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The first character is here! Let's see if you guys like it!

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The first character is here! Let's see if you guys like it!



So a few things, not outright denying you but take these into consideration:

- I'm looking for around 6-8 sentences minimum for each description area. And if you don't want to go that route, put stuff into bullet points but put a little more effort into it. Your image says more about what your character looks like, but I get the fact he's someone who wants to be Sun Wukong.

- Monkey Tail wouldn't be classified as an ability. That'd be like saying a character who's avatar is a werewolf has the [Claws and Teeth] ability. Abilities are more so like [Monkey King] - Speedy is able to create numerous clones of himself that have their own AI and stats based on his own. These clones can do [x] [y] and [z], when they [x] the clone becomes a stone statue and begins to do area damage around its location. When they [y] the clone disappears for short period of time and is granted increased movement speed. [z] is always active and allows the clones to return to Speedy granting a small portion of health back to him.

- The three things I put in the inventory were just nonsensical place holders, you should have things in your inventory that make sense for your character.
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Changed the appearance part, added some stuff to multiple parts and changed 'Monkey Tail' to 'Monkey Dash' with a new effect. I like the items as they are, since they already fit his idea, although I'm thinking about adding some kind of range weapon to go with his high dexterity.

Also, it's not that he wants to be like Sun Wukong, it's just the first faceclaim that popped to mind since I wanted him to have a monkey-like avatar to go alongside his parkour-mindset.
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/throwinginteresttoseehowitgoes
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Hidden 6 yrs ago Post by CavnderOHeart
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I'm interested in this.

I Am known for playing the Villain, do you need a Villain to help catch NERO?
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You can apply with a character sheet, and we can take it from there.
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How far is the VR aspect going for this? If I ate food in Haven, would I taste it? Would I feel full even? Do people need to pee in Haven? Are they anatomically correct, so to speak? Do they switch in and out without any issue, or is there a sophisticated getup to enter Haven?
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I hate using SAO as a reference point, but a Nerve Gear is probably the closest representation I could offer. But it doesn't effect your physical body, so you taste the food yes- but no you won't become full. You can pull the headset off at any time by going into the UI and setting yourself as AFK which will send you to a DOS Dashboard type thing, and as for setup. If you have a swivel chair and the VR headset, pop it on hit the switch and sit down.

Thank you for asking constructive questions!
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Cru Zaoloni


AGE:

APPEARANCE:
A Pale as selenite 6 foot six inches skinny twenty year old man with type 1b ash coloured hairand lime skin coloured eyes. Cru has his entire left arm tattooed with Chinese Zodiac symbols and the right with Westeren Zodiac symbols. His legs are hairless and tattooed; which is completely covered in rubix cubes and fish hooks. Cru has a long, tendril-like tongue which he paid for through body modification and has reading glasses with purple tinted lenses for a astehtic effect. Cru Zaoloni also has a Swan winged Katana from this belly to his torso; surrounding it is his one Nine of Cups reversed tarot card.

PERSONALITY
A few paragraphs or bullet points on your characters personality traits, what drives him or her, and what gets on their nerves.
Cru has been a Dreamer in terms of music every since he was taken to a Concert after middel school graduation. He had began to daydream of himself as the vocalist of a story-metal band and put his dreams into reality by practicing, visulizing and creating lyrics. Throughout his life Cru had Eight notebooks from page one to the back cover filled with lyrics now as a improved artist MR. Zaoloni had become a member of the well known-yet underground-band 'Grey Parish Lures Deres.' A dream come true. Hard.

Aside from his realized dream, talents, presistence, and hard work Cru had shit that gets under his skin. You, see his drive is music and what truly gets him as mad as a rageaholic is writer's block and slowness. For example a slow day is very upsetting to him and so is suffering from writer`s block. When Mr. Zaoloni's creative juices have evaporated He has to retreat until he can create art; characters and forces.

Another note from Cru is that he is a power-seeker Mr. Zaoloni wants to seek out power, and the powerful in this world and test it. Even if the power is non-physical-if its a form of energy (like mana)-he wants to know its limits and possibilities. Mr. Zaoloni has a urge to understand the power in things and people to create his music and his next tattoos.

A Creative thinker for a lyricist and vocalist is what has made `Grey Parish Lures Deres` so successful! Cru is the butter to his band's bread the eye to their apple. He uses the education from power =-either through winning, losing of gaining knowledge-to create albums, tatoos, and to roleplay. All of his searches result in original, villains and stories for the whole world to experience. Cru Zaolini's motto is: "Creativity is the lockpick".
BACKGROUND:
Your character's life and experience with the game, possibly the history of their talents or occupation. You are free to organize this however you want; whether that is with bullet points or elaborate paragraphs is up to you.
Haven. Haven! Haven!
A true artist takes a fun oppertunity like the one he had when the band bought a system to play Haven on and use it to send their talents out to the whole world. (They are unsigned). Cru, Xphnx, Larry, and Springer have used Haven to live lives as G.P.L.D. for the music, for the fans, and in hopes of finding a Recording Label Company. Each member created a O.C. by using their experience as muscians and their faveorite class subject to mold and hatch the perfect self-inserts! Haven has truly been the whole band's passtime and a addition to their namesake of capturing the loveable, and warm\fuzzy and making them into a product of their story metal.

