… So, it turned out Route A was pretty eventless, and he was currently carrying Purrloin while she slept in his arms. He didn't really want a Taillow, then again, one could be of good sentimental value from his home. He could totally imagine that he could bring allong a Tailow as to represent Dewmeadow, and... but... Rowan's energy drained as they walked on further, but he kept himself walking. Somewhere, at the end of this walk, was the start to his Pokémon journey! And he had friends here, too! Oh, that's right! They should totally talk about things on the way, obviously!
'So...' He was about to ask something, when he had to blink when the bridge appeared in view and Mara took off. Rowan took his time to inspect what was in front of them... and got the shivers. The trainer... looked so ready for them. And his words... ”Red Hand”? What's that? Whatever it was, it didn't sound good at all. And given what he said, it was clear. This man wasn't a good person.
Rowan froze for a moment, his eyes widened. This man... had the confidence to block the road. This likely meant he had confidence in his abilities. This would, in turn, mean that he had earned this confidence from somewhere, likely with years of experience, and could therefore be counted on to be pretty powerful. With other words, with all likelihood, the three young beginners would likely not stand a chance in a fight. They shouldn't try to. They should try to find an alternative way over, even if it meant catching a Tailow and then just having it fight Tailows until it evolved and was able to carry them over. Yeah, their course of action was clear, fighting wasn't an option...
"Ya just another thug like Team Rocket aren't ya? Preyin' on the weak and gettin' fatter and fatter like a Magickarp too big for its pond. And ya know what? Just like'em, scum lika ya need to be put down. Lulu, Quick Attack!"
… WAIT, WHAT!?
Rowan blinked and stared wide-eyed at the hotheadedness of his friend. Th-this wasn't a job for our kind! They should alert adults, or something...!
'Wait, Yasha! H-he might be too... powerful...' Rowan stuttered, staring forward in fear, not knowing what kind of Pokémon that was or how powerful it might be. He felt extremely unprepared for this being their first obstacle as Pokémo trainers.
'Puuurr...' Purrloin suddenly made a noise. Rowan blinked and looked down on her, where she now was awake in his arms. She stared forward at the trainer, her eyes having something very annoyed in them. How dare he claim ownership of something SHE was to cross over!? The nerve! He needs to be taught a lesson.
'Ah!' Rowan blinked as Purrloin sprang from his arms, landing in front of him, and threw him a surprisingly threatening glare back at him. Sh-she was actually itching for a fight...
'Purr-Purrloin?.' … ”Well? Are you going to fight with me, or not?” … Somehow, Rowan kind of understood what she intended. … Rowan took a deep breath, cooling himself, and then nodding.
'Alright. Let's support Yasha.' He looked into his Pokédex. Purrloin's new move was ”Assist”. He had studied a lot, but he had no idea what that particular move actually did. But, it sounded good. Assist Lulu.
'Purrloin! Use Assist!' He said in frightened exitement, and Purrloin looked back at him like he was an idiot.
'Purr...' ”Nevermind, then.” She turned around and dashed. Since Rowan didn't have any other Pokémon, Assist would not do anything. However, naughty Purrloin had a different plan of how to ”Assist”. This was clearly not a strictly legal battle, so Purrloin was not going to treat it as one. Since her trainer was an idiot, she'd take matters into her own paws. A cruel little cat-smile appeared as she dashed, not for the Pokémon, but for the trainer.
Given the chance, Purrloin would jump and attempt using scratch-attacks against the trainers shoes and pants with fairly sharp claws. They'd be directed mainly against clothes and never directly against flesh, not really with the intention to actually hurt but certainly intending to keep him VERY distracted.
Assuming that Purrloin's angle was just an attempt to strike from an angle or a prerequisite for the attack, an unsuspecting Rowan instead focused on directing his Pokédex at the opponent's Pokémon. Know your enemy...
WAIT, WHAT!? I JUST GO TO SLEEP AS NORMAL AFTER SO LONG OF DOING NOTHING, AND THERE ARE FIVE IC POSTS MENTIONING ME!? ALL POSTED DURING MY SLEEP!? WTH!?
Edit: Posted. Tell me if what Purrloin's doing is, like, not okay or if I need to clarify anything. I can change it. I can totally imagine that the situation is "if that kind of action is proved okay, then we'll have a problem in the future fights against criminals". My personal apologies for the ideas that came into my mind as I was typing the post.
