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@Zaphander

His resistance and the second option for his phone (a hero agency, or the school) are ok. However, I'm sorry, but I can't accept your quirk if he doesn't have at least a time limit for how long he can keep it active. Everything is mostly alright, but a transformation quirk should always have a maximum time limit that is usually based on either a character's stamina, like Eijiro and Tetsutetsu, or by how long they can use it without gimping themselves because of the inherent disadvantages their quirks bring about (like becoming unable to breath among other things, like Mirio).

Learning to expand the limits of a transformation is usually the biggest improvement a character that has one of them can achieve. By having no time limit/disadvantages for the transformation at all, you are negating any chances of this happening.

@Ruler Inc

Your character is basically ok with me. Just like let me one thing. How much can she use her quirk at once? Like everyone else, she needs some kind of limit for how long/how many times she can do it. I'm just asking for comparison's sake anyway, since this will set up a point from which to work your character's training.

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Apologies, but I'm going to have to reject you. Your CS shows so little lack of care that I can't even consider accepting an application from you even if you redo it from zero.

If you still want to try again, you can do so and appeal to @TheWindel and @SimpleWriter. My opinion likely won't change.
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@KoL At the moment I'd say she can do it to one fruit at a time since there's no practical reason for her to be able to apply the effects to multiple fruit.
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Well, that's ok with me. I think you can move to the CS tab already.
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PS: Actually, I realized something else while looking over your CS again. You can't use your quirk with normal items/clothing. No one in the entire MHA universe can, that's why Hero/Villain gear exists. I'll have to ask that you take that part out of his Quirk's description since it's not consistent with the rest of the whole series.

Along with choosing what other kind of limit you would like to put on your character's quirk to limit it's duration. Either a stamina one (so that he can do it only for a maximum amount of time before getting exhausted, which will vary depending on the circumstances so it's better to already mention how much he can endure under maximum exertion), or a limit based on how much he can hold his breath since he won't be able to breath while being rock. Or any other kind of limit you can think of, as long as he can't "sit on the bottom of the ocean forever with transformed".

He needs a limit, is what I'm saying.
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@KoL

I made edits to his quirk to his explain his drawbacks more. I choose a stamina limit: if he just transforms and doesn't try to make himself move he could last about 30 minutes before his body gets too sore to maintain his boulder form. Trying to move around on his own while in boulder form also costs a lot of stamina, though if he is in a smaller form like a pebble or rock it doesn't take as much energy. If someone moves him around or if he transforms on a slope so he rolls down naturally also doesn't consume much stamina since he's not trying to make himself move, he's just letting the momentum carry him. Peter is still on a time limit even during these moments though. He still can't transform out of boulder form while he's moving though whether he means to or not, so using momentum to move around can be a double-edge sword if he's rolling towards something he doesn't want to hit.
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@Zaphander
And now he's fine on my end as well.
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@Zaphander You can go ahead and post him in the CS Tab Now.
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Awesome can't wait to start playing.
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So sorry this took so long. The week just kinda escaped from me. Here's Blair for review

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I'd just like to point out you used "Have" instead of "Half" for your quirk description.
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@Lonewolf685 Have is correct. But I’ll change up the syntax to be more clear :)
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@McFazzer Accepted from me. Pretty sure KoL and Windel will too, but I still have to mention waiting on them. :P
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@McFazzer

You're ok with me as well. Just wait for the shark now.
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Sorry I took so long, some stuff came up, but here's my CS:

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@McFazzer

Fine by me. Put her in the Character Tab.

@LuckyBlackCat

Also fine by me. Wait for the other GMs' opinion.
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@LuckyBlackCat Fine with me. :P Poor Freya.
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You're ok with me as well.
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@SimpleWriter @TheWindel @KoL Yay, thanks! I'll move her over to the character tab.
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I think we have at least ten students so far. Is there going to be twenty students/characters for a full class?
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