TALENTS AND SKILLS:
*His Own Fighting Style (Skill)
*Music (talent)
*Cooking (Skill)
Villain Creation (Talent)

Cru Zaoloni



STATS: On a scale of 1-6; 1 being a fresh newbie, and 6 being endgame level stats.
STR: ▰▱▱▱▱▱
STA: ▰▱▱▱▱▱
DEX: ▰▱▱▱▱▱
INT: ▰▱▱▱▱▱
WIS: ▰▱▱▱▱▱
LUC: ▰▱▱▱▱▱

ABILITIES
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Ability: Painbow.
Description: A. That functions as a bow with eighth notes as the arrows the arrows do not function as regular arrows they-once airborn-transsform into fist-fighters that are controlled by Cru's singing and screaming voice they become explosive via touch when he screams and finally transfrom into a white vortex that spits out his Inventory Items. Which are used for battel and busniess..
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INVENTORY:
* SongBook.
* Plastic Bottel of Fruit Blends.
* Colored Pencils.

NOTABLE FEATURES: To all future teammates; Band Preformences happen in game as well as out game so he will certainly be offline and unavailable when the band has a gig to attend.
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Refer to my response to Nightmare's sheet when it comes to needing to put more effort into the descriptions. But additionally to that:
- Several grammar errors, and while I'm not an English Major- there's a surplus of spelling and sentence structure errors that are unacceptable. I don't mean to be crass, but this is outright unacceptable, sorry friend, but unless you refine the living hell out of that thing I cannot grace that thing with any sort of approval.
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While we're on the topic of characters, I was thinking of a Dieselpunk inspired character. Thoughts on that?
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Completely viable, just make sure his mechanics make sense to the fantasy and you'll be good. I'm working on an NPC character sheet so there's a little less confusion on what's doable and what isn't.
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Throwing in my interest!
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Working on a character idea. I'll post it if it comes to fruition.
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Can you tell me what the grammatical errors are?

I can't figure them out on my own.
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Patricia Losla




AGE:
25

APPEARANCE:
Patricia is a tall, raven haired, heart-throb who enjoys to come home from her cubicle locked job and play video games. On weekends she uses up her social battery by going to the gym and working out to maintain her figure, or rather to prevent herself from developing a "gamer bod" with the amount of microwave food this busybody consumes. Years of being a tech-savvy lady and straining her eyes on a computer screen has damaged the woman's vision to the point where she's required to wear some rather thick glasses in order to see through the day-to-day. Though she enjoys the red-framed lenses that add to her nerdy look, she embraces the geeky side of herself. Patricia can also be found wearing a motorcycle jacket throughout the day as she rides one to and from work everyday and it's evolved to just become part of her wardrobe. When she's able to decompress in the comfort of her two bedroom apartment, the girl strips down to some small men's boxer shorts and a loose tank top, throws her hair up in a short ponytail, and slides her IRIS on to play some Haven. Lastly, she's obsessed with rabbits and has a plethora of bunny-themed attire.

PERSONALITY
(+) Friendly
(+) Assertive
(+) Confident
(+) Driven
(+) Goal Oriented
(-) Overly Ambitious
(-) Pushy
(-) Aloof
(-) Sensitive
(-) Short-Tempered


BACKGROUND:
Your character's life and experience with the game, possibly the history of their talents or occupation. You are free to organize this however you want; whether that is with bullet points or elaborate paragraphs is up to you.

TALENTS AND SKILLS:
Any additional talents your character may have, in or outside of the game. This ranges from, being able to throw three-pointers really well- to being a programming prodigy.

Peter




STATS:
STR: ▰▰▱▱▱▱
STA: ▰▰▰▱▱▱
DEX: ▰▰▰▰▱▱
INT: ▰▰▰▰▱▱
WIS: ▰▰▱▱▱▱
LUC: ▰▰▰▰▱▱

ABILITIES

[Spur of the Moment]
◇ This ability greatly increases the player's speed when first entering combat. During this abilities activation, Peter is able to cast spells from his spellbook without speaking it's voice command thus allowing it to be cast instantly. This effect can be used five times in succession before the speed effect will begin to diminish greatly over time until the player return to standard movement speed. This effect can be used while mounted, however once the fifth spell is cast, you will be dismounted and return to grounded combat.

[Spellsword]
◇ The Spellsword ability allows the players melee weapon to be combined with a smaller spellbook dismissing the need to swap between the two weapons for combat that uses both melee and spell damage. Proficient users of this ability can simultaneously cast spells and use melee combat to create long, high-damage combos. The spellsword is limited to the spells learned within the spellbook, resulting in most players whom use this ability to begin their journey as a mage to accumulate spells beforehand.

[Rabbit's Foot]
You've been gifted with the Lucky Rabbit's Foot! This rare ability grants the player a large increase to LUC and allows you to speak to the Fera Merchant in Fera Village for their armor set. Acquiring this ability is linked to the Rabbit race, though very-very few players have gotten a quest to gain this ability while being on of countless others.

INVENTORY:
* Sword of Armatyle
* Greater Healing Potion x2
* Home Crystal


NOTABLE FEATURES: Aspects of your character that were not covered above. This includes something like a theme or motif the character embodies, a guild they are a part of, important events in the games history they were a part of.

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@Anders Do you mind if I post (or PM you) just the abilities? I'd like to see if I'm going in the right direction with them and I'm not too sure on some of the limits (like how often it would be proper for something to activate and similar). Also, how many abilities is it even alright to have? And I hope you don't mind having content borrowed from a bit, because I've been thinking about a melee-magic combination too, and that NPC serves as a nice template for some abilities.
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Absolutely, send me a PM. And there’s bound to be similar characters so don’t stress it too much.
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I'm interested in this but I'm also a bit busy. I'll see if I can get a sheet up but I might not be able to make it before the ooc is up, if at all. Just a heads up.
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Very interested!
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