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@vFear That's what's supposed to happen. :) The same person cannot make a Servant for his Master, and vice versa.

Sure! He'd have to be an associate though, but they get action as well.

Well, spying and stealth is not something everyone does, now is it? :P

@Ploxerdon They can be people who have lived or they can be from famous literature, like King Arthur or Gilgamesh. While I wouldn't prefer Jack the Ripper as a Servant, anyone that falls underneath that bracket is viable.

@SeaFoamDaisies Oops! One more thing:

Storm Guardians don't really use upright swords. Those are usally reserved for Rain Guardians (think of Yamamoto, Squalo, and the first generation Rain Guardian). Storm Guardians use projectile weapons, or weapons you can throw. Gokudera used explosives, Bel used wires and knives. A sword on a Storm Guardian doesn't make sense. ^^

@TheUltimatum Now that is a good sheet. Short and simple, but high quality and unique. Accepted!

@SeaFoamDaisies Thank you for your cooperation and understanding~

I see that two out of the three issues has been pointed out and understood. But about the history... by removing her aunt's affiliation with the Vongola themselves, I believe that the issue is settled. I just thought that her aunt was affiliated with the family, but did not give any details on to how she was affilated. So accepted!

@edgeout We don't need a novel for your character sheet. What we need is for you to explain things more thoroughly. Like... I would like to know more about his eye power! :) The way you explained it doesn't really, well, describe it, so it's a little confusing. We can't tell if it's OP or not. This is not an advanced RP-- it is casual, but we would like for you to make a character sheet that properly explains everything rather than leaving somethings vague. ^^

@SeaFoamDaisies I like the effort you put into your sheet. I can tell you put a lot of time into it, and for that, I smile. I simply can't make my form that in depth. ^^

Okay, time for the critiquing part. As Rain said, I hope that I do not offend you or seem like a jerk when I critique your sheet.

First of all, I would like to say that not every character has to start out knowing combat skills or knowing someone who is part of the Vongola or is part of the Vongola themselves. We'd like some variety in our characters! ^^

Second of all, the format is a bit strange. The headers and all are nice, but for some reason so many spaces and the centering makes it a little hard on the eyes. While it really isn't that noticeable in the personality section, it's more prominent in the history section. Maybe it would be better if you just formatted it without the headers.

Third of all, the history part is a little confusing. Especially the Aunt Sara part, which is a little too condensed and is a little all over the place. Miya really shouldn't have an understanding of her abilities-- Gokudera did not start out with Storm flames in the beginning of the anime even though he was part of the Vongola. 

That;s about it!

People may choose who and what they want.

Link to the RP.

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