@shylarah At least I keep the theme constantly in mind when I read the entries. Often it isn't a problem, but sometimes it can appear one where I'm like... "... And this relates HOW to the theme?"
In those cases, I'm bothered by it and will likely not vote for it, regardless of how good the entry was.
And, those that do something really clever with the theme automatically get bonus-points in likability and are therefore more likely to get my vote. Haha.
I will have to say, though. I do somewhat miss the required components thing. It gave less freedom, sure, but it did give more incentive to actually stick to the theme and give a nice little base to build up awesome ideas from. It was easier, somehow, because the first step was already taken, and then the voters could consider the components while also reading the entries. There was more of a desire to actually use the components then compared to simply the bonus categories.
But, this works fine, too! A bit of extra freedom, simply, which means it just requires me to build up a base as well! It should also mean more varied stories, and who knows what else? Haha!
If I just had him shrugged, it doesn’t feel like the readers would have gotten to delve as deeply into the character. I like to put the reader into the heads of the characters, which means hearing their reasoning for their every move. … Anyway, yes. I will keep this in mind.
… I must say, I feel a little bit discouraged since you seem to have a lot more of a negative impression on your own cast than I got from reading. I mean, I pretty much just felt they were a cozy lovable family throughout 75% of the entry. Tony had a revenge plot? I never caught that. I never really saw Al as being a male thing, either. And I… quite like Maggie. She’s a sweet person. At least to me. … Oh, well.
It did feel like this was more intended to be the main story than that this was setting up for another story, I will admit. If this was just the first couple of chapters in a book, then it would probably have felt like it went too quickly. But, now when I read it as the main story, it felt perfect. Hm. Oh, well!
@Dark Wind I was getting Ellri vibes from the entry myself. XD
@The Grey Dust Heh. Yepp. I see what you were going for. I didn’t see it as being reunited with his queen, more of having outwitted death, and causing him to die wasn’t even getting revenge at all, because that was going to happen anyway… Heh. Anyway. Well done.
Now, then. Those two.
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Lacks the use of "" for conversation and instead uses the singular apostrophes. Possess several errors in grammar and a misspelling of the word maneuvering. While the story itself is good, the way it is written makes for a bit lackluster read. Commas placed in certain areas weren't needed and other areas where they should have been.
I totally read that wrong first and read it as “I’m not judging it. I’m passing it on to Terminal.” XD
No idea how to make a story that isn’t a lackluster read. Guess I’ll just say that “Since I can’t do better than this, this is good enough!”
Also, that word is hell. Partly because I use it so much, partly because I never spell it correctly on the first try. Anyways.
Thanks for the review~
The usual smattering of inappropriate punctuation, but nearly no typos of note nor misplaced words. The most serious technical issue with the entry is, as Mag Lev indicated, your use of apostrophes rather than quotation marks to denote speech - which might be handwaved solely for stylistic reasons.
As far as the actual stories go, in some areas your your descriptive passages are simply amazing and wholly engaging. The identifying the Humans via their shoe markings, the inability to even perceive the rest of the Human body above roughly ankle-height - brilliant, small details that lend the story a significant degree of charm. In other areas however, your descriptions fall short - in particular I was disappointed with your summation of the Ghinites' civilization and city, which was essentially described as 'lots of goo.'
Perhaps the most criminal example of that might be your description of the pad Akheria was reading near the start, which was almost literally described as 'a plate of goo with goo indentations for reading.' Are these creatures blind? WAre the indentations a different color, or is there some form of electromagnetic perception going on? I have no idea. If I had to guess I would say you got a bit caught up in the novelty of the concept and so were unable to wholly elaborate upon the nuance of the setting. My recommendation in this case is simply to use multiple variations upon a same theme if you find yourself constantly describing several details or elements with uniform or else highly simplified natures.
Allow me to just accept the inappropriate punctuation, because I don’t know where it is or how to fix it. Hah.
… Well, the whole city IS a whole load of goo. It’s all composed of the same kind of material, which is produced by their own bodies, which result in the technology they have. And, um, on the pad, the indents are clearly visible, and they’re certainly not blind, I described them as having eyes… It wasn’t an important element. It was just… their kind of report. I actually HAD more description of said pad, but I cut it out because it wasn’t important. Er. Anyways. What do you mean with “multiple variations upon a same theme”? Sounds very useful, but I don’t understand what you mean.
