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Alrighty, I think I got that all worked out. If any changes or additions are needed please let me know :D
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I kinda really like here if I am totally honest, and just may have a bias for Cyan.
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i updated my previous cs (in my previous post) by a loooot, a lot of stuff was changed about her
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@sophI will say it looks MUCH better than it did yesterday, and seems like an entirely new fleshed out character in a good way.

If I'm honest, the first iteration was a 3/10, but this? 8.7/10.

The only thing I have a slight issue with is the link for the weapon is broken.
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@sophI will say it looks MUCH better than it did yesterday, and seems like an entirely new fleshed out character in a good way.

If I'm honest, the first iteration was a 3/10, but this? 8.7/10.

The only thing I have a slight issue with is the link for the weapon is broken.


i know!!! the first iteration was barely even finished and like it didnt even connect her personality with her bio or anything. also i’ll fix it now!
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@sophIt's honestly really good now!
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I kinda really like here if I am totally honest, and just may have a bias for Cyan.


Glad to hear it haha,

I am always down for all the analysis/constructive criticism I can get. Especially on a new character like Cyan here. It normally takes me actually playing a character to get a more solid feel for who they are so first game drafts like Cyan here always feel woefully one dimensional to me :(
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@KiltmanBagzI kinda understand what you mean.

When I look at a lot of RWBY OCs or any projects. Every character is so jarringly positive even if bad shit has happened to them.

So controversially, I wanted to make a character that could grow, that has many flaws, even when they can be seen as rational. A Self made person would be insecure, like what guidance would they have? They are doing the best they could with what they had.

And so I get to look at the OCs and see all these conflicting traits from other people -- as in people that would conflict with him... I love it because it will encourage some form of growth. Weather it be understanding, or appreciation, or opening up.

So to be told it was good in a PM, even if not openly, made me very optimistic. I just wanted to do something complex, while exploring the themes of inadequacy and perceived adequacy. It would have more ground and depth than. "He is just a gay dancer who is also a healer." XD

Really looking forward to working with everyone.
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I must say that I am personally a fan of all the characters so far. Plus we seem to have covered our bases in terms of personality. From Cyan's sweet dorkiness to Cassius' apathetic distance, I think we're in for quite the adventure.
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And then there is Russell, sweet, shy, young and adorable. I can't get over how adorable he looks in the appearance, clothes and all.
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I think we might be missing one person.

Edit: We are missing one from Amethyst.

I have not slept and my mind was like. "Bitch, time to do a double take." XD
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I think we might be missing one person.

Edit: We are missing one from Amethyst.

I have not slept and my mind was like. "Bitch, time to do a double take." XD


Amethyst dropped; we're waiting for @Vongola_Hasayo
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Glad she is going around well so far :D

If the we need to change her name to for more suitable team acronyms, I am also comfortable calling her Hazel Sprig, Saphire Moon, or Aurura B. Alice.
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@HitmanMmm... I see.

Edit: And then the teams were just two thrown together.

"Great, now I have to deal with 7 people... Life is just... ughh..."
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I'll have mine ready today. I have a few ideas, just gotta narrow it down.
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There are QUITE A FEW details missing, but this should give the rough idea of the general direction.
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Another problem I've thought about with Russell's folding is that he is pretty much dead. Anyone coming to help him may just think he died, and either carry him home thinking he's a body, leave him behind and thus he'll have to fight and struggle to get home alone, or the worst case, "Damn, Russell is dead. Let's bury him here." And just buries him before he can "unfold".
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@datadogie Or, if you're a paranoid asshole. "WE should be sure." And just proceed to stab the defenseless body a bunch. Or burn it.

Edit: It honestly seems like it would fit... a Possum more. But eeh.
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Unrelated, but I have another update.





I like how the rough one with the place holder blotches gives a FF14 White Mage like appearance.

She really put a lot of time into the face and I love it.

Though I sorta thought of background ideas in terms of. "Well, since we didn't start, I could technically change the bio up. But I probably won't unless it can help get sub plots going for world building since this isn't just a complete retreading of the Source Material."

That being said, these are going to have to paint the image of this character for now.
Thank you all for being patient with me on the art thing. But hey!
We are getting there.
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Another problem I've thought about with Russell's folding is that he is pretty much dead. Anyone coming to help him may just think he died, and either carry him home thinking he's a body, leave him behind and thus he'll have to fight and struggle to get home alone, or the worst case, "Damn, Russell is dead. Let's bury him here." And just buries him before he can "unfold".


I think a good way to prevent his team from abandoning him if he folds is if he tells us about his semblance and how it works, maybe demonstrate it? And if I read Russell's semblance correctly, we COULD theoretically shoot or hit a non-vital area to see if it'll do anything, since it increases his body's durability as a way to test if he's folding or dead. I mean it would probably hurt like hell when he unfolded, but as you put it, better to be alive and in pain.
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