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I don't know how anyone can stand it in here with all the hot air you blow.

@Lord Wraith

All I see is you admitting I am hot.

Ryand'r wouldn't be gender bent. You might be thinking of Komand'r.

@Hound55

Correct, but they expressed interest in gender-bending Starfire the previous page. So was preemptively shutting down other versions of her family being gender-bent.

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Jeeze, someone claimed all of the Titans?

@Dead Cruiser

Yes. I am amazing.

And, sorry to say, but all of Starfire's family, gender-bent or not, would be off-limits.

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I don't know if there's a need for more characters to join in who weren't already previously involved. The point is to wrap this up quickly and efficiently, and introducing more characters into the mix doesn't exactly lead to that. There's probably more than enough participants already involved who can resolve each of the objectives.

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Hillan's already writing one character. Does anyone really want to see him write a second?
I think you've got a chance at competing.

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@Pirouette Hank Pym is already an established character IC. May want to check out Hound's Ted Kord app.

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I honestly have to commend you for stepping up and attempting to take on a role with all previous baggage included.
Not sure if you've seen, but I would check out the accepted Vigilante app by Doc if you haven't already as it'll relate to some of what you're doing.

Also, no pants. Never pants.
_{EDIT: This is me lamenting over the lack of pants. Not celebrating lol.}

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I don't believe this is your first time.

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But uh, I wouldn't want to be competing with a sheet as well written as yours.

@Lord Wraith

Down, boy.

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@Retired
Ooof then my posts might make you mad. Many a English teacher has grilled me on my grammar over the years.

The reading aloud is a good tip though! I actually usually will use the "Read Aloud" button in the review tab of Word when I'm proofreading. (I'm mildly dyslexic so reading for long periods kinda messes me up. So I make the robot read to me lmao.) Though I traditionally do it in like four paragraph chunks and then once at the end. Doing it after every paragraph like you suggested is probably a good idea though!

@Techne

Doing it all at once will help you catch any issues in flow. You'll more easily recognize unnatural breaks or where breaks are needed, awkward diction and odd syntax choices, etc. I can also recommend using Grammarly if you don't already. A free extension for Chrome is out there.

As it is, though, I don't see anything really major about your app. So I wouldn't be nervous. Looks good. Like I said, everything is just minor little things that additional proofreading methods can catch.

And as others can tell you, I've given this same spiel to many here. Myself included.

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Where's my copypasta...

@Lord Wraith

Hopefully on the copystove...

_{That one's for Byrd. Enjoy.}

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You prefer Grammar Nationalist.

@Hillan

I mean, I prefer Grammar God, but...