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Done and the new CS with the edits has been posted in the post with the CS. Anything I missed?@Zarkun

All good! Our corporal is approved. 

@Gcold While it's on my mind, the age is eight years after he got promoted. He's turned down a few promotion offers. Should I include that?@Zarkun

The current version of Scarlet Moons has only been around for six years, which means Ren would have served two years as a private, and four years after as corporal. I would lower his age by four.

Are we blind? Deploy the roleplay!

Good stuff, @Zarkun. Ren is an intersting character, with a detailed childhood that explains his motivation in the galaxy. There's a few things I'd like you to clarify before he's approved.

Ren's age is 42, but his background says he's served for two years since the age of 32, making him 34. 34 seems like the more resonable one here.
Appearance needs more details. Ren seems like a relatively big guy. How does he take advantage of his size? And how does he maneuver in those tight quarters?
I couldn't find MA65 carbine or T-70 pistol in SW databases. Custom equipment is fine, but it'd be better if you change one of these blasters to a canon one, and explain how Ren obtained his custom one.
How fluent is Ren at Shyriiwook and Dosh? And how did he reach these levels of fluency?
Being a poor ranged fighter is a good balancing weakness. What are the causes of this, though? Perhaps nearsightedness from growing up in poorly lit slums? Maybe his hands get twichy from previous injuries? Or a fear of open spaces from living exclusively in tightly packed areas?


I'm enjoying what I see so far! Let's see what @Zoey White has to say.

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@Gcold Filled out the rest of my sheet, call it a first draft. I shall await your feedback eagerly.@Blitzy

Very nice! Fibu is a well-crafted character hitting all the right notes (and I'm seeing a bit of Desmond Doss in him ). His background, personality and capabilities play nicely with each other, and his inventory has a lot of details. The only thing I would add is some more motivation; what horrific act did Fibu witness the Empire commit?

As for his callsign, the generic "Doc" works just fine. Something like "Buzzer" or "Plug", referencing his sound sensitivity and less-than-spectacular music talents, are also fitting choices.

That's all from me. Let's see if @Zoey White has anything to say.

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