Thank you very much for the review. I am very happy that you found parts good enough to use such nice words to describe them~! It makes me smile a lot~!
Allow me to just go and produce two books from two of my favorite authors. Lesse here. “The Diamond Throne” by David Eddings and “The Reality Dysfunction” by Peter F. Hamilton. Lesse, if I can find a random line of dialog in them… No, wait, that doesn’t matter. What DOES matter, is that both of them use the style of dialogue that I used in this entry. Due to this, I’ve always been under the impression that that’s how real authors typed dialogue. Since then, I’ve read more, and seen a rather balanced mix. But, um, yeah. I felt like using the style of the authors that I looked up to, without really knowing the rules for the style.
Besides that… I refuse to think that David Eddings and Peter F. Hamilton are somehow both wrong in their choices of how they present dialogue. XD
Not to say the other style isn’t right, too. I just, well, wanted to try to do it that way. Yeah.
Also, those Challenge Allocades are basically impossible for me to get anyway, so those ominous tones of you writing that “It’ll be worse in the final entry” I respond mostly with “As inevitably, then, since I’m powerless to do anything about that”. Haha.
Sure, I'll bite. Note, I have absolutely no idea about anything in XCOM and have never played the games, but I made something from the limited information I have.
Name: Milla Duchene Nickname: Duchess. Because of the resemblance in her last name. Gender: Female
Backstory: Born in 2005, she was ten years old when the alien invasion happened. Her family were a bunch of farmers, not much that they could do in the face of such power. Her father was a member of the original XCOM, but he died when the base was destroyed. Milla knew this as she was growing up, but due to the lack of things that she could do about it she and the rest of her family allowed themselves to be subdued. However, just in case, Milla secretly trained herself, kept herself fit and used any means necessary to learn how to operate a weapon. She may have joined ADVENT, depending on if that was composed of humans or not. Because, anything where she could fight was good for her.
Then, when XCOM reformed, Milla jumped at the chance to once again combat the alien threat in place of her father, hoping to be able to succeed where he failed and live to tell the tale.
General appearance: Mildly tall, serious look upon her face. I’d put her with short, black hair, probably cut it because long hair would get in the way while fighting. She could potentially have suffered a scar here or there during her physical years, though probably wouldn’t have gotten a tattoo unless it was a common thing, that’d you be left out if you didn’t get one. I imagine her with rather sharp features, yepp.
Attitude: Twitchy, would probably be the best description. She’s somewhat nervous about fighting these creatures that she knows have beaten them before, and might be easily startled. But, she’s determined to slay these bastards, and she’s a thorough professional at what she does.
Class: Ranger. She wants to see the whites in their eyes… Er, or any equivalent which might be relevant among aliens. Subclass: Assault. She’d have it no other way.
... I did slightly think that, for the saving time purpose, @Morose and @hatakekuro were to post their Route A actions or otherwise post that which would momentarily delay that, in order to skip the need of one @Whimsley post. But, uh, now I'm not sure. Um. I apologize for my confusion. Haha.
I swear, you are having more fun than a human being should be allowed to have.
This is *cough cough* almost the longest entry in the group. It’s the longest one of yours I can remember off the top of my head. To be clear – length is not strength. Just being longer doesn’t make something better. That said…. Dude, the length was perfect, says this casual reader. The complex-ridiculous-ness of a genius slime colony worshipping the mighty god Adidas, the heartache after catastrophe….. wait do Ghinites have hearts? The simple-organ-ache after a catastrophe. Vows of tiny revenge. I mean come on. It’s brilliant. It’s possibly certifiably insane – but it’s brilliant.
If it weren’t so brilliant, there’s a lot of things I would complain about. Like, jumping from a lab room straight into an alien landscape was jarring and made me wonder all sorts of things – has @platinumskink finally lost it, for one? And lots of variations on that, but also some ‘uh what’s this doing here’ and ‘what the hell is supposed to be going on’ and ‘what’s a ghinite’ and ‘is that Adidas like the shoe or a plural of an adida or what?’ It turns out, though, that these were all the right questions. It wasn’t random at all – it was structured and paced and okay, maybe the structure was made of see-through goop and it was really weird, but jesus it was perfect. I mean bloody perfect. At every turn.
