2wave I think where I'm getting confused with your post is it is unclear which Point of View we're in. I have found that this is often a problem with collab posts that aren't in one strict POV. Don't get me wrong it can be done in such a way that it flows well. In this particular case a lot of the issue comes with the pronouns. There are two females, which is bound to happen a lot in this rp. I have found it easier to read, and even write collab posts in a single POV. If you have to write it in two (or more) there needs to be some clear definition of when the POV switches. Or a bit more distancing between the current POV and the person they are looking at. Even a line between the two characters would help.

Wink Murder: Who Killed Mr. Jig?

Trains were nice, well could be, this train was not nice. It was old and certainly must be falling apart bolt by bolt. She was certain of it. It didn't help that they allowed just anyone on the train, these days anyway. Harrumph, born too late.

The phone was already useless, no surprise there. If this whole thing made her late for the meeting - No she wouldn't be late. Will would distract them anyway.

The crumpled letter sat between her leg and bag, an oversized thing stuffed with items that were necessary for any traveling woman. She pulled the letter up and smoothed it, a letter peeling slightly. Undignified. She shoved the letter into her bag alongside her useless and off cell phone.

Pryrush, such Welsh name. She had, of course, told the conductor to stop there. He had given her a funny look, which she had returned before marching off to her seat. One close to the front of the train, and in the course of sitting there a few others had all asked for the train to stop off in Pryrush, which was just silly. First off she had already asked, because it had been recommended to her to do so. Secondly it was ridiculous in the first place to have to tell a train conductor when to stop. He should stop automatically. Harrumph, no decency.

Finally the train slowed to a stop. She disembarked, feeling the shaking of the train still rattling her bones. Ugh the weather. She did not need it to rain on top of everything else. Well she had an umbrella at least. Who went to Europe without one?

The older woman glanced down the train platform and frowned. She had expected a few others. That had been clear from the amount of people who had asked for a stop here, but honestly. She frowned, adjusted her hat and marched into the train station building. That was impressive, there was a building. She was not going to sit outside in the cold and damp waiting for some ... stranger. No she'd sit inside on what was sure to be a stiff backed bench. All the while she'd ignore the others. None of them could possibly be him .

The station building was... "quaint". The place looked like anything slightly modern had passed over it, only electrical wiring gave indication that the building hadn't been left in the 1800's, or worse. Inside, it was as bad as she had expected. The lights were dim, and gave off that annoying white noise buzz. Her heels clicked on the terracotta tiles, echoing around the empty station. The absolutely empty station.

Rude.

There should be someone here, to pick her up. There should be something to tell her where to go. She marched over to the ticket counter and rang the bell. No response. She rang it again. No response.

Invincible - Chapter I : Origination

Yeah I read the post, I just hadn't realized they had actually come into contact with the guy with the sign.

Invincible - Chapter I : Origination

@t2wave Really?... I hadn't realized anyone had.

Invincible - Chapter I : Origination

@t2wave I don't know if anybody has actually joined up with the Smith family. I think most everyone has at least one other person with them though.