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4 yrs ago
Current Sometimes you spend so long looking for peace in someone else, you loose sight of that peace you can give yourself. Don't forget that guys.
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5 yrs ago
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery. But today? Today is a gift. That is why it is called the present." -Master Oogway
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8 yrs ago
So many writing ideas, so little time to write. Being an adult sucks...
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8 yrs ago
It's the most fattening time of the year!
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9 yrs ago
There is a madness to my method. Or is there a method to my madness?
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@Crimson Raven...That...could have been gentler...
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Oh well, i think you covered everything.

I will look at it more thoroughly tonight though


My pleasure. Though perhaps we should start asking applicants to mention us so we can all see them?


Alright, I'm, uh, I'mma be the kill joy. So first off, the Tattoo enhancements. I appreciate your attempts at both originality and individuality, but there's some problems. First and foremost is they are runes, not tattoos, meaning that their separation from his rune magic with it is simply unnecessary. Then we have the abilities given for each rune.


  • Rune of Strength: Placed on various key points of the human body, the runes make his muscles stronger and faster while arrays carved onto his bones have made them nigh unbreakable.
  • Rune of Life: Engraved onto his heart using freely given unicorn blood, granting him endurance and vitality that could only be challenged by few.
  • Rune of Lightning: A series of runic tattoos, located at the base of the skull, that quadruples the reaction rate by superconducting the neural system.


I can accept stronger and faster from the Strength rune, but the bones...that's not a rune of strength, that's a rune of near invulnerability. And not OK. That removes his ability to suffer consequences for stupid decisions to dive in essentially.

Increased vitality and endurance...let's not make it Unicorn blood, and I can personally accept it, can't speak for my fellow GMs @Caits and @Expolar though.

Finally, we can to the Rune of Lightning. Reaction speed is SO much more than simply the neural system, and if the muscles can't keep up with the signals being sent, it's useless. That said, refer to my issues with nearly unbreakable bones.

Then we have Imperial Eye...that's a beast of a different issue. So, it's fairly impressive combination of both problems and good work. Biggest problem is King’s Sacred Commandment; while you did a good job writing it, and you clearly TRIED to balance it, you've just made it so that so long as he keeps you in front of him, you can't fight him with a very FEW exceptions of characters, one of them being mine, who have martial skill without magic. And then the giant sword from the sky, King’s Transcendant Blade, needs a minor tweek. Something like that isn't simply cast and wait another hour. The way you describe the power it has, when he drops that blade, he's out. Plain and simple, no cooldown, but a recovery period of a day MINIMUM.That's a lot of magic power pumped into it and shouldn't just be a "Oh, I dropped it, and I can do it again in an hour" because that is a stupid casual level of use for a super powerful spell. It implies that he's able to outlast any enemy's magic power with no real challenge. Coupled with the fact he's got bones that essentially can't be broken and apparently a reaction speed faster than a trained speed magic user and he's a god.

And then there's the backstory. That's, uh, impressive and well written for sure, but it's also written with no clear understanding of Fairy Tail's universe. Dragons and Humans were at WAR, and I'm fairly certain kingdoms didn't exist in that period of time, or not the way you described it. Just...I have to ask, how much of your character did you discuss ahead of time with Caits? Because I fear the answer may be none.

With my piece said, @Burthstone@Crimson Raven you may now give you thoughts. But be gentle.
Upon review of Lug's most recent post, I kinda need to know what's going to happen with our blocky friend before I can post accurately, as well as the results of Slayer's actions to our blocky friend.
Sorry haven't had access to a comp to post yet, but I should be able to tonight.
@ToadRopesHate to see you go, but it's understandable. Best of luck to you with your real life-ness. :)

@ZarkunOh. Yeah, I guess that might present some potential... something. Lol.


Mainly personal development, but the loss of the Light, even if temporary, would require they leave for a short time.
@ZarkunWhat information?


The loss of the Traveler's Light, if only briefly, and the introduction of new subclasses and changes to the existing ones.
So with the Destiny 2 reveal and that information, I'm debating on how that will affect James and Alice when the time comes.
James has shielding and Slayer is a vampire. I think we're good.
Journey through the Lush Dark-A Skittering Foe


Wrath grinned as the attacks suddenly stopped and, while he knew he now had the upper hand, he also knew he needed to keep his guard up in case the broodmother attacked again. Remaining his guarded stance, Rage Bringer up with both hands on the hilt, one close to the bottom to allow for wider strikes when needed, the Nephilim speaks. "Well, think about it. You said you devoured Silitha's remains in order to surpass her. Not a bad move, as her remains would contain a nice bit of power for you to use for yourself. But, well, couple of things that should have been red flags for you. You look more like the late Queen of Spiders AND the moment I came in, you wanted me dead, ESPECIALLY since I was a Nephilim. So, with that out of the way, I want two things.

The first is access to whatever is supercharging your webbing back in the tunnel I came from so I can either take it or destroy it. Don't care which. The second, well, the second is eyes and ears across the jungle. In return, I can help make sure you and your brood are left alone. The third is a weapon, but I don't want to kill you if I don't have to and that right is reserved for someone else anyways."
Silence reigned for a moment as Wrath let his words sink in and then he spoke once more. "So what say you?"
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