Lord Wraith

The Corrigan School for Advanced Learning and Development (A DC School RP)

@Tyler Well since he wouldn't hit on Mari they might get along :P

The Corrigan School for Advanced Learning and Development (A DC School RP)

@King Kindred Oh the joys of reviewing a Kryptonian sheet. There's nothing that stands out as horribly wrong, although I'm sure some people might think he's over powered. But the underdeveloped limitation seems to limit him quite well. His strength maxes out at an acceptable range, and being able to just go Mach speed is pretty reasonable. I think I can go ahead and accept this sheet. Throw him up in the depository whenever you want.

EDIT: As a suggestion in order to encourage development, you might want to limit the powers down for now so that Kieran has abilities to learn as we go.

The Corrigan School for Advanced Learning and Development (A DC School RP)

@Blue Demon I like things to be snazzy. Nothing suits me like a suit.

The Corrigan School for Advanced Learning and Development (A DC School RP)

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The Corrigan School for Advanced Learning and Development (A DC School RP)

Well on another note: I need to add more characters to the awesome list. Who should I add? ((Who wants to be connect to Jack))

@Avanhelsing

Right I need to make that skeleton _{(now where did Blue Demon post hers...)}

I will agree that Urxas may not be a fit for this rp. I'll make a different CS and try to make it fit better

@Weird Tales

Alright sounds good.

The Corrigan School for Advanced Learning and Development (A DC School RP)

Just to clear this up, there is no problem with authoritarian characters right? Because I'm a huge advocate against one sided politics in comics and that is important for me to know when crafting characters.

As I said I'm taking inspiration from Hawkman who is authoritarian and one of my favorite DC heroes because he balances out the ultra liberal green arrow.

@Weird Tales

I couldn't care less about your character having a political belief, my problem was with an alien thinking in terms of Earth's politics and understanding them. That said if you're going to give your character politics, I'd rather it be a motivator rather than the theme of the character. A school RP isn't really the medium for that, a 'Civil War'-esque RP would however be perfect for it if you get what I mean.

Politics are such a drag and divisive topic that I'd like to keep away from them as much as possible. You won't find a plot here really allowing you to highlight your character's authoritarian nature outside of his everyday actions towards others.

The Corrigan School for Advanced Learning and Development (A DC School RP)

I felt like that when I was in Uni too. It never goes away.

@Blue Demon

Things need to stop making me think of songs lol

The Corrigan School for Advanced Learning and Development (A DC School RP)

<Snipped quote by Mei>
The horror. I never want to go back to school. I have my BA and I'm done.

@Blue Demon

I would have the same feelings but I'm still completing college haha

The Corrigan School for Advanced Learning and Development (A DC School RP)

He's technically not a bear since his species is not part of the Ursidae family. They just happen to look like them, if I look exactly like Michael Jordan that doesn't mean I'm him or a professional basketball player.

@Weird Tales

When has technicalities ever stopped anyone from making jokes? :P

Anyways you'll need to review the rules for a missing detail in your notes section. While I realize that a higher gravity on a home planet is a very comic book excuse for a character being stronger on Earth, you do realize that he would get weaker as time went on? If his muscles are used to exercising under the gravity that allows him to lift 50 tonnes, there would be very few things on Earth that would actively allow him to maintain that strength level thus causing his muscles to deteriorate the same way an astronaut's do after spending so much time in zero gravity. A hundred and fifty feet is a little high for jumping but I suppose it's alright since we have people who fly.

Also while normally I'd knock you marks for explaining your backstory in your sample, it makes sense in this case as otherwise I don't think I'd accept the character. I do have quite a few qualms with the backstory however as Urxas thinks in terms of Earth politics, notable by his use of 'left wing' and what not. Furthermore, isn't the idea of the Ursas kind of stepping on the Green Lantern's toes?

I have to say I'm very torn on this character. The idea is unique and all, but I almost would have preferred a Were-Bear than this execution. It strikes me as very contrived and unnecessary. To conclude I don't believe that Urxas as he's currently designed is a good fit for this particular RP.

The Corrigan School for Advanced Learning and Development (A DC School RP)

Whelp. I'm going to log off for lunch. Don't you kids get too wild while I'm gone. :)

@Blue Demon

Us? You're the bad influence :P