Alright. So story wise, I’ve got nothing to whine about. Surely I can poke holes in character development, right? Well….. KIND OF. I mean, Doctor Hogan is a fun villain, always a little creepy and blossoms into a genuine hateable guy. Aaron doesn’t get it, and I don’t like him because he never gets it, and at the end he’s like oh, I think I get it, I’ll be cool….. but that’s not really a weak point because, I mean, how in the hell would he have gotten it? So he actually rings pretty true – a little on the simple side, maybe, but nothing wrong with that. The Ghinite characters are one-dimensional I guess, but….. I mean….. they practically ARE one-dimensional, so come on. So if I was going to poke holes, the hole I’d try to poke is “There isn’t a whole lot of character development – any, maybe.” But there doesn’t need to be. Here. Other stories, less crazy stories, you’ll need that – but not here, honestly.
Writing-wise – I had my eye open, desperate for anything I could complain about. I remember spotting only two things. Well, three – one of them was the food-god Adidas, but that turned out to be awesome. First – when describing the Ghinites, you said something along the lines of ‘this would look creepy to a human.’ Don’t say that! Just describe it in a way that’s creepy to humans. On the one hand, showing is better than telling – but on a more (less?) practical level, Ghinites have no concept of how they might seem to humans, so that doesn’t make sense. Yes – in a story about cancer-curing slime creatures, I’m complaining about a description making sense. Deal with it. Second, there’s still that running tendency of yours to just leave thoughts from the narrator as things go along. I’m growing accustomed to it, it doesn’t necessarily bother me as much – but it’s still kinda sloppy to actually write out “Eh, suppose there’s nothing else to it, then?” Sounds like you ran out of things to say and wrote down the part where you ran out of things to say, and only then went on writing. Eh…… well I guess that’s it then, on to the conclusion.
I’m allowed to do that. I’m critiquing. You’re telling a story!
Bah. Well the point of saying ‘I only found two things to hate’ was that, look, there wasn’t much to hate in this entry. I mean core concept, if a person doesn’t like what you’re doing, you’re not gonna win them over – but damn it, you’re writing like you and it really feels like it’s….. uh…… gelling. So stick with that. And can I remark, too, that there are some objectively fantastic parts strewn about in this story – I’ll highlight one that I really liked.
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Brilliant.
Okay. Okay. Moral is…… damn good job. I don’t know what to call this genre but you’re all over it like a pig in mud. It suits you exactly, and you suit it, and it’s…… it’s awesome.
Oh, geesh. Can’t I give you a like, a laugh and a thank all rolled into one? No? Oh, too bad.
I’m very happy the entry had the intended effect on you. Yes, that switch was very much intentional, because, yes. You’ve outlined the reasons. I’m really happy it worked. Even if I totally fail the labour by any reason, I’m not totally satisfied with how my entry turned out thanks to knowing how you reacted to it~
And yes. I do need to get that out of my texts. I was actually avoiding writing comparisons to humans, but seems a few still leaked through. Probably because I wanted to enforce their aura, and there’s no easier way of enforcing an aura than to actually tell the readers what aura they’re supposed to feel. Guess I shouldn’t do that, huh. And, um. Cases where I write things like “Eh, suppose there was nothing else to it, then?” … That’s the thought of the character that we’re currently following. Not mine. I can’t really write their thoughts within speech, and putting it in italics feels like a waste because the thought isn’t important enough. It’s difficult to write “, Aaron thought” after such a line because it can disrupt the flow of the sentence, and it works weirdly with a questionmark. Eh, guess I’ll find a way to avoid it, then. Oh, well.
Thank you very much for the review. I’m really happy you took the time to write it, because I’ll likely return and read it once a month to smile happily to myself. But of course, there’s the future, too, so yeah~! I’ll keep doing what I do~! And yes, I enjoy writing out there things, so I am very happy to hear that it suits me~
Now, then. Speaking of things that suit the author… No, wait, that's not right. Pretty sure you could write anything and make it suit you. Haha.
… Can I just pause here while I’m reading and tell how much I DREAD the coming of whatever the subject of this labour is about? I just want this story to end blissfully happily, damn it! :(
Holy wow, this is getting intense.
“Lady,” he said, looking right into her visor without batting an eye, “at this moment you’ve got more firepower watching your back than the president.
Ptt- the-heh. I like that line. … Which makes me notice, there’s no closing quotation-marks. … Eh, details.
