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Welcome to Chronicles of Minadra, a High-Fantasy RP set in the world of ‘Minadra’. In this RP you will take on the role of an adventurer in a party put together to recover an ancient treasure, though this will turn into something more epic, with the fate of all of Minadra in your hands…

Because we want to craft an excellent experience for you, there is quite a bit of Lore here, however, for the purposes of creating a character app, reading the ‘Primordial History’ then looking at the information about the race you want to app for will give you enough information to get started.

I’d also highly recommend you join our Discord so we can discuss character concepts!

Finally, there is no 'cap' on characters in the thread and you are welcome to join, even after launch.



The Grey Mountains, near the City of Ardbenn Solas
Year 4017 of the Age of Steel, three months ago...

It was the rockfall that first caught Aderynel’s attention. It was nothing too unusual in these parts, a natural part of the process of snow falling, melting, then falling again. This rockfall was no different, though perhaps it had been covered by snow the last time she had flown this way.

It was then that she noticed the door. Ancient, wooden with bronze hinges weathered green by decades, or perhaps centuries of neglect. It was tall, very tall, 20 or more feet from the bottom to the top. It lay atop the fallen stones like a sled on a snowdrift.

Curious.

Aderynel circled the valley where the rockfall lay, letting herself slowly drift down on her black wings, flapping slightly to slow her descent as she dropped to her feet alongside the door. As she folded her wings behind her back, she studied the door with curious blue eyes. Now she was closer, the wood looked truly ancient, dark, weathered and shrunken. She stepped forward, placing a hand on the edge of the door as wind whipped at the edges of her fur lined tunic, tugging at the pins that held her amber-coloured hair back in a tidy bun for flight.

Where have you come from?

She glanced up, eyes tracing the route of the rockfall and, there, hidden below an overhang that would not have been visible to one of the winged Sylpharim who inhabited these hills, hung the door’s twin and, just to the right, like a smile with a missing tooth, an opening into the mountainside.

The Sylpharim were naturally curious creatures and Aderynel was no exception to the rule. The gap cried out to be explored. It would have been a steep climb for one of the other races, barely manageable, but for Aderynel it was little trouble. She spread her wings, beating them to aid her as she scrambled up the slope, coming to rest, a couple of minutes later, on a small jutting ledge in front of the door.
She paused, to catch her breath, staring into the dark as she let her eyes grow accustomed to the dark interior.

If only I had a torch.

There were forms in the darkness. Tall, hulking, massive stone forms. Cautiously, Aderynel stepped across the threshold, cocking her head to one side as she listened for anything that might be a threat, though all she heard was the crunch of her boots in the ancient dust. The forms were statues, massive statues, 18, 20 feet tall. Huge, bearded figures with long limbs and wiry muscles chiselled from stone.
She paused, staring up at one. The doorway into the cliffside was the sort of place that might have been built by the dwarves, possibly at the start of the age before they left these mountains, but the figures were too big, too elongated for the squat little dungeon dwellers.
She stepped forward to the nearest statue, the one most clearly illuminated by the sun creeping in through the fallen door. At the feet of the gigantic figure was an inscription. She ran a hand across it, feeling the edge of the huge letters. It was a script she didn’t understand, huge angular letters, cracked into the surface of the stone with monumentally sized chisels. There was something about them that seemed to speak directly from the elements, as if the earth itself were trying to communicate with her.

Aderynel looked up at the statue again.

Could it be?

Once the thought dawned on her it became clear what she was looking at. Far from an ancient dwarf hold, she was gazing up at the weathered features of some ancient Turakindi… one of the giants of the Silver Age. Who knew what ancient treasures lay deeper in the mountain?
A shuffling noise behind her drew Aderynel out of her reverie with a heart-lurching jolt.

She spun, hand reaching for the seax at her belt. There were shapes in the darkness, small, hunched shapes, moving, circling. She drew the long knife, cautiously stepping back towards the entrance. There were murmurs, a snarl as the creatures realised they had been spotted.
They wore little more than scraps to cover their pallid, wretched bodies, crabby hands clutching crude spears. Heart racing, Aderynel continued to step back towards the doorway.

She heard the shuffle behind her and reacted instinctively, spinning and slashing at the little troglodyte as it reached for her. There was a splash of blood and a squeal of pain and in the corner of her eye she saw the others surge forward. Throwing caution to the wind she spun, flapping her wings as she launched herself clumsily towards the doorway.

