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Yu Yu Hakusho, YOU CAN SMILE! | Discord Link: discord.gg/pSBtwP


Plot Details |
  • It's been 30 years since Yusuke Urameshi's last appearance in the anime.
  • There will be 5 separate spots for Spirit Detective apprentices and 2 more for potential apprentices (not including my own).
  • An older Yusuke Urameshi has developed an agency of apprentice Spirit Detectives under his tutelage.
  • The Demon World is under the fledgling rule of Shura (Yomi's son).
  • Under his rule a spike in demon activity in the human world has begun to appear
  • Ultimately its up to us to discover and put a stop to these demonic interlopers.


OOC Details |
  • You may play as a Human, Demon, Psychic, or Spirit (long as your character could benefit from the team dynamic)
  • Eventually we will be operating out of the Demon World and making visits to Koenma in the Spirit World. (Ahh, diversity.)
  • Your character can be awesome but allow room for a lot of growth. (C Class max.)
  • We are all residences of the same city, either brought there by chance, moved there, or natives.
  • If you wish to have some connection to one of the main cast there are a few rules (#1. You cannot force relations between two main-characters, pick one and be happy. #2 You will control that NPC and be expected to interact with me and the others regarding said NPC. Also your activity will need to be consistent. #3 Your history needs to be relative to their persona and past. Don't make Hiei some wonderful father figure or Kuwabara some elegant genius. Be true to the characters as we know 'em. #4 Yusuke is off-limits, I have plans for him and his family.)
  • Respect your fellow role players and my decisions.
  • Follow the established rules of RoleplayerGuild.
  • Remember, I asked for collaborators. I don't expect to run this thing entirely on my own, I encourage the usage of NPCs and coming to me to talk about ideas for the current Arc that you may have. Share your experiences with running your own RPs with me, if you see me about to make a crucial mistake, let me know.
  • I will wait at most 3 days before moving on with the plot.


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Reposting this.

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@Matador



Reposting this.

Anything in red are either clarifications that I need smoothen out or glaring issues. Check your quoted CS for the review.

My main advice would be to make everything mash together better.
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Anything in red are either clarifications that I need smoothen out or glaring issues. Check your quoted CS for the review.

My main advice would be to make everything mash together better.


Aye, aye captain.

Edit: Oh, and to clarify, I don't think sticking to yourself makes you weird. But that's just how people can perceive you if you're too quiet, at least when you're still stuck in school. I'd know from talking to quiet guys who get a bad rap for not saying much but turn out to be good people when you actually get to know them.

Re-Edit: Redid the history from the ground up and fixed some parts of the sheet.



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Hello, I'm interested. My character concept is the least-favorite child of a Zaibatsu family, who is in fact half-dragon. I plan to theme the majority of her abilities around dragons being symbols of power and royalty, as the character herself is something of a "princess." Do you think this could work?
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Here's what I've got:

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I was out of it today, so I couldn't get to work on my character. Hopefully tomorrow will be a better day.
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Here's the draft I created, I just got to tweak on the history quite a bit and flesh out some other details

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@Matador
Your character is accepted. You may place him in the char-tab.

@Dead Cruiser
As long as her heritage is Demonic in nature I suppose its doable. If say she had something akin to Yusuke's deal, how 44 generations back his paternal ancestor was a Demon than its certainly possible. Dragons aren't mentioned to exist but I'm sure there were Demons that greatly resembled them.

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Take your time.

@Argonaut@HeroicSociopath
Good to see you guys putting in work. Let me know when you're ready to be reviewed in full.

Here's what I've got:


I have no real issues with your CS. Fix those little things and let me know when you're ready to be checked again.
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Hidden 6 yrs ago 6 yrs ago Post by Cleverbird
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Hope this is okay! I know nothing about the setting this takes place in, but I do like the sound of it!



EDIT: Oh snap this thread got active in the time it took me to write this!
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Make the corrections and let me know when you're ready to be checked again. Overall It was a simple but fantastic CS.
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@RennyThe only dragon that is mentioned is the Dragon of the Darkness Flame, which isn't really specified as a demon or a spirit.

Either way I was planning for her mother to have been a dragon spirit, as they're generally more benevolent in Eastern myth.
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@Renny all set!
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@Dead Cruiser Haha, The Dragon of Darkness Flame is something of a force of nature and offensive attack. While its nowhere in the canon, I can see your concept being plausible, so I'll allow it.

My only recourse for this is that you have it be obscure and something of a guarded secret, almost as if its heresy. In the world of Yu Yu Hakusho, there aren't really too many full fledge families of Demons or Spirits just living in the Human World. Spirit World and King Enma keeps a very tight noose around anything deemed unnatural. The occasional half-demon or half-spirit is okay but they don't usually lay down roots in the Human World, 'cause full-fledge Demons feed on humans and Spirits are often incorporeal if not using some Spirit Tool or being granted permission by the King.

In this situation, I'll allow it on the grounds that your Dragon lineage is ...

  • 1. Spirit Based or originating from the Spirit World (you don't have to flesh the mother's backstory out, long as there is a reason for her being in Human World)
  • 2. Under the supervision and direction of King Enma (for no Spirit stands above King Enma in this verse.)
  • 3. And if not under the supervision of King Enma is prepared to be criminals (either on the run or hidden) in the eyes of Spirit World. Hence being potential targets for Yusuke's new apprentices. Might make for a interesting dynamic later on lol.


Hope this is okay! I know nothing about the setting this takes place in, but I do like the sound of it!



EDIT: Oh snap this thread got active in the time it took me to write this!


Regarding your history. Gods aren't really a thing in this verse. While its possible for a strong spirit directed by King Enma centuries or millenniums ago to be viewed as a God by humans, there technically aren't Gods here. The closest God we have is King Enma, and as you can tell he's viewed simply as a very strong, capable entity - hence his title of King.

For instance, its canon that humans conceived the idea of Angels from seeing Demons encapsulated in Sacred Energy (before they were snared in the Kekkai Barrier).

So while your history is certainly doable, I would need for you to make it clear that Kiwa is not a God but a Spirit perceived as one. Other than that I absolutely enjoyed reading your CS.


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Alright, fixed it up for you. Hopefully it's good enough:

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@Blondie You're good to go, Blondie. Put him in the char-tab.

@Raging Fenrir Likewise, Raging, throw Ayame into char-tab. Your theme was awesome by the way.
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Nice to see a GM giving such detailed feedback! I've made the changes. And yes, the description of the swords is merely folklore, though I imagine weapons used by spirit-creatures arent exactly normal, are they?.

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