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@Keyguyperson Except edits don't actually send pings. We might have missed it anyway. Also, when is anything *not* a metaphor for some war with you? I mean, you managed to turn glomping into a metaphor for trench warfare. Somehow. XD
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@vote Meta universe.
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@Keyguyperson Except edits don't actually send pings. We might have missed it anyway. Also, when is anything *not* a metaphor for some war with you? I mean, you managed to turn glomping into a metaphor for trench warfare. Somehow. XD


I got halfway through a story about a couple in an alternate universe, Solresol-speaking, 1940's India (that was at war with France) who were named after geological formations. It was going to be a metaphor for the atomic bombings. I dropped it because writing dialogue in a language you don't know is hard, and I am incapable of writing male characters unless they are involved in Space WWII.
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I got halfway through a story about a couple in an alternate universe, Solresol-speaking, 1940's India (that was at war with France) who were named after geological formations. It was going to be a metaphor for the atomic bombings. I dropped it because writing dialogue in a language you don't know is hard, and I am incapable of writing male characters unless they are involved in Space WWII.


that's an oddly specific mental condition.
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Welcome back to yet another round of Holmishire's critiques! Enter at your own risk.

Note that the letter grades are just my personal feelings toward the entry, and not necessarily an accurate gauge of quality. They are also unrelated to the criticism given in the hiders—even if I've written a massive critique breaking down problems in your piece, that does not automatically mean it was a bad entry. It just meant that I needed more words to properly address those issues. I'm trying to help writers improve, not bash them. Believe me, I have written some massively error-laden short stories.

That being said, feel free to question me on anything I say.

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>C+


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As one can presumably gather from the letters above, my @vote goes to the first entry, the Dark Places. To everyone else, great efforts, and I hope you continue to strive for the best!
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Writing contests are back?!

Then so am I!
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Just finished reading the entries at the beach today. (Super relaxing. Forgot sunscreen. Much regret.)

Anywho,

@vote I'm voting for Time and Space. It gave me chills.

And on a somewhat related note, since I'm on vacation and until the end of which am taking a small break from roleplays, I think I'm gonna throw up some reviews! There's a lot less to work with than the first contest.
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Done! Record time!
Let’s begin, yes?
Disclaimer: Comments are based on preference alone, excluding those related to grammar. Anything stated may be ignorant or ridiculous and probably not even helpful. Most of these are rambly commentaries rather than constructive critiques, but I thought I'd might as well put in my 2 cents.



















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Finally done with all critiques! I'm using my cool new powers to consolidate everything into this post. Here's everyone!







Entries start getting shorter from here on out, and so will my reviews – if you’d like more, you can ping me in the thread or shoot me a PM, either way, I’ll get right back to you.















I'm really torn on my vote...... A big part of me wants to go with Dark Places, unfinished and unpolished as it is, because it was seriously incredible even in spite of all that. Another part of me, smaller but loud and obnoxious, wants to vote for Star Crossed. But I think in the end I just can't justify going against the strongest (finished!) piece. So..... @vote A Tale of Two Soldiers, @Keyguyperson.

Literally everybody was fun to read. I haven't said it enough this thread..... you guys ruled.
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O.o I'm working on the critiques guys. I have... three hours before I leave for the evening. I'll get something ironed out.
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Gonna finish the reviews this weekend, and respond to these very helpful and positive reviews! But also going to get my vote out of the way right now. So @vote A Tale of Two Soldiers @Keyguyperson
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Looks like A Tale Of Two Soldiers is popular!
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@Tip

Yeah, that's where my @Vote's going for.
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When's the deadline for voting?
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When's the deadline for voting?


Objective Midnight.

And then.

Cerynea awaits.
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For everyone's situational awareness -- the last week for me has been crazy. I haven't seen an actual bed since Wednesday night, and that was only for a couple hours; I accidentally stole a car, paid for it, drove across three states, flew across the country, sailed to Canada, then snuck back across the border...... it's been a long week. Our contest deadline is, in fact, midnight, and your votes should be in at that time; however, I'm going to be asleep within thirty minutes of this posting, and I'll annotate the thread if/when I ever do wake up.
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Well ok then. Uh,

As an additional note, The Twelve Labours will still be starting at Objective Midnight. So it is possible and likely that TTL: The Third Labour will be up before winners for RPGC are announced. You can use the posting of TTL as a handy guideline for when the voting period has passed though.
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WINNER: ‘A TALE OF TWO SOLDIERS’ BY @Keyguyperson!


“A Tale of Two Soldiers” also took home the ‘Mars’ bonus category.

Runner-Up: ‘The Meta-Universe’ by @Blitz!


Blitz led the field of several great pieces also receiving votes.

Bonus Categories


These bonus prizes were picked by the staff in a standard vote/discuss format. Here’s what we picked:

MARS – “A Tale of Two Soldiers” by @Keyguyperson. War stories don’t get much better.

PLUTO – “Star Crossed” by @Elitestpotato AND “The Dark Places” by @Dark Wind. We could not help ourselves – we love both these entries for (VERY) different reasons -- “Star Crossed” for its hilariously fanatical devotion to Pluto, and “The Dark Places” for its bone-chilling exploration of madness, death, and the unknown.

NORTH STAR – “Beautiful as the Stars” by @WiseDragonGirl and “Wise Men” by @mdk. But mostly “Beautiful as the Stars,” for its lovely poetic imagery.

THE CONSTELLATIONS – “Cosmic Mind” by @Psyga315. Psyga owned this category and wrote a really solid entry to boot.

A SPECIAL THANKS TO REVIEWERS!


@Holmishire and @Blitz, and also @Dark Wind and @RomanAria still in progress – you guys are seriously awesome.

Now go check out the Third Labor – already in progress
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Well done all!

Reveal: Time and space.
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