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Reluctantly retired roleplayer.

Except when I'm not.

Why are you here when you should be writing posts?

You can edit a bad draft, but you cannot edit a blank page.

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I'm happy to announce the search for a pair of Co-GMs is over!

Allow me to introduce you to your new Co-GMs.

@Junkmail is our first Co-Gm and he will be helping me with character sheet reviews, offering his services to those who need help in fleshing out or improving their sheets. Additionally, Junk is available for post-proofing and will be aiding in approving the aesthetics of this place.

Our second Co-GM is @Hillan who will be overseeing crime in the IC having a specific focus on the development and consistency of the game's various gangs and mob. Hillan will be using his own character to push forward plots that are gang and mob-related.

Thank you to all who applied and all who have joined the game so far.
@sly13 I'm going to sound like a pretentious asshole for a second here, but your spelling, sentence structure, grammar, and word use are off in a lot of places and need to be edited. I should also note that the sheet's formatting doesn't seem complete as you have a couple headers modified to blue but others aren't. Additionally, your jacket image isn't correctly linked or something as there's just a weird image in that hider.

In terms of actual content, I was wondering if you could take some time and further flesh out his abilities further. Chris' electrokinesis is kind of described in broad strokes and I'd like to know more about how it works, what sort of voltage/amperage he holds etc. How exactly does he skate on power lines and rails, and perhaps a better description than 'tasers on steroids'. Your weaknesses also make no mention of insulators.

Once you've finished the edits, let me know and I'll give the sheet another read but I can't accept it in its current state.
Just in case there's any confusion, everyone is free to post again now.
Gotta get my post up tomorrow, but I just want you all to know that @Lord Wraith is a big ol' ding dong.


Deserved that!
M A T H E R P A R K:

Tuesday, August 21st, 2018 - 05:57pm | Search Party Registration

Hanging his helmet on the handlebars of his motorcycle, Jonas lifted his hands to his shoulders before pulling the hood hanging over the collar of his leather jacket onto his head. Walking through the park, the gathered crowd was about as large as he would have expected in such a small, tightly knit community. Entering the line for registration, Jonas slowly shuffled along with the rest of the line as he peered around the park. Conner and Alexander were ahead of him in line, while Jonas spotted Benjamin moving through the crowd alone. There was no doubt in his mind that several others from the Hyperhuman Social Conscience Program had heeded his words and attended the search tonight.

Signing the registration sheet, Jonas walked further along the table, accepting a bowl of chili, hot dog and water bottle before smirking as a large black dog snatched a couple of hot dogs from the table. It was good to see that Noah had chosen an appropriate form to add tonight’s search. Watching the dog disappear towards the old St. Betran’s Church, Jonas’ eyes followed a couple of over eager volunteers as they too went in that direction, opting not to wait for formal instruction from the police.

Eating his hot dog while he walked, Jonas adjusted the messenger bag over his shoulder as continued to move. Pausing as feedback from a nearby speaker caught his attention, Jonas put a spoonful of chili in his mouth as the local police captain climbed onto the makeshift stage.

“Good evening, Crestwood Hollow.” Captain Griffin said to the gathered crowd as he addressed them. “I want to kick off tonight by thanking each and every one of you on behalf of the Stewart family for sacrificing your evening in order to help find their missing daughter.” He stated before clearing his throat as he continued.

“When you registered, you were assigned to an officer. That officer will lead a group through a specific region, each person standing roughly five feet apart as we comb the forest for any sign of dear Kaitlyn. If you did not bring a flashlight, a flashlight will be provided for you, please ensure you have one before heading out. Stay with your group, don’t go off on your own, the last thing we want to do tonight is create another missing persons case.”

Nodding to himself as he turned towards the forest, Jonas watched as Benjamin entered the forest alone before following after him.

M A T H E R P A R K:

Tuesday, August 21st, 2018 - 06:45pm | St. Betran’s Methodist Church

A combination of noise and smells attracted Noah’s attention as he padded along the road towards St. Betran’s Church. Ducking into the foliage surrounding the church, Noah’s eyes scanned the graveyard as his nose picked up a smell that triggered a memory from earlier in the day. Something familiar, someone he knew, someone from Jonas’ class.

