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MALCOM BLYTHE, CAPTAIN OF THE KINGSGUARD

MALCOM BLYTHE

CARA BRUME, SORCERESS OF THE PALACE

CARA BRUME

LOGAN STONE-SHATTER, ELDEST OF THE MOUNTAIN-BRAVE

LOGAN STONE-SHATTER

RUFUS DAURIAN, COMMANDER OF THE WARDENS

RUFUS DAURIAN

COUNT SYLQUEN, OF HOUSE KARNEL

SYLQUEN

ORAMIR, HOUSECARL OF HOUSE KARNEL

ORAMIR

GIDEON BHURKE, IRON CHANCELLOR

GIDEON BHURKE

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@Mao Mao Hillan and I have had a lengthy discussion and at a minor impasse. Something still feels off about the biography to me, while I appreciate you did address a lot of the initial issues we presented to you on first review, but Hillan likes it, and we both agree that the end product of the sheet - ex-tribal turned ex-warden searching for his desert heritage - is one we like.

So I'm deciding to give you the benefit of the doubt somewhat and accept Gil's revised sheet, as I can't actually put my finger on what it is that's bothering me about the biography, and the rest of your sheet is fine, and I'm halfway there to liking the cohesive whole anyway. So welcome aboard! Chuck him in the characters tab when you get the chance.

@Thrash Panda Hillan and I have also discussed Alden. We like the character but both feel that against the current roster, he stands out a bit and feels like a traditional hero figure among a bunch of survivors, outcasts, exiles, and general non-heroic characters. We think Alden would be a better fit if we agreed to cap his biography at just-after the mine collapse, keeping the disfigurement and devoutness to the Church, but dropping the specialized armour, the bounty-hunting agent angle, and the ceremonial weaponry. We like a disfigured ex-mine worker turned devout worshiper, and feel like that iteration of this character is a better fit than the current final product of the sheet, which feels a bit 'Dungeons&Dragons'-y, if that makes sense.

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Thank you @Mao Mao, Hillan and I will review and discuss the resubmitted sheet tomorrow.

With the current accepted roster plus the 2 awaiting review we’re currently at a potential 10 characters, which is where Hillan and I feel we should cap applications to keep the game manageable. It’s been wonderful having this much interest at all, but for now I am closing the game to new character submissions. If we have any deaths, drop-outs, or the state of the game changes to comfortably allow a larger roster we will review and re-open applications but for now, if you’ve not submitted a character, you’ve missed your window.

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@Tackytaff Shyria is in! Put her sheet into the character's tab when you can.

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@DinoNuts Roderick is accepted! Sling him over to the characters tab when you can.

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Waiting on a few more applications that I know are in the works but I'm hashing out starting details with Hillan behind the scenes. The playerbase seems to be geared towards independent starts if I'm correct? So I need to work on the best way to achieve that within the setting.

Hopefully at some point this week?

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@Jamesyco First and foremost I want to thank you for your interest and for taking the time to draw up a character sheet. Unfortunately, after some discussion, Hillan and I both feel like Gothic, while appreciated, isn't a great fit for us, and the current games you're in aren't at the Advanced level that I'm looking for for Blighted Kingdom.

We're really grateful that you were inspired enough to apply at all, and we're sorry that you didn't find any success this time.

@Nib, @BlackBlood, @Lord Wraith, and @Stitches: Aldo, Lan, Úlfr and Alice respectively are all accepted. Feel free to move them over to the characters tab!

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@Roman well I've not finished it as I'm waiting for a response to my question

@Sep

I'm sorry, I mistook your last message for a statement. I've just shot you a reply now.

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@Roman Do you wish me to make the rest of the sheet then submit it, or am I better waiting for PM response?

@Sep

If your sheet is finished, submit it here so Hillan can see it as well.

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@Mao Mao Hillan and I discussed your sheet and both agreed that while the final concept - Sychan Tribal forcibly conscripted into the Wardens - is a great angle, we find the backstory a bit messy. To me personally, with the added context of the PMs, it feels like you approached me with a core concept, and then layered on top every suggestion I made in order to sort it for the game, and then you could play the original character regardless.

For instance, you came to me asking about hybrids, whereupon I suggested animal reverence, and then you've had your character and their tribe mistaken for hybrids in-universe anyway. Your backstory also feels contradictory at times; born as an orphan into the Wardens but brought up with knowledge of the tribe's culture anyway - the Elders (Khemrin elders?) being discovered but not punished - the original tribe approaching the Wardens for assimilation, but being first-generation Wardens?

We both agree that the core pillars of the character are great. Sychan Tribal, separate from Eerum? Great. Ex-Warden, blacklisted and exiled? Great. Rediscovered cultural heritage of animal worship, bringing a forgotten rival to the dominant religion of the Barbed Church? Great. All of these thrown into a cooking pot together without really straightening them out together, making the biography feel like your initial ideas with my PM suggestions layered haphazardly on top? Not so great.

There's a final-product-Gil here that's an excellent tribal making his way back into the world to save what remains of his lost culture, but it needs a bit of sanding and polish to make him really shine and clarify who he is and what he's striving for. Some streamlining would go a long way.