She felt a hand claw at her leg, trying to drag her back, but they couldn’t find purchase and she tore from their grip, tucking her wings in as she sped through the doorway like an arrow.

She lost control as she did, yelping as she tumbled down the slope in a small avalanche of loose dust and rocks to come to rest atop the huge wooden door that had first caught her attention. She groaned, rolling over onto her back as she searched for where she had dropped her seax in her fall. In the doorway a good dozen troglodytes stood hooting and waving their primitive weapons at her though they were reluctant to advance from their dark lair, out into the daylight.

“Little bastards,” Aderynel growled, drawing herself up to a sitting position as she dusted herself off, grimacing at the grazes on the palms of her hands.

Clearly she wasn’t going to be exploring this place on her own. She’d need to come back with a torch, with some proper weapons and with a party. She groaned, drawing herself up to her feet as she spotted her seax in the dirt. She reached for it, sheathing it as the troglodytes slunk back into the old Turakindi ruins.

For a moment she considered continuing her journey to Ardbenn Solas, but it was only a moment. Despite the wings that made most humans in these parts assume she was from Ardbenn Solas, Aderynel was different, one of the Northern Sylpharim. The Southern Sylpharim tended to keep to themselves in their mountain towns and villages, though in the North the Sylpharim lived closely with humans, sharing culture, songs and a language. Humans had strengths Sylpharim did not. They were stronger for a start and didn’t have a huge pair of fragile wings which, in a place like the Turakindi ruins she had just entered, were likely to be a hindrance, more than a help.

It wasn’t like the local Sylpharim had any claim of ownership of the ruins. She paused, looking skyward, then with a kick and a flap of her wings, launched herself upwards from the valley floor, making for the city of Ealdormuda where, doubtless, she would find some people willing to risk the journey to the mountains in search of gold, glory, artifacts or ancient knowledge…

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Name: Leofric Aelwinovich syn Otric (The Shieldbearer Leofric, son of Aelwin) aka Leoka
Species: Human
Race/Nationality: Eahamingas
Gender: Male
Age: 39
Languages: Northern Jugkraian(native), Arventian(fluent, heavy Jugkraian accent), Eahamingan(clumsy, though his accent is less pronounced), Sidfirian(broken monastic teachings)
Appearance: Leofric stands around 6’2” with broad shoulders and arms, with a modest if athletic physique. He’s most notable for his long, slightly curled blonde hair and blue eyes.
Personal Effects: Travel kit - including an axe used mostly for firewood, battle worn mail hauberk, splinted greaves, vambraces and gloves, he’s never without a long, sharp dagger. Weathered tunic, hose, furs for cold weather. A fine, but worn travel cloak, with faded religious order heraldry. His most notable possessions are a fine spatha style sword, custom made with an slightly longer grip, and stiffer, more tapered point for thrusting. And his mule, Zapas.


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Role: Swordmaster/Shield-bearer
Backstory:


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@Tesserach With Leofric, we were wondering why he was recruited as a six year old? It's also from a country quite a long way from where the order is doing its thing. Was it you were intending he went to work as a page for an Order Knight? I'm guessing it's that... but just wanted to clarify!
Other than that the app is fine.

@PrinceAlexus App looks fine, and I trust you as a writer but it would be nice to chuck in a bit more backstory if you can think of some? It would be cool to hear a bit more about the Scalefolk, how their lives are and some significant events in Vash's life.

@Nach looks grand overall. If you want to add something about why they're here in Eohamingas, rather than in the North, that would be cool.

@Pragia12 Looks fine I guess - I'll accept it :P
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@Tesserach With Leofric, we were wondering why he was recruited as a six year old? It's also from a country quite a long way from where the order is doing its thing. Was it you were intending he went to work as a page for an Order Knight? I'm guessing it's that... but just wanted to clarify!
Other than that the app is fine.

@PrinceAlexus App looks fine, and I trust you as a writer but it would be nice to chuck in a bit more backstory if you can think of some? It would be cool to hear a bit more about the Scalefolk, how their lives are and some significant events in Vash's life.

@Nach looks grand overall. If you want to add something about why they're here in Eohamingas, rather than in the North, that would be cool.