“In the expositional overflow her author had almost forgotten about it, but it came flooding back all at once.”
… What? Um. If “expositional overflow” were to be replaced with “all that she had been told” and “her author” were to be replaced with “she”, then this would make sense. Now, it totally sounded like… XD
“On the one hand, most of what Bunsen told her was thematically irrelevant to the rest of her experience, and probably should have come up much later in her adventure, piecemeal, in an organic way that introduced the concepts of lightspeed as a criminal enterprise more credibly and built up her antagonists into the more nuanced characters they were always meant to be. And of course, having the whole theory based on a wild speculation after a strange fistfight and coincidental knowledge was extremely hand-wavey, which she hated – she wished that Bunsen had taken Besk’s name and description, done a little actual investigating, maybe incorporating some conflict with his upstart partner Anyang, and come to his conclusions a little more naturally. His little interview should have just been a folksy, irreverent display of how he actually does care about Taina’s cold case, and how he was going to be an unlikely ally in the future. But, on the other hand, the way things were revealed all at once meant she and Tony had a better idea of what was coming, and they could get to the bloody point – which was certainly a relief.”
That, uh. That paragraph sounds very, VERY odd. Especially because I was trying to read it as part of the story in my first read-through. That, uh, didn’t make sense. Especially how you somehow mix in the character’s opinion on the way that you wrote the entry…
“We gave him a lot, and he magically knew a lot more because the author’s tired”
OY! XD
“It’ll make the editing process easier.”
I can’t tell if this is an actual serious line that I don’t get or if this is another joke from a tired mdk.
“All of this would have been a better way to work through that massive exposition-splosion, but that ship has sailed, so just pretend we covered that here differently and it made more sense or something, Idunno.”
Oh, c’mon, I wouldn’t even have noticed it if this kinds of things weren’t included in the text itself…! XD
“You remember those ships I told you about, in that exposition?”
Geeeesh. It gets even WEIRDER when you mix that into actual in-story dialogue!
I don’t know if you edited it afterwards, but I actually really LIKED the exposition! It was an amazing realization, and it made Bunsen out to be awesome, clever, and that he got the job done! It also made Taina thoroughly badass by suddenly showing the things she’s capable of! Don’t do that to your text…! XD
… Ooooh. So she heads out with Bunsen and becomes an unlikely duo that’ll fight crime together? He’s the unsuspected genius detective that’ll unearth all the plans of the criminals, she’s the cybernetic unintended super-soldier with a bone to pick with them, and together they’ll strike fear into the hearts of all the scum of the universe? I lllllllllllike it! Alright. Now, let me go on and start more properly commenting on your entry.
It’s great. You really caused me to care a lot about this girl, and really, REALLY made me want to see her succeed! You had a relatively small cast, but honestly, this is a good thing! Each one of the main souls got the attention and traits that was needed to make them feel like excellent additions, and the text is littered with the tiny little jokes that normal humans do to bring smiles to faces, and it WORKS! It makes it very entertaining to read, because all the characters feel so very much alive! So little was actually happening, but it was great to see the small improvements as they made their way towards getting her to become a functional part of society and such!
Then, of course, there came the ”gotta catch the criminals” part of it. That was great, too. I could get excited, wondering what was going to happen. The fact she also could kick ass made Taina all the more likable in an unexpected way. Who doesn’t like a chick that can kick ass? Especially when it was this unexpected! Haha! She really is genuinely likable. Pryce turning his back to the company orders brought a nice smile to my face. Oh, and that exposition? Sitting down with Bunsen and hearing all this? How you mixed in the fact about the previous entry and made it make sense? The fact that the entire story actually made sense? … I LOVE IT! Proved that Bunsen was the genuine article who had done his research for her sake, and made the final scene when she joined him SO MUCH GREATER than it would have been had he not been given that. Not to mention, how EXTREMELY WELL “Abyss”, which I read before this, actually worked as an introduction to this entry! It was very confusing on its own, but like this? Heck, prologues are SUPPOSED to be confusing, so the reader doesn’t start feeling at home before the story starts! And this entry eventually came to tying up the loose ends, EXACTLY in the way a story should eventually explain its prologue! I really, REALLY liked how you set this up!
