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@Eklispe

Hi there, since I'm here now, I'll leave a review of your character.

- The first and second paragraphs of his personality are conflicting in some points, like. He's eager to make friends, but also walls people off? That seems like a counter productive behavior that, while not impossible to consolidate *cough*Hedgehog Dilemma*cough*, would require more explanation as to not make it look like he's a mad man.

- I would suggest a more portable instrument, because something that big will likely cause you trouble sometime, but that's just a suggestion, you don't have to take it if you don't want, just be aware of my note.

- I didn't got how his weapon works, a clarification might be needed.

- As far as power goes, I think it's fair, but I don't see how the dampening power can escalate with time, it should be powerful the louder he sings.

- On the Spirit, the first power is mostly ok, but there's an inconsistency. A core should be a rigid center (otherwise it's just more goo, defeating the point of having a core), thus she shouldn't be capable of completely bypassing any place where her core doesn't fit.

- For her second power, I just want to say that she can only absorb things that count as Earth matter. That is, earth, sand, rock, minerals, metals, etc. She' not able to able absorb any other matter, specially organic matter, considering that she's a lump of mercury. By the way, increase her weight, if she's human sized and made of metal she should be much heavier than a person, at least 3 times.

As always, you should take into consideration anything that @TheWindel and @Lonewolf685 might have to add. I'm waiting for a reply.

See ya.
@Alina13

OK, now that I'm free, I'll submit opinion on your Josiah.

- First, his personality is indeed paradoxical, mostly, how can he be calm and collected and paranoid at the same time? Both traits are kind of mutually exclusive, perhaps if you elaborate a bit further, we can understand him better.

- Second and most important, you need to clear his powers up, since they have no synergy between them/are too exaggerate. You should chose between the pressure manipulation and the sound manipulation, you can expand either one to compensate the loss, with say flight/a sonic shock wave, or whatever you can come up with, but make it more well cohesive. Also, breathing in any air pressure is different than breathing if there's no air, just mind this.
@Alina13

Well, I'm at college now so I can't elaborate on my ideas too much. I'll give a proper review once I get back home, but most of what I think boils down to @Lonewolf685's comment, replying to it is half way to help us.

@TheWindel can day what they think as well of they want to.
Bump*
Bump.
I'm just waiting a few more time, to see if someone will reply, but I guess I can write a posts whenever you guys want or in a day or two, if no other reply comes within this time.
@KoL
Why would she need mints?


Because they are tasty?
@RiverMaiden

Sorry for the delay, I just got back home from college. Anyway, I think it's mostly fair, though I think it'll be counter productive for long range transportation. Dismissing a Spirit is instantaneous while summoning requires quick refrain that basically doesn't consume time as well. I just hope your character has lots of mints on her, she'll need it...

@Deadnaut

Like @Lonewolf685 said, you seem to be missing the opportunity of a more diverse power set, not that you are obliged to have one if you are content with what you have, mind you. It's just a friendly reminder of us GMs in case it escaped your sight. Other than this, I'm ok with Aura as of now, if @TheWindel also thinks so, you ca post her CS as soon as you wish.
@KoL@Lucius Cypher@Jedly

So I'm trying to meet up with you guys. I hope my post was OK


I appreciate that, specially since I was kind of running out of things to do at the moment. I'll probably meet her on my next post, if possible.

@KoL, @Lucius Cypher

I'm leaving it up to you two to handle the war front while I work with @Ryonara in ending this nightmare.


Acknowledged, I guess I'll see what I can do.
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