@Pragia12 Looks fine I guess - I'll accept it :P


I can expand it sure
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@Tesserach With Leofric, we were wondering why he was recruited as a six year old? It's also from a country quite a long way from where the order is doing its thing. Was it you were intending he went to work as a page for an Order Knight? I'm guessing it's that... but just wanted to clarify!
Other than that the app is fine.


I didn't expand on the politics of it, but he was picked up by a band of exiles going around drumming up support all over for their order's return north. He was part of the cash for tots program - sold into what his dirtfarmer parents were told would be a better life.

Page work with order knights was the initial implication, yes.

The exiles basically spend a few years trying to fleece support before meeting up with the rest of their surviving old gang and went north for one last big hurrah. The journey sets up 1) Why he's here and 2) That this sword maniac did train with guys that were picked up all over the world before he spent 20 years at war.
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@enmuni@Theyra These both look great!

@PrinceAlexus Could you please weave in some character traits/motivations into the backstory to give us an idea of what this guy is like? Otherwise its fine.

@Tesserach From the Co-OP discussion the 'cash-for-tots' stuff feels like its from a more cynical world rather than a mythic heroic fantasy we're leaning into. If there's an understanding both ICly and OOCly that going to serve with the Orders leads to a better life and the payment to the family is to recompense them for the lost labour then we're okay with it.

We are breaking with the modern George R R Martin tradition of a crapsack fantasy world and going back to the Old Master!
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@Tesserach From the Co-OP discussion the 'cash-for-tots' stuff feels like its from a more cynical world rather than a mythic heroic fantasy we're leaning into. If there's an understanding both ICly and OOCly that going to serve with the Orders leads to a better life and the payment to the family is to recompense them for the lost labour then we're okay with it.

We are breaking with the modern George R R Martin tradition of a crapsack fantasy world and going back to the Old Master!


For what it's worth Leofric is objectively both materially and socially advanced for having joined the Holy Orders. I'd say under normal circumstances, a better life is almost certainly the idealized intent of both parties but obviously the civil war in Jugkrai isn't exactly situation normal, being as it is a frozen land having spent the last 50 years fallen under the shadow of literal evil... and there's a civil war on.

Leofric's character is something of a dialogue with Tolkien's conception of good vs evil.
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@RevNorv
Like the app. What we're wondering about is what, exactly do you want Ardashir to be able to do? We just want to be sure he isn't outside of the broad power level of other characters.

@InfamousGuy101
Overall we like the app but there's a few things we aren't super keen on.

Breath of Eruherion - Eruherion is the deity. Why would they worship its breath? The Prathmava aren't supposed to be a primitive/superstitious people: they've just chosen not to settle. They come across as quite superstitious in some of what you have written, particularly around the curse (which isn't an actual curse?) though I am open to this being a particularly superstitious tribe that Jair comes from.

As for the powers of Jair's horse. It's a bit much. From a mechanical perspective I don't want the healing involved as it diminishes the role of healing characters, such as the @enmuni's character. I'm also not keen on the 'whispering storm' stuff - it looks like a Fomorian power set: those are the baddies. It also takes away from the distinctiveness of magical characters. If you stick to it being a faster, stronger, intelligent horse with a supernatural, psychic bond to Jair, that's cool.

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Like the app. What we're wondering about is what, exactly do you want Ardashir to be able to do? We just want to be sure he isn't outside of the broad power level of other characters.


Part of why I wrote the bio from the perspective of a different character, based on somewhat unreliable hearsay, is that I wanted to preserve some wiggle room in that regard; so it's certainly not my intent for Ardashir to be overpowered, and I'm happy to calibrate his abilities based on the atmospherics of the IC. In general, I intended him as a jack-of-all-trades type: good with a sword, but probably not as good as Leofric; a talented physician, but probably not as gifted as Siobhra; a competent mage, but probably not as powerful as a dedicated magical character; and so on, and so forth. Where he would really shine is (1) in his versatility, and (2) as a scholar, which is why he is so versatile - Arda is good at a bunch of different stuff fundamentally because he is good at learning itself, and this makes for a well-rounded Renaissance man. As I said, I'm very happy to adjust the details of what that looks like in practice, in order to ensure a balanced party of characters.
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Oh grand... I did actually read that as exaggerated hearsay, but thought I should check... consider Arda accepted!
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