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Seeing how tall Ashna is, I decided to compile a list of other tall boys, girls and snow demons of FoC. Note that some are my personal speculation; do correct me if I'm getting something wrong.

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  • Hakkeam (Kamal general, hostile NPC) - ~2.8m (armored)
  • Dzuungits (Kamal knight, hostile NPC) - ~2.6m (armored)
  • Relmyna Vibato (Chapter 1; werewolf form, fully standing) - ~2.4m
  • Tennant Ibnazh (chapter 1) - ~2.1m
  • Keegan, Jorwen Red-Bear (chapter 1) - ~2m
  • Sadri, Dael - 1.95-2m
  • Solveig (chapter 1) - ~1.9m
  • Ashna, Leif, Rhasha'Dar (chapter 1) - 1.85-1.9m
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And here it is, my response to the writing prompt! Hopefully it's good, and hopefully there aren't too many gramatical errors.


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Alright, @Stormflyx, looks like you've taken Dervs' advice to heart and definitely fleshed out the character better. With that said, there are still some areas to expand on.


  • Add a note on why she calls herself the Colossus (to honor her adoptive father, because of her larger than average stature etc.)
  • Being an important figure to Ashna, Bjogar's story is missing at parts. Elaboration on how his relationship with Ashna shifted from master/slave to adoptive father/daughter over the years would be nice. Also, Bjogar being a former sailor was not apparent until the second last paragraph; some hints earlier in the background will make this less jarring.
  • Ashna's interest in reading and her forgetfulness is scarcely mentioned in her background. Please explain how these traits came to be.
  • Why did your character choose Solitude and the mercenary company? I assume it is because she heard Windhelm has been occupied by Kamals and Morrowind, and Dawnstar is too chaotic at the moment. Add some of her rationale at the end of her bio.
  • How much of her bandit past would she disclose to the mercenary commanders? Revealing more shows off her skill set better, but may be treated with suspicion. The choice is up you; how much Ashna shares of her experiences may affect her initial assignment as either a frontline fighter or a laborer.
  • She needs marksman skill in order to throw axes effectively. I would make room for novice marksman at the very least (apprentice or adept may work better).


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I've made the changes requested :) I was waiting to hear anything from Peik, but I'll chuck this up now and wait for that feedback :)
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@Stormflyx



Ashna is in, congrats!
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<Snipped quote by Gcold>

Thanks!

I've made the changes requested :) I was waiting to hear anything from Peik, but I'll chuck this up now and wait for that feedback :)


Frankly Cold's critique is thorough enough that it makes me feel as if anything I say would be nitpicking.
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I decided to take a shot at the prompt.


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So I am now catching up with everyone's posts and I'm loving them!
I'm looking for someone in Solitude to meet with Alim. This Alim is a bit different than his alternate universe self from Vengeance. A little more adventurer and swordsman, a little less thief and casanova.

Dax will be collabing with Tslee. (Best Buddies)
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So I am now catching up with everyone's posts and I'm loving them!
I'm looking for someone in Solitude to meet with Alim. This Alim is a bit different than his alternate universe self from Vengeance. A little more adventurer and swordsman, a little less thief and casanova.

Dax will be collabing with Tslee. (Best Buddies)


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Discord Hall of Fame™ episode 2.

The echoes of @Stormflyx



@POOHEAD189's got a bone to pick.



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This is my favorite @Gcold
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@Peik I'm not entirely sure Sadri and Samuel L. Jackson aren't the same person. I mean, have you ever seen them in the same *EXPLETIVE* room?
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@Peik I'm not entirely sure Sadri and Samuel L. Jackson aren't the same person. I mean, have you ever seen them in the same *EXPLETIVE* room?


"Say s'wit again, I dare you! I DOUBLE-GUAR dare you [EXPLETIVE], say s'wit one more Gods [EXPLETIVE] time!"
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@Peik I'm not entirely sure Sadri and Samuel L. Jackson aren't the same person. I mean, have you ever seen them in the same *EXPLETIVE* room?


"Enough is enough! I have had it with these motherfuckin' Kamals on this motherfuckin' plane!"

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Decide what your character will do. There are a few courses of actions already suggested, and you also try whatever you can think of. You can also collab to perform complex maneuvers with multiple characters, but please don't proceed until everyone involved are decided. We'll check character skill/attributes after that, roll dice (if necessary) and give you guys the results.

Some suggested actions:
  • Distract the undead werewolf
  • Attacking the werewolf (only viable with multiple characters)
  • Fight dreughs
  • Climbing a chain
  • Retrieve explosive jellyfish from the lagoon
  • Hang back to repair ship/detach chains/heal wounded
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I'll start.
  • Keegan will be battling dreughs on Kyne's Tear.
  • Ariane will enlist Maj's help in order to grab jellyfishes.
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Piper will help in keeping the werewolf distracted, 'cause she THICC...with plate armor.

Sagax is gonna summon his inner Kenway and climb those fuckin' chains and board that bitch, bruh.
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Tsleeixth will also try and climb the chains, bring the fight to those bastards.
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Niernen will bring the heat with a Flame Atronach and some good old-fashioned fireballs against the undead werewolf. Narzul will defend her against the dreughs. I don't know if it's relevant for the rolls but he has extensive experience fighting them as per his history ("commanded the initial defense against the Dreugh Invasion of 4E195").
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