So, there were a few misses. You seem not to have liked that scene as much as I did, since you COMMENTED ON IT THROUGHOUT THE ENTRY AFTER THAT. Yikes. I wouldn’t even have noticed that was the supposed exposition had you not been doing that. I was just imagining four pages of just paragraphs telling me of things happening around her in her life that was going to totally disconnect us from her. But, it all happened as she heard it. Show, don’t tell, was it? Well, you had Bunsen SHOWING the fruits of his labour! Very much different from just having had the narrator tell us, because now I still felt like I was deeply connected to the main character, because I learned of the things just as she did. What DID disconnect me, was when you strew strange references through the rest of the story. That was really, REALLY weird, but you hardly need me to tell you not to do that, so… XD
Alright, so the reveal about Anyang. I think that was a reveal.
“Real name Anyang. Associate fed up with his bullshit, existed as a pain in my ass for five years, refuses to vanish. FML.”
… Er. That was a reveal that he was Besk, right? But… Anyang wasn’t a lizard, was he? Er. I’m confused. So, that didn’t really work, I think. Had he had an operation, or something?
There was one part I got bored and had to put down the entry for a bit on. It was in that middle part when she just had Tony steal all the equipment and took the Maggie and Al to the festival. Looking at it now, it doesn’t look that difficult, but eh, I was tired after a lot of reading. Putting it down probably made me enjoy the last bit more. Haha.
The part where she left… I didn’t understand it. Alright, so she had continued trying to recover her memories. That, to me, is her choice. While I understand Maggie’s and Al’s anger… … … I suppose I just can’t really enjoy that part. Tony just vanished? What for? Sure, they might have thrown him out or something, but he couldn’t even see her? Wouldn’t take her calls? What for? I assume this is the point where the labour’s supposed to be being cleared, but, in that case, who has Taina been the tool of? The labour needs the character to be used by another character… which I can possibly see that it could be the case, but, it isn’t explained in the entry. Looks to me like this was very much on her own, not her being used by someone. Is this another case of you coming at the labour from an angle that I just can’t see, again? Will I go “OH! So THAT’S what was…!” once again? I don’t know. I’ll leave that to the judges.
But all in all… I really, REALLY liked this entry. The characters were amazingly life-like, I really started to honestly desire that this was going to become- *realization*- ah. That little thing just before the final part… the ones who used her via the labour was Maggie and Al, wasn’t it? But, the ones that they used her as a tool to unintentionally hurt… was herself? No, wait, does that even make sense? I, er, I THINK I’m reaching in the right direction, but I think I’m not entirely grasping it… Egh…
Well. In any case. I liked it. I like what you’re doing. This is amazing. Good job. The little details, like the Ramen-Ya and the police officer who jokingly asked her to marry him, the reference to Hitchhiker’s Guide and more, I love them, the entire piece feels so extremely alive. Well, maybe a bit less towards the end, but you get the point. I really like the thought of the crime-fighting duo of talented detective Bunsen and don’t-bloody-underestimate-her Taina. Not sure if that’s where you were going with it, but I like it. Haha. Gosh.
I also really liked the time-travelling pirates plot. I’m not entirely sure how the guy got caught after it, but eh, maybe that’s another side-plot. It’s the future. Maybe that was someone with a similar face. XD Eh, I’m sidetracked. I liked it, okay? I’ll leave the rest to Terminal. Nicely friggin’ done. Haha.
It's the longest one of yours I can remember off the top of my head
PFFTH. XD
Labour 6, Fool's Dilemma: 1,541 words. (failed) Labour 2, Swordmaster: 3,439 words. (failed) Labour 8, <untitled>: 3,810 words. (failed) Labour 4, The Right Decision: 5,244 words. (failed) Labour 3, Little Guardian: 5,983 words. (passed) Labour 9, Just Take A Stroll: 6,596 words.
... And after that...
Labour 1, The Deaths of Eima Illervin: 9,124 words. (passed (after appeal)) Labour 5, Apocalypse Maiden: 13,820 words. (passed)
And then...
Labour 7, Plutonian: 35,384 words. (passed (with warnings))
Yeeeeeaaaaah. XD
Hm, I'm detecting a pattern. XD
I apologize, but I just couldn't resist addressing that. I'll be responding to your review at the same time as I post yours. I've just run into a slight complication, I'll get to continuing it tomorrow!
Edit: Or maybe I'll wait. Tomorrow, I'll be able to respond to the judgments at the same time.
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