Then his eyes noted Chloe Bronse across the graveyard. Running out of the foliage, Noah had to be sure as he ran past her, leaving no doubt to the question at hand as he startled the girl before disappearing into the shadows surrounding the graveyard. With Chloe’s identity confirmed, Noah’s interest was piqued as he decided to stick around and see what exactly the girl was doing in a graveyard instead of gathering in the park like everyone else.

The scene that unfolded next served to do little but make Noah’s blood boil.

He could scarcely believe that such initiation practices were still done at Mather Memorial, especially by the cheerleaders. Noah expected this kind of behavior from the school’s football team but not from the girls that made up its cheerleading squad. Though he had to admit at the end of the day, perhaps the two teams weren’t so different.

Suddenly voices caught his attention as Noah’s pointed ears perked up, a lone beam of light bursting through the edge of the graveyard, followed by another and another as the girls began to scatter. Breaking his cover, Noah ran towards the grave where the cheerleaders’ victim had fallen, barking loudly to attract the attention of the search party members before he lifted his nose into the air.

Taking a deep sniff, Noah caught Chloe’s scent before growling as he debated chasing after Hannah in order to teach her a lesson before he decided against it. Instead, he turned in the direction that Chloe had left and gave chase.

Hyperhumans had to stick together after all, especially when this search party could all too easily become a witch hunt.

M A T H E R P A R K:

Tuesday, August 21st, 2018 - 07:04pm | In the Woods

Outside the cave Benjamin had chosen to hide himself and his friend within, the shadowy wolves suddenly stopped what they were doing as a sharp whistle pierced the night. Departing into the darkness of the forest, they ran between the trees, ducking under fallen logs and breaking through the brush as they bore down on Hannah Ellis. The girl screamed as she tripped, falling over a broken branch before quickly finding herself surrounded. Covering her face, branches snapped around her as a heavy foot landed, a voice shouting out words that she didn’t understand until suddenly a pat on her shoulder caused her to raise her head.

A man in a hood stood over, stretching out a hand to help her up. Whatever had been chasing her was to nowhere to be seen as she accepted the hand, climbing to her feet as she tried to compose herself, shrugging off the embarrassment of her cowardice. Opening her mouth to thank her rescuer, Hannah suddenly felt a gloved hand cover her mouth as the man took a hold of her and dragged her deeper into the forest.
@Everyone, I've updated the Character Roster to be easier for both current and new players to navigate.

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@Lord Wraith

Hey thanks for taking a look at it.
I have toned down her powers and edited to what you suggested with the two-storey residential home!


Thanks! Feel free to move the sheet to the Character Tab and post in the IC at your earliest convenience.
@Altered Tundra No, you should be good to post a sheet next week. Looking forward to seeing what you've got cooking up.
Superhuman Ability | Energy Manipulation Sabrina possesses the ability to shape and manipulate energy from her body of varying degrees. At lower levels, she can expel energy sending a car flying away, crushing enemies against them. At higher power levels, she was able to level an entire scrapyard blowing up a large crater in the ground with a kinetic supernova. Sabrina can infuse the kinetic energy she harnesses with her physical combat to produce a potentially explosive combination. She can also use her powers in conjunction with a full body charge to attack strong opponents she is not able to defeat conventionally.

She can also use her explosive powers to cause an explosion capable of launching herself high into the air or forward into superspeed levels. She is also able to control the kinetic force spectrum, and energy field of her explosions, allowing her to create a concussive force field to shield her or others in event of an attack from projectiles or explosions.


Overall it's a very well done sheet I'd just like to lower her limits some. The tone of the RP is aiming to be something more in line with Marvel's Netflix offerings and so perhaps instead of leveling an entire scrapyard, we could bring that down to a small building such as a one or two-story residential home. Other than that, I like the sheet and her powers!
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