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I'm gonna try to write up a synopsis tomorrow in between class (if I don't have to write another post) because I wanna get some new scrubs in to replace the ones we lost.

I also made a few edits to Justin's abstraction - just changing a few small things that didn't sit well with me, and added the aura reading I forgot to add (oops).
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I added the Synopsis to one of the empty posts, and I'll be updating other things... but off to work I go.
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Looking forward to having more new members exposed to the awful writing in this roleplay (mostly mine)
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Looking forward to having more new members exposed to the awful writing in this roleplay (mostly mine)


It'll be like that one scene in Indiana Jones where the Nazis open the Ark and get their faces burned off.

Now, since @Atrophy is apparently gonna be busy for the weekend, I'm gonna move ahead the Lynette plot thread next post.

And I'm gonna get some newscrubs in the RP - I've already got two of the scrubbiest scrubs known to man to join.
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And I'm gonna get some newscrubs in the RP - I've already got two of the scrubbiest scrubs known to man to join.


Contemplating how much I want to be used as a window cleaner...

Hmm...
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I made a quick post, but I have to go to werk soon, so I'll either add Justin in later, and maybe expand the Kimberly/Jordan post. @FernStone
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I'd like to title this collab with @Surtr Inc: Martin annoys the hell out of Hagan and everyone has a grand old time.
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I made a quick post, but I have to go to werk soon, so I'll either add Justin in later, and maybe expand the Kimberly/Jordan post. @FernStone


That's fine I don't plan on writing a post until tomorrow probably anyway so take you're time to add both
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<Snipped quote by Surtr Inc>

That's fine I don't plan on writing a post until tomorrow probably anyway so take you're time to add both


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I may be interested in being a new scrub if you'll have me.
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I may be interested in being a new scrub if you'll have me.


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Made an edit to my post, I just added Justin's pov.
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My Internet got cut off and i couldn't get on and i am way behind so i am going to have to back out of this RP sorry for the inconvenience
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Okay, I've made a character that I think is unique and I hope she works! Let me know if there is anything I can improve on or change!
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@Kitty Now, I think I made it clear that due to the very nature of the Awakened that they aren't all going to be well adjusted individuals. And that was okay, everyone is still written realistically. However, my problem with Angel is that she's very melodramatic. Mostly coming from her backstory (which really seems over the top), and certain lines... like "DESIRES ⫻ To truly learn how to feel again."

I'm okay with a bit of death in a character's backstory (I used it in Jordan and Justin's backstory)... but literally every person in her backstory dies due to some contrivity or another. Okay, while I hate to say it, I can swallow like maybe her parents dying (that'd be cliche af but meh). But, it's simply comical that every person that she had an attachment to died for one reason or another. If it was toned down a bit, I'd buy it. Another issue with the backstory is that you don't really make it clear how she ended up at this point. Why is she in Farmer Hill? Where did she come from (" She wants to become a singer and get out of the small town she's been stuck in her whole life" implies that she was born in Farmer Hill, but it's almost immediately contradicted)? Where will she go? Cotton eye Joe.

I think her abstraction is pretty cool, and I think that, with a few edits to make her more realistic (I.E making her backstory less melodramatic), she can work in the RP. I'm sick rn so I can hardly form a coherent thought, but that's what comes to mind.
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@Surtr Inc I totally get all those issues. I was a bit iffy about the backstory but I thought it would fit with her abstraction but I will rewrite it and also fix the fact that it doesn't show her connection to farmer hill. I thought I had that but I must of completely blanked out. Also I just forgot to fix the part where i said she was there her whole life.
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ABSTRACTION ⫻ Banshee. A sensitivity to impending death and a raw, loud, destructive scream.



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<Snipped quote>



"MY PARENTS ARE DEEEEEEEEEEEED REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE"
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"MY PARENTS ARE DEEEEEEEEEEEED REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE"


Fu'kin hell don't make me laugh when I'm drinking hot chocolate
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Now that Claire's free, who wants to talk to everyone's favorite angsty punk girl?
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