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My characters are up. I'll be looking at sheets today. Also, I'd like to remind people I'm not accepting any other females other than the ones posted already.
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Luckily I was already planning on making a male. :D
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@HushedWhispers Yay! You gonna join the discord?
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...if my char has no magic, dies he still need to be younger than thirty? If so, that's fine, just need to know what I'm working with
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@Tominas Yep! Thirty is the age limit.
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@HushedWhispers Yay! You gonna join the discord?


Yes, once I get off of work tonight. I'll get caught on everything tonight. :)
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Alright, I'm looking at sheets right now. Again, don't take my critique personally (as I'm rather picky when it comes to my roleplays).

@Elle Santiago I'd like it if you can make her biography a little bit longer, if you can. Other than that, everything seems fine.

@RumikoOhara The major issue with your CS is its formatting and grammar. There are many run on sentences and phrases that don't really make sense. If you put the sheet through a word processor, and correct the flaws, then that should be it for the grammar issue. Another issue is that her healing powers should not be that strong as of now. The flower part is alright (since it's just flowers and not actually a human being), but she can't heal someone having a heart attack. The most healing she can do is sealing shut decent sized wounds or partially healing broken bones.

Daphne should have some flaws. The whole story about the 5th grade class being chased around by her is unlikely (and not really fitting). You can have it that she cares too much about people that it begins to bother them, etc. The names you use, like Mooncat, are funky, but I assume that ties into the "hippie" part of her raising. Also, you should read over the rules again; there's something that should be added that you didn't add. Other than that, I think the sheet should be okay.

@Pathfinder The sheet's alright! Put Jude in the character tab.

@Project First off, the picture is fine cause it doesn't look too realistic and can actually be passed off as realistic anime. One thing is, I'm confused about her appearance section. You keep using the past tense... is that how she looks now, or how she USED to look?

You're also leaving something out from the rules section, so take another look.

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Actually, the 5th-grade story is based on something I once did in RL, cost me a year in the special classes. I could go into detail but it would be boring.

My grammar is I know horrible and it was checked by my meager word program and I thought fixed by that program. I don't mind the shifts in the story, I am adaptable on that level but feel if the issue of grammar is too much then perhaps it's best that I don't pollute the thread with my lack of talent and let you recruit a replacement before it's too late.
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@Elle Santiago Your character is alright. Put her in the character tab.
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@Ambra Forgot to mention you with the sheet oops.
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Alright, I believe I'm finished.



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Afraid I'm going to have to slide out of this one, internet on the road isn't reliable and I'm having trouble making an idea that really sticks with me. I'm excited to see how the RP progresses, I'm sure it'll be exciting!
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@Fisticuffs Accepted!

@Etranger Accepted as well. You two have good characters!

@PentagonWhite That really stinks... thanks for letting us know though!
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I am possibly interested, if you have room for one more?
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Sure!
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Great! I'll get to work on my sheet. :)
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@Peridot First, I have to assign you the magic you'll get. We're also not accepting any females. D:
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Ah, I didn't know about the magic bit. I've already finished the character sheet - and he is male, haha. I noticed a post you made earlier about no more females. :)
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@Peridot I'll roll your magic soon. I'm only just